I think I would hide out in the kitchen too if my cousin made me fo in my Jam Jam's. lolAuthor's Response: lol me too Report Review
Hello there! My name's Molly, and guess I'll just start off by saying that I love next-gen fics. But every time I read a next gen fic my review starts with the same warning - don't allow it to get cliche. Not saying that you've done so, because this was really quite cute, but with Scorose especially, next-gen fanfiction can tend to fall into a very limited amount of categories, and sometimes they all begin to seem like the same fic, which makes them a bit less interesting to read.
Again, I'm not saying that you've done this. Your characterization of Rose was quite nice, and Albus was funny, but when writing a fic like this it tends to be almost a guarantee that it could become overdone, so just always remember to stay unique ;)
Now to your story in particular - I'll say it once more, Rose was really very cute. I like seeing spunky, sassy Rose that gets written often, the fiery redhead who is so often reminiscent of her aunt, but sometimes I think that that can be, again, overdone. So I love the Rose that you've written, still with that bit of Weasley attitude, but very much like her mother and a little more toned down. It's a refreshing change, and something that, to me, makes the Scorose pairing more believable. Another reason why I could never believe Draco and Ginny as a ship - they were too volatile and simply didn't make sense. And that can happen with Scorose when Rose is that touch too angry/snarky/whatever, so I quite liked this version of her.
On to minor details. This was, for the most part, mistake free, so I commend you on that! I'm terrible at proofreading my fics for grammar and things like that, so I always commend an author who is able to make everything so much neater and easier to read XD Now, this might be me just being super picky, but I'd go back and fix the spacing of your paragraphs. Double spacing is always good, but the extra amounts of distance between each line of dialogue made it sort of difficult to follow, and at parts felt a touch disjointed. Just a suggestion, of course ;)
So, in summary; just watch for cliches, because they can sneak up on you, and I hate to see a great and unique next-gen fic being convoluted by overdone plot lines, cheesiness, etc. Keep up the good work with Rose's characterization, and (I don't think I mentioned this) Al and Scor as well. Al was super cute, and even though Scor only had one line it made me laugh XD Just like his father, the poor thing. Finally, maybe just touch up the spacing if you want, but feel free to ignore me otherwise - again, just a suggestion, and a personal preference, nothing more.
xx Molly Report Review
So far, I like it. I like Scorpius's sense of humor. He uses what people expect from him as a joke. I paid alot of money for that unicorn milk, and you spilt it, now I'm going to have to hire more confirmed virgins to aquire some more. Love it!
See you next chapter!Author's Response: Lol, thanks so much! I'll get on it. :D Report Review
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