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Review #1, by The_Crookshanks_Saga For the First Time

17th June 2014:
Do I detect... a One Direction fan, perhaps, Watson? I'm not a Directioner myself, but a friend of mine's got all the names memorized by heart so Christine Olivia Horan struck a bell.

This story... how do I explain... I like it. It's only the first chapter, but I can definitely say I'll be following it. Your style of wiring is classic and charming, and the way everything ties together is uncanny.

One problem is that the dialogue seems a bit stunted and unnatural, not at all like how eleven-year-olds would converse. Like, at least Emilia and Christine's talk to each other should be flowing, as they already know each other. But I'm sure this will improve with the chapters, as dialogue usually does.

If there's one other thing I'd like to comment on, it's the unnecessary detail. I mean, yes, detail is great, but much of the conversation in this was superfluous. I, personally, would have liked a bit of the Sorting in this and less of the introductions... BUT IT DOESN'T MATTER BECAUSE THE NEXT CHAPTER IS ALREADY POSTED YAY YAY YAY!

-Meena

Author's Response: Yes, Watson. Very good observation. :P I needed an Irish last name and that was the first one I thought of, lol. Thanks for the feedback, I know the dialogue's a bit funny (it's not my strength, but I hope it gets better). Sorry about the detail, I just have so much I want to say about my lovely OC and her relationships with the others and Hogwarts and everything! I'm glad you like it, I SWEAR I will put up the next chap soon. Now that I'm moved into school I will have way more time to write. And I finally got past my writers block. okay I'm rambling so I'll take my leave now, thanks for reviewing! :)

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Review #2, by Lauren Second Half Happenings

25th April 2014:
This story is so good! Hurry up with the next one, please and thanks :)

Author's Response: wow thanks! I am writing it as I type this haha :) It will be up very soon, don't worry.

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Review #3, by MinMcG Second Half Happenings

29th October 2013:
Yay!!! I'm so happy you updated!!!

Author's Response: Oh my gosh thanks! I didn't think anyone followed ALMNH that closely :) Next update will definitely be a lot faster than that one, just so you know!

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Review #4, by MinMcG Adventures in Sorting

8th September 2013:
Wow! that sorting song was amazing! great chapter!

Author's Response: Thanks! :) Hope you're enjoying the story!

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Review #5, by Emily Weasley For the First Time

20th July 2013:
I liked the first chapter of your story. I think it's constructed properly and well-written, but I did find it quite cheesy at times. Neverless, its a good chapter. Nice job! I'm betting Christine will be sorted into Griffindor.

Author's Response: Thank you so much! First year has to be cheesy :) As for Sorting, you'll just have to keep reading!

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Review #6, by Money_bagsD37 Time Flies (And So Do Brooms)

17th June 2013:
Really nice chapter! Can't wait for the next one

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm working on it right now, should be up within the next few days. :)

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Review #7, by HarryPotterGeek For the First Time

28th September 2012:
I really like it. You have proper puctuation and grammer and spelling, unlike most people, for which I thank you. countinue on it and i can't wait for the next chapter.

Author's Response: thank you so much! next chapter is currently in validation, i hope you enjoy it! :)

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