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Nice touche with Hugo, but I am bit disappointed to see that it looks like the 'cousins' aren't going to like this.
I do like the idea of Scorpius as a nice kid. It can't have been easy for him at first, with so much to overcome.
Again, you're a bit rushed. Slow down and bit and savor a few details. No one will mind!
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Again, good story idea and I look forward to seeing how you resolve it all.Author's Response: Thank you for your feed back
I always enjoy reading about this idea, and what will happen with both dads find out. Of course, the cousins would all be in uproar - or would they? By this time, I'm sure there's enough unwritten backstory on Scorpius for them to decide. I note that Albus is his friend, so it makes me wonder if it will be that bad.
2 critiques - it reads a bit rushed. Don't be afraid to add more to it.
Next - how did a Ravenclaw First year get to Hogsmeade, unless he/she lives there and had to go home for an emergency? You have to be 3rd year, I believe.Author's Response: Now that Voldy has gone Moldy
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If you give 5 reviews i will post the next story Report Review
Good job I officially loved itAuthor's Response: thank you so much Report Review
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