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Review #1, by TreacleTart A Magical Education

28th March 2015:
Hi Margaret!

Chapter two was a nice overview of the daily life at Hogwarts. I liked the little snippets of each class. It really gave me a feeling of what it would be like.

The different Professors you've come up with were quite interesting as well. I think Professor Jones was my favorite. I was happy to see her take a no nonsense approach towards teaching defense.

Seeing Neville as a Professor was lovely. He's one of my favorite characters in the series, so I'm always happy when he shows up. He seems naturally inclined to deal with students and definitely more confident than he was as a child. I also liked how he seemed to relate with Nathan's clumsiness a bit.

I had to chuckle when I started reading the part about their History classes. Professor Binns is as boring as ever! The way you described him as skipping over the interesting parts in favor of minute detail was perfect.

I also had a good laugh about Hermione sending directions to the library. That absolutely seems like something she would do.

I picked up on a few things which I think may be typos, but if it's just a difference in language forgive me. Unfortunately, I don't have a ton of experience with the different European versions of English, so occasionally I might read something thinking it's a mistake when in all actuality it's just a different way of saying something. I do really appreciate when you explain my mistakes in your response (like the so/there in the last chapter) because it helps me to learn new ways of saying things! So again, apologies in advance if that's the case in any of these.

"all anxious to find out what class they’d first." – they’d have first

"father'd said about his nakesake," - namesake

"which allows people transform into animals.” –people to transform

"Wow, this looks like being an interesting class.” – take being out

"you marry a Muggle, you’re allowed tell him." –allowed to tell

Another solid chapter! I look forward to reading more. I can't wait to see what types of adventures come across Albus and Rose's path.


Author's Response: Thanks so much for the review.

And yeah, I have recently heard that outside Ireland people do not say stuff like "allowed tell" or "allowed transform," so I'll change those. I am trying to make my characters sound realistically British, so please do continue pointing out things that don't sound right, like British people ending a comment with "so". I don't think it was a mistake for you to point that out, as Susan, being English, wouldn't say it that way.

I hope I didn't come across as defensive or offended in my response. It can be hard to indicate tone online but I do appreciate people pointing out those things, because I won't see them, as they read perfectly naturally to me. I think a lot of them are direct translations. We sometimes tend to speak English with Irish sentence structure, so it probably sounds a bit odd to everybody else.

I'm sort of making a point of showing Neville come full circle and support people who are having self-esteem difficulties or feel inadequate like he did.

I wanted to introduce the new teachers and give readers a chance to get to know them.

Hope you continue to enjoy this. As you can probably guess from the chapter titles, things start to happen around the end of chapter four or the beginning of chapter five. The first three chapters are basically introducing people and stuff.

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Review #2, by TreacleTart The First Night.

26th March 2015:
Hello again Margaret!

So I had originally planned to started reading The Rise Of The AWLS, but I saw that it was a sequel to this. Since I figured it would make more sense if I read them in order, here I am.

This was a nice opening chapter. I could really feel Albus' nerves about the sorting. I guess coming from a long line of Gryffindors, there's a lot of pressure on him.

The way that you've characterized him seems to fall right in line with the Albus we see in the prologue of the series. He's shy and nervous, but there seems to be a bit of sweetness to him. I like that. The insecurities really make him seem more relatable.

The only real critique I can offer this chapter, isn't necessarily going to be something that would bother most people, but since I work as a Chef, it stood out to me. I felt like the whole feast scene seemed really rushed. I would've loved some more thorough descriptions of the food instead of just a laundry list. I remember Harry's reaction the first time he sees the feast in the books and even though Albus is considerably more well fed than Harry was, it would still be quite spectacular to see so much food appear in front of you. I guess overall, I just left feeling like it was skimmed over and there was a lot of telling instead of showing. It was only specifically in that one section though. Everything else was deftly handled.

I really enjoyed seeing how Albus quashed Derek's fears about being a muggleborn. The reference to Hermione was a nice touch. I imagine in no time, Derek will be up to speed!

Another nice read! You really do do lovely work.


Author's Response: Again, thank you so much for the reviews.

Yeah, probably makes more sense to read these in order, as, apart from anything else, the first chapter of "The Rise of the A.W.L." spoils a major plot point to this.

I'm glad you think Albus seems in character.

Yeah, description isn't exactly my strong point and, if I'm honest, I actually forgot to mention them eating, and had to go back and edit it in. I might take another look at it sometime and see if I can expand on that, rather than skimming over it.

Thanks again for the review. If you decide to read on, I hope you continue to enjoy it.

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Review #3, by nott theodore The Slug Club.

13th March 2015:
Hello! I need to start reading more of this story so that I can catch up and read your WIP (although from the sounds of it, that will be completed soon as well) - I finally got a spare minute and my internet to work, so here I am!

