I swear I am going to faint. It's soo good that you are have updated again I was really expecting it!
It's kindda suspicious that Lydia's mum brought her sister I am sure she did it on purpose!
And hey, what about Lydia's brother? I kindda miss him.
Anyways, please keep on updating love your story!
R.WAuthor's Response: Thank you so much! Don't worry. I haven't forgotten about Mark, you should see him next chapter! :) Thanks for reviewing and hang on tight, things are about to get interesting :) Report Review
updateupdateupdate!!! i love this so far and i can't wait to read more! :)
~MAuthor's Response: HAHA! It's coming, I promise! :P Report Review
feeding the hungry review box because i just wanted to say that i love this story so far and that you're a great writer!
~MAuthor's Response: Thank you so much! :) Report Review
i really like this so far! your main character seems interesting and not the typical james potter fan-girl, which i really like!
I'm going to keep reading, but i just wanted to say i like how this is going :)
~MAuthor's Response: Thanks! I really wanted Lydia to be unique, her squib-ness is investigated later :) Report Review
Loved it! (a very useful comment hein!?!)Author's Response: Don't worry, I love all of your reviews! :) Report Review
OMG i want Lydia and James to get married but i don't think that's gonna happen :(
10/10 this time, and as always, best chapter YET.Author's Response: HMMM. Maybe if you stick around long enough... ;) Thanks again! Report Review
Poor Lydia! Best chapter yet (i keep saying that so it's great!)Author's Response: Thanks! This was a good one too! :) Report Review
Me again, this was my favorite chapter! You know what i think about your story but i'm gonna repeat it anyway: Love it! :)Author's Response: AH I know! Me too! :) Thanks again! Report Review
It is short but love it!Author's Response: Thanks for all of your reviews they totally made my day! :) Report Review
Read the first chapter and i love it! I am gonna continue reading!!!Author's Response: I am so glad you liked it, thanks for reading! :) Report Review
have you seen that video of the cat and it's tail gets scratched and it makes a weird noise?
well, that was the noise I just made. :p I'll link you on Twitter. :p
They're so ADORABLE EEEK
And WHEN WILL HE TELL HER THAT HE'S ACTUALLY JAMES POTTER SIIIGGGHHH
anyway, I LOVED THIS CHAPTER, IT WAS ADORABLE AWWW
(meow meow meow)Author's Response: LOL. Thanks Kayla, your the best... I'll go watch that video :)
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...that was so CUUUTE. i think i liked the park bit the best.
i cant wait for her to find out that he's a potter :D
till next time
lOonyAuthor's Response: Thank you so much! It will all be unveiled in the next chapter! :) Report Review
Often when I read a story with such short chapters I tell the author to 'add more description' to try and lengthen out the chapter or even to 'add more inner thoughts.' With this story, however, I am actually enjoying the short length! You manage to add a lot of feeling and emotion to Lydia's character, and a lot of personality, too, in such a short space of time. I think that is a great skill to have!
I liked this chapter - though it made me reminisce about Christmas and the nice, long holidays which was not good. I love these strange little encounters which Lydia and James keep on having, and I'm looking forward to seeing how their relationship develops.
Courtney:)Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review, I really appreciate it! I am so glad you like Lydia and James, it gets better as we go! :)
Thanks again! :) Report Review
This was a short, but very lovely start to your story. It was very light and easy to read, which is always nice, and definitely made me want to read on.
I like the way you introduced your OC, with the fact that she is afraid of commitment and that all her dates have been meaningless...that definitely adds a nice dynamic to the story and the line: 'Until I met him' fit perfectly!
You switched tenses quite a bit in this chapter, but it wasn't too disrupting. The scene between Lydia and James was short and sweet...and the slight cliffhanger at the end was a great way to end this chapter.
Nice job! I also apologize for this probably completely unhelpful review.
Courtney:)Author's Response: Thanks so much! It totally was helpful, don't worry! :)
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One thing that I definetly love about this story is the style with which you write. It's simple yet classy. I am also a HUGE fan of romance with a hint of comedy.
I can't wait to see how this story goes on.
UPDATE! UPDATE! UPDATE! UPDATE! UPDATE! UPDATE! UPDATE! UPDATE!
P.S: I have also updated mine if you want to read it.
Lots of Love.
Rose Williams.Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review, I am so glad you liked it! I'll be sure to head on over and catch up on your story too! Thanks again!
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Hi Camille! Iím here with your review, and I got a little too excited when I saw that you requested, as this story is just adorable!
Ooh I liked the beginning of this section; I think it was the part where you mentioned about her brother, as it really intrigued me! Well most of the beginning sections intrigue me, as there always so thought provoking and you want to know why itís like that.
