I love your writing style and I love this story. It is gentle and nice and real and saddening at the same time and I enjoyed reading it very much.Author's Response: Thank you for being wonderful and for understanding the story so perfectly. I am very glad you enjoyed it. Report Review
I love the ethereal quality of this fic; everything's so passing, and both Scorpius and the girl know that. Her namelessness, the constant references to death (like the bird, and the train scene), and even that last line of her lips "surprised that they were not still warm", they make the story more momentary.
It captures the fading light so beautiful. It makes no attempt to beguile the reader into believing that things are permanent, but rather ever-changing, and all one can really do is relish the moments as they happen.
Thanks for the good read! And I'm still absolutely astounded by your beautiful chapter images and banner.Author's Response: You're right, the idea of a fleeting first love and the memories and moments of youth are meant to be simple passing elements in one's time. I liked the idea of death being intertwined with the story, so good job picking that up. You've really captured the story perfectly, and for that i am grateful. Thank you very much, i cannot honestly say that enough. Report Review
Hello again! I like it so far - it has a nice rhythm to it, I don't know if it was intentional or not, but it's almost like the calm ebb and flow of the sea.
Anyway, I like the visuals you've created, that distant experience (as though the viewer were only partially privy to the girl and Scorpius' story, as though they were watching them through a set of binoculars).
(P.S. Once again, beautiful chapter image!)Author's Response: You're very good at analyzing texts, you've pointed out quite a few points that I didn't even notice, and i wrote it! Again, thank you very, very, very much. Report Review
Hello! I was instantly drawn in by your beautiful banner (and chapter image). It's intriguing, and I'm not sure where it's going but I'm eager to find out.
The repetition of "the girl" is a little difficult; I don't know if it works for the flow of the chapter, but it's only one reader's opinion . ;)
As I said before, I like the intrigue. The almost minimalist descriptions, no dialogue at all, actually set up a really nice atmosphere, so don't fret too much about it. :)
Onto the next chapter!Author's Response: You're so lovely, thank you. I'm glad you grasped the concepts and ideas of the story, i am very pleased indeed. Thank you so very much for reviewing every chapter, as a 'writer' it makes me feel absolutely wonderful to see someone as kind and generous as you reading my stories. Report Review
you write beautifully :)Author's Response: Thank you, i'm truly flattered - glad you like it. Report Review
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