Albus receiving those letters from his family was so sweet to read about! One of the things that I'm really enjoying about this story is the way that you've managed to take the few details we have about this generation from the Epilogue and use them to create believable characters in this story. The fact that James had convinced Albus that people hardly received letters at all in first year was something I'd almost forgotten; I loved the way that it seemed such a real fear for him, and something so serious if he got it wrong and looked silly in front of his classmates. It's something that people at that age can't help but worry about and think is one of the most important things in their time at school. You write characters of this age really well - they're very believable, and don't sound too young or too old for what's happening.

The letters, again, were great to read. You captured Harry's voice well in the letter that he wrote, I thought. I also liked the detail that he had argued with Ginny about who would be the one to write the letter to Albus, and that he really wanted to do it. I like the continuity of that connection we see in the epilogue, when Harry's the only one that Albus trusts with his fears and Harry's the one who reassures him.

Lily's letter was great, too - it definitely felt like a nine year old girl had written it, since there wasn't much tact involved in the content. Telling her brother that she'll be in Gryffindor and that she's bored without seeming to care much for him (although I'm sure she does) feel very typical of her age. I'm intrigued about whether she'll actually be in Gryffindor when she gets to Hogwarts now, though :P

The Slug Club was interesting to read - I really liked the fact that it was still going, but also the detail that you included about it being Slughorn's last year, and him intending to retire. Even he can't last forever, and he has been teaching since Tom Riddle was there... I like the idea of him waiting until Albus and Rose get to Hogwarts so they can be part of his connections, too.

It was great that Harry had warned Albus about what to expect from the Slug Club so he didn't go thinking it would be great - he knows that it's mostly boring but I liked the fact that we see at the end there are other students who don't know and think that it's exciting to be invited. Really, it's not a good idea to allow a club like that which singles people out on no merit other than who they're related to, but I can imagine Slughorn waving away whoever objected or pointed something like that out.

It's good to see, in a way, that James didn't get onto the Gryffindor team in his second year. I get so frustrated by stories when all the Potters and Weasleys make up the entire Gryffindor Quidditch team, so the fact that he's going to have to work to get on there at all is a nice change. I felt a bit sorry for him to be so desperate to get on the team that he'd suck up to the captain like that though.

“I always find school food so monotonous,” Slughorn said. “Do try the stuffed olives, Shacklebolt. I think you will find them most enjoyable.”
This was probably one of my favourite lines in the chapter - it made me laugh so much. From the way that Hogwarts food is described, the sheer amount of choice would prevent it from being monotonous, but trust Slughorn to like the finer things in life :P

I liked the appearance of Jordan Shacklebolt, and the way that he was being polite but that Albus recognised he probably wasn't that interested in being friends, since in school people do tend to stick largely to their own year groups rather than mixing with younger years - there's a big difference between fifth and first year especially.

I was glad the older students waited for the younger ones too - I have to admit that I wouldn't like to be a young Ravenclaw trying to answer the riddles without the practice and experience all the older students have!

Sian :)

Author's Response: Thank you so, so much for this awesome review. And yeah, the sequel is basically finished too. I have one more chapter to add, but it's really only stuff like exams and finishing up the term. The actual plot is really completed in the chapter I just posted.

I'm really glad you think Albus, Rose and their friends seem convincing as 11 year olds. I think 9-13 year olds can be hard to write, as they're not clearly little kids or clearly 'teens. But I do teach kids only slightly older than Albus and Rose - our secondaries start with the equivalent of Hogwarts 2nd years - so I guess I have that background. It's only so much help though, as kids act differently in class than when left to themselves.

I'll soon be writing Lily's sorting - not sure how many chapters it will take me to get through the summer holidays, but year three focuses a lot on Lily and her first year. Glad you liked her letter.

Yeah, even more than 2nd year, I'm avoiding having anybody make the team in first year, because canon makes it clear that's VERY rare and even Ginny was in about her fourth year when she made the team, and she ended up playing professionally. There will be a couple of second years who make teams, but I'm definitely not going to have all the Weasleys and Potters playing. Victoire, Louis and Lucy all have no real interest in playing and nor does Rose.

I think Slughorn said something along those lines in the books - I think about the food from the trolley, rather than the school food, but yeah, I'm not sure school food would live up to his expectations.

A large part of why I kept Slughorn in this story was just because I didn't want to introduce too many new teachers at once. So far, I have Jones, who is a canon character, but a very minor one, and Blackburn, who is a complete OC and I want to take some time to introduce them properly before bringing in a new Potions teacher.

But honestly, I was sorry to lose Slughorn at the end of this. He is SO brilliant for giving things away or for asking awkward questions that give things away. His interest in everybody's backgrounds and family can be very useful when you want to reveal something from somebody's background.

And yeah, 15 year olds don't generally befriend 11 year olds, except in the mentor/big brother/sister sense. Jordan is a nice guy, who's trying to be welcoming to the new kids, but that's basically it.

Thanks again for the review.

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Review #4, by nott theodore A Magical Education

6th March 2015:
Hi, here for our review swap! I was glad to get back to this story again!