Wah! James was just so cute and adorable! I wanted to ask him out as well. It was really sweet to see how nervous he was, as usually itís the girl in that position, not the guy. It was strange to see how cool Lydia was, and she didnít seem to be stressing out too much. I really like how youíve flipped it on its head, as it makes it more unique and special.
Then Lydia was so forward with him, and you could tell how much she liked him, and I was just yaying for her in my head! I felt so proud that she asked him in, as she is right it was now or never, and Iím glad that she chose the now option. Then another cute scene of them making dinner. Ha James is bad cook, thatís everyoneís excuse!
Again Lydia was really forward here, and I rather liked it as it was nice to see that for a change as I hate those boring OCís who wait for the guy to make the first move. Then more cute scenes of them drinking and playing music. I should stop more cute scenes, as this entire chapter was ridiculously cute, and it made me insanely happy to see that!
Then he was going to hug, and she high fived him instead. Come on Lydia, you said it yourself he was a great man, why refuse to hug him? Then James with the awkward talk about feelings, it fitted in really well with the chapter, and it made me want to hide behind my laptop due to the sheer awkwardness.
Haha then the ending, and everything was saved! More Lydia awesomeness with being forward, and I really like that sheís sort of getting over her commitment issues, as James seems like he wants to commit! Then next chapterís excited me already :D
Another lovely chapter, and it was no problem nominating you, as you really deserved SOTM!
-Kiana!Author's Response: EEK, you are just amazing. I love your reviews so much. I am so glad you liked the chapter, it took much too long, but I am really proud of it! :) Thanks again!
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AW! please tell me you are going to update soon i have been waiting a month! I really want to know why James doesn't tell her that he is actually James Potter.Author's Response: YES I AM UPDATING TOMORROW I AM SO SORRY, I'LL EXPLAIN IN MY AUTHOR'S NOTE, IT WILL BE UP BY MONDAY (as long as the queue still is short :P ) THANK YOU SO MUCH FOR THE REVIEW AND BEING FAABULOUS! :) Report Review
Hi m'dear! I'm really wanting to take this review a thon as a chance to read new authors that I have yet to explore, so here I am!
This is a short start, but it still gets across what you need and gets the reader curious :) which is perfect for a first chapter!
I think that you made a really good decision with setting this as the characters are older and out of school. It makes it original already, and I'm excited to see what grown up James is like.
I would suggest being careful with Muggle electronics. Not that I'm saying wizards wouldn't have any, but just try and get in a few details (eventually, when the time is right) about how he got curious in Muggle electronics and such.
I think having your OC dwell a bit on what the purpose of it was, before getting herself to get out of the mind frame was such a good touch. It's a very smooth way to show us that she really needs a change in her life.
This was a lovely first chapter!
JamiAuthor's Response: Thank you so much for the review! I just figured being in the 21st century or whatever, they would at least use computers and what not. :) Thanks again! Report Review
I really liked it. Again, great description and you somehow managed to bring the setting to life and what was happening through a very short chapter. You seem to have a talent for that!
Oh, and James has brown eyes, not blue. Just letting you know!
Anyway, there's not really much I can say besides the fact that I really enjoyed it.Author's Response: Thank you so much! I didn't realize that, I'll be sure to change it! Thanks! :) Report Review
Wow, this was a really short chapter and it felt a little rushed at the beginning. I do love the description though because it felt like I was walking down the street and I could feel the sun on my face.
Anyway, it was really great on the description.
You switched verb tenses sometimes but it didn't really disrupt the flow of the writing all that much so that's good.
It was a good first chapter.Author's Response: Thanks! Glad you enjoyed it. Report Review
Camille. I have been reading.
I don't know why I'm acting so formal when I'm usually HERP DERP I LUV CATS LOL XOXOXOXO TUMBLR IS FUN AND JOHN GREEN IS PERF.
Yes, ignore me. Please.
ANYWAY, I'M GOING TO START THE REVIEW! *HUZZAH* (jeesh that took a while to get to the actual review huh? :p)
Is Lydia a Muggle? A Squib? Or did she attend Muggle School? Although I don't know much about English schooling but I'm pretty sure (and this is courtesy of my English school friend) that people have sixth form and it's kinda like tenth grade and then they go to college/uni/or drop out for the last two years what Americans would call senior and what us Aussies call year 11 and 12.
HOWEVER I MIGHT BE WRONG BECAUSE I DON'T HAVE AN EIDETIC MEMORY LIKE SHELDON COOPER.
But, the main thing of that ridiculously long paragraph was: Is Lydia a witch?
Other than that, it was perfecto! I likey this a lot! :D This totally deserves the January SOTM!
10/10!Author's Response: meep. (AKA asdfghjkl; no go away. Meow meow meow, I don't even know this story was thrown together a while ago, and I didn't think of all the details! MEEP) But really asdfghjkl thanks for the review. You're too sweet.
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Hey it's patronus_charm with your review! Yay another chapter!
I was intriguid by the introduction to this, I wonder why Lizzie may have not finished university, and why Mark may have become a father, I hope that we find out later, as I hate not knowing something! I always find it so fascinating to see how much James changed Lydia.
I was so sad to see that Lydia had been ignoring James, despite the awful first date, he still wanted to see her which was adorable! It shows how lovely he really is, and I really like this James compared to the other James II's, he is by far the best, he's just so different to the other ones it's such a refreshing change, to see him as a more mature, and caring person, very much like Harry I guess!
I also like how you made Lydia, a normal, relatable person who does have several flaws! It just makes it so much nicer to to read, knowning that she is some superwoman, who can get all the guys, but in fact doesn't make the best decisions.
I felt sorry for Lydia opening the door to 'James Thompson', in her Hufflepuff t-shirt and shorts, especially after that awkward dinner date last time. Well maybe this will diffuse the tension, as he would have seen her in her natural enviroment.
A few CC's, you mentioned eye glasses at one point, it sounded a little odd to me, and I think if you just said glasses it would sound much better :) Also you said waiter once when I think you meant waitress, I hope you did otherwise I don't think Mark would be too happy!
Overall I thought this was an adorable chapter, and thank you for the little mention in the author note I feel very honoured, and I do hope you win :') I can't wait to see what happens next, with that cliff hanger ending!Author's Response: Thank you for the lovely review! Your just fabulous! It certainly will get much more awkward and silly but the chapter happens to be quite...romantic :) Thanks again! Report Review
Hey it's me, I'm so glad you love my reviews and I can be useful to you:D Anyway here's your review!
Hmm, the start immediatly interested me, because you mentioned restaurants and their menu's so it makes you wonder whether that will be the place for Lydia and James's first date. Then you found it is and it's just like 'yay I guessed right!'.
You could see how Lydia was deeply effected by these brief encounters with James, by how she gets so frustrated over the fact he hasn't called in 3 weeks. This was great as you could see how her feelings have matured over time for him which makes the story more believable on the whole.
I thought the date scene was great as nothing would have been perfected and all of the waiting for it built up Lydia'd dreams of how great it was going to be. Then you can tell as soon as James gets to the door how this is going to go downhill by what James is wearing.
The awkward tension of the date was great, you just didn't want to read on to see how worse it could get. The fact they are both magical and the other doesn't know it, is great, because you're left wondering if they both knew about the enormous thing they both have in common would the date go better or not?
I can't wait for the reveal scene of when she finds out that James Thompson is in fact the famous James Potter. I'm also interested to find out the reason for James living with his 'mum' whether it's true or if it's disguising something else.
Overall I thought this was great, as you really engaged the reader and left them guessing over the fate of Lydia and James's relationship and how it's going to develop next. I really, really like this story so re-request whenever you want as it's a really enjoyable read, Kiana :DAuthor's Response: hehe! My whole goal for this chapter was just to make their date as AWKWARD as possible. Cringing as much as possible. Total cheese. Because I do believe it is a HUGE setup for the rest of the plot. It's a metaphor for both of them.
Thanks for the reviews Kiana, I'm writing chapter 5 right now, and then I'll rerequest :) Report Review
When is shegoing to discover who James really is??? I loved it!!!
XOXO, NikkiAuthor's Response: .Soon, very very soon ;) Thanks for the review! :) Report Review
Hey it's part 3 ;)
Again I loved the part at the beginning as it shows she was quite a pessismt until a certain someone walked into her life ;)
Some slight confusion in this chapter. In the previous you say she's a Hufflepuff then in this one you say she attended sixth form. By this do you mean 6th and 7th year at Hogwarts or she did sixth form in a muggle school?
I noticed one small spelling errors Wales had an 'h' in it another than that the spelling was fine:)
I really thought this scene was adorable and how James wanted to cut in and Lydia being upset over her sister leaving. It's becoming a habit of James's to disappear straight after seeing her isn't it?;)
Overall I think this is a great story and I'll definitely read some when the next chapters are posted :DAuthor's Response: Aw! Thank you so much! It's so sweet of you to keep reviewing. I'm glad you liked it, and to be honest, I'm not British and that entire school system REALLY confuses me, so I will have to look into that :) Thanks again, the next chapter is in the queue, and I'll probably post in your thread when it's validated :) Report Review
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