Hello there I’m here with the first of your three reviews!

I really liked the format of this story it kind of reflected Snape’s currently jumbled thoughts, and added to the confusion he must have been feeling.

I liked how much you referenced to the fact he didn’t have a great home life and that he was bullied, as I really do believe that Snape is a rather tragic character, and I was so glad to see that this was picked up on here, and it made me feel even sorrier for him.

You really showed what a complex character Snape was in this story, with him having conflicting views over the Evans sisters, and how even though he was called names by people he still did the same to them. Then the importance Lily held over him, and how that affection he felt for her overridden everything, it was a poignant moment.

I loved the timeline of how Snape and Lily grew closer. The scene with the doe and the stag was adorable and it made me aw, and how it was interconnected with their patronus forms was great. I also loved Lily’s determination that they will still be friends even though they were in different houses, as it shows how wrong she was.

The way you tied in canon facts into this story was great as it added so much to the story. I liked the idea about how affected Snape was by seeing Harry’s eyes, as that reflected the love you showed he had for her throughout the one-shot, and it was a really touching scene.

It was a really lovely one-shot!

-Kiana :D

Author's Response: Eeeek! Thank you so much for such an awesome review!

I've always really felt sorry Snape - he didn't have a good time at Hogwarts, or home, and his life was all in all quite depressing actually.

Snape is one of the most complicated characters in the whole book, I believe, along with Peter Pettigrew and a few others. Lily was probably one of the best things in his life, if not the best things, and I wanted to write how effected he was by Lily and Harry.

I always pictured Lily as a tiny bit naive when she was younger - especially towards Snape - and not understand how hard it is for Snape.

Thank you so much for such a long, lovely review - your reviews are always so nice and your compliments are so lovely.

~ Sophie :D

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Amazing!

I'd write a longer comment but I have to sleep (lol, but I couldn't resist just reading finish this story) and I'm just speechless with amazement and awe.

But I love this one-shot so much. :D

10/10

Author's Response: Thank you very much for having the time to review - and such a lovely review! Awh, that's so sweet of you! Very generous to give up some of your sleep-time as well - I could never give mine up!
You're awesome :)

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I am also a fan of Snape although his story before Potions Master is not the time of his life I like to read about very much.
You did capture much of what I thought he was like.

Author's Response: Thank you very much - Snape is very awesome isn't he!! :D

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So, here I am.

I think this is a beautiful one-shot. Some things to say though.

I doubt Snape would ever call the Marauders by their first names, let alone their nicknames.
A few typos here and there, misplaced capitals, nothing too major.

Other than that, I think this was good, and I enjoyed reading it! I would perhaps recommend having it beta read, precisely for the previously mentioned tiny mistakes? In any case, if you want on expert on Snape to give you her opinion, you should contact Rachel/TenthWeasley - she will be able to help you really tweak this, and I know she accepts to proof-read one-shots!

In any case thanks for asking me to read this, it was a lovely distraction from a dull essay on modernism :)

&hearts

Author's Response: WOO!
Thanks for reviewing - it is truly awesome and kind of you Val :)
I will take up your advice, thanks for being honest - this is such a lovely review!!
Thanks again VALDIMMIDUS CONRALIGUS SEFREOONA THE THIRD :D

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omg really good job I absolutly love it! 'Her silky flowing red hair, like waterfalls of fire' was my favorite line the whole story, but overall good job!

Author's Response: Thank you very very much, this review made my weekend! You deserve a really big hug, thank you so much for such an awesome review! :)

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