I felt kind of sorry for Albus at the beginning of this chapter, as he started going towards the Gryffindor table automatically before his friends reminded him that he's in Ravenclaw. I can understand why that would be something more natural to him, especially with all the different connections he has to Gryffindor house that you mention in the opening section, but I think that he'll do well in Ravenclaw somehow. And I'm glad that he's got Rose with him to keep him company there too, as well as his new friends who seem really nice!

I love Rose's excitement about getting her timetable and knowing what classes they'll be having. It's just how I imagine her to be, but I like the way that she's absorbed so much information about Hogwarts and their lessons as well. It's also great to see things being explained to Derek as we go along, since from his position he knows a lot less about the wizarding world than the others, and it must be so overwhelming. It allows you to bring in small details and remind us of the wonder of Hogwarts.

It's interesting that, while so many people think that Albus is going to be just like his father, he can't possibly be since he's had a very different upbringing. It's clear that, even though he's not like Rose with all the information she's absorbed from Hermione, he still knows a lot about what to expect at Hogwarts and in the wizarding world in general. I like the fact that's so clear here because it's an important distinction between them, I think.

'She says those who forget history are doomed to repeat it' I can imagine Hermione saying something like this so clearly in my mind! And I love the way that Rose just parrots it at this point, but it really is true because we have so much to learn from history to avoid mistakes in the future. That's one of the reasons it's so annoying that Professor Binns still teaches at Hogwarts and nobody's interested in History of Magic because of it!

I really loved the different classes that we were introduced to in this chapter, too! I think it's a really good thing that you didn't try and include all of the different classes in just one chapter, as I think that would be overwhelming (even though the readers actually know what these subjects involve now), but what you wrote about here was really interesting and gave us a great insight into the sort of lessons that they'll be having.

Can I just say how happy I am that Hogwarts has finally got a good Defence Against the Dark Arts teacher? I'm so glad that the students are getting taught the important things that they need to know to defend themselves against dark magic, and that now the curse has been lifted on the position, they can actually benefit from the consistency of having one teacher take them through the course.

I was really pleased to see the mention of a Slytherin's father being a member of the Order of the Phoenix, too. I think it's so easy to imagine that the 'battle lines' would still be drawn between the houses and I think that there'd have been a massive effort to discourage that, and encourage unity, so this really reflects my post-war head canon.

I love Neville as a teacher! (I know what it's like knowing a teacher outside of school and not wanting to use their real name, though, so I can sympathise with Albus here!) He seems really nice and encouraging and I'm sure that Nathan probably reminds him a lot of himself when he was younger, so the poor boy doesn't need to be so embarrassed or down about dropping the plants. If they're not canon, the Bouncing Bulbs are a great invention, by the way!

Really, the sooner that Hogwarts find a way to get rid of Professor Binns, the better. Before long, it's going to be Rose teaching the rest of the class the things they need to know about History of Magic!

I love the fact that Hermione gave her daughter directions to the library at Hogwarts. That is such an Hermione thing to do! It's pretty sensible too, if you think about it - I don't remember reading in the books that they get a map or a tour of the castle, and I'm assuming there aren't signs everywhere, so it's a good idea to let Rose know where the library is so that she can actually find it!

I really enjoyed reading the conversation with Nearly Headless Nick, as well. I liked the fact that he wanted to have all the Potters in Gryffindor, almost as a sort of boast over the other ghosts I imagine (since I know he used Harry as a bit of a trophy at times), but I think it's good to show interaction between the ghosts and members of other houses, and I like the idea of there being a friendship between Albus and Nick too.

This was a great chapter, and I really enjoyed reading it!

Sian :)

Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review. I'm glad you enjoyed the chapter. It's still kind of introductory stuff, though there are already some significant things being hinted at.

Yeah, I think the epilogue kind of hinted that Albus already saw Gryffindor as the "family house", so to speak and that he was already identifying with it to some degree. It would be weird for him to be cheering against Gryffindor at Quidditch and stuff.

And YES, you've picked up on something that's going to be VERY relevant in this story - the difference between Albus's upbringing and Harry's. As the mystery develops, and in the following story too, there will be quite a few times where Rose and Albus look to Harry or Hermione or other adults for information, as unlike Harry, they have grown up believing adults can be depended on.

Oh, I could go on a rant about Binns and how anybody who doesn't respect the significance of mythology isn't much of a historian. I mean, historical sites have been FOUND as a result of myths. Even 12 and 13 year olds learn that myths and legends are a source for historians and archaeologists.

Yeah, I wanted to introduce the teachers, especially the new ones, and also their styles of teaching, because there are so many different ways of teaching. Neville is very much into practical lessons and learning by doing, whereas Jones is very knowledgeable and draws a lot on experience from the war and so on.

I...honestly didn't even really think about the significance of the son of a member of the Order being in Slytherin. I just thought the character would fit that house and his father is actually a canon character, Mundungus Fletcher. Mundungus strikes me as a possible Slytherin himself.

Can't claim credit for the Bouncing Bulbs, I'm afraid. I just googