i love this story so much! is it going to be all in first year through to seventh or is it going to skip some?? xAuthor's Response: It's going to be first year through the seventh but some of the years won't be as long-drawn as others. I'd try not to make it too long and boring. I'm in a process of revising and rewriting old chapters, so I'd probably be posting the rewritten stuff soon.
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Dun dun dunn awesome update soon!Author's Response: Thanks! ;** I'm currently writing the third chapter, it should be up soon. Report Review
Nice Job :) Looks to be quite interesting...Author's Response: Thank you! ;* I'm glad you like it :) Report Review
Good beginning. I like your original character. She fits in with the Mauraders well. A few typos and errors in grammar...they are a slight distraction. You would benefit from a good beta reader. It's the story that's important, though, so keep on going!Author's Response: Hey! First, thanks for reviewing. Second, sorry for those mistakes, I know they distract from the story. I'll go back and fix what I find but I'd have to find a beta because English is not my first language and I'll probably make more mistakes as the story goes and I don't want people to give up on my story just because of that. I'm so glad you like the story and I hope you like the rest of it. I'm uploading the second chapter today, so yeah.
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Interesting. I'm curious though, is this a Sirius/OC or a Lupin/ OC! It's leaning towards the latter in my mind.Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing! It's definitely Sirius/OC. Remus and Grace have a purely platonic relationship and through them, I want to show that yes, those do exist between boys and girls.
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I like this story. Most of your portrayals are accurate, and the minor mishaps are Gina that are easily over looked. I, someone who isn't a big fan of pre-Harry stories, am delighted with this. You're doing fantastic. I'd warn though to make sure that your main female character doesn't turn into a Mary Sue! Keep p the good work!Author's Response: Hey! Thanks for reviewing.
I will go back and reread it again so I can fix the mistakes but I'll have to find a beta reader, cause English isn't my first language and those mistakes might be more frequent. I hope not though! As for Grace, I try to make her as real as possible and I don't think she is a Mary Sue, although you people will judge.
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It sounds like you've got a good plot going. I'm curious to see what happens next! You should watch your grammer like here:
"Man, I ate so much that if I took a dip in the Lake, I will hit the bottom right away." James groaned as they joined the flow of students exiting the Great Hall.
"We all will." Grace muttered as she rubbed her full stomach. She suspected magic was involved. She literary couldn't stop eating, it was so delicious. They must have put enhancement on the food.
I think it would sound better if it was:
"Man, I ate so much that if I took a dip in the Lake, I would hit the bottom right away." James groaned as they joined the flow of students exiting the Great hall.
"We all would." Grace muttered as she rubbed her full stomach. She suspected magic was involved. She literary couldn't stop eating, it was so delicious. They must have put enhancement on the food.
See what I mean?
Anyway, I'll be adding this to favourites so I won't miss anything! Sirius is my favourite character so I'm enjoying this!
8/10 :)Author's Response: Hello! First of all, thanks for the review!
I'm posting the new chapter today so expect it soon. I'm so happy you liked it and that you favourited it, it means a lot.
I don't know how I missed that, it's definitely the better option. I've got to go back and check it out but I'll probably have to get a beta because English is not my first language and I'm bound to make mistakes like this or even some more fatal.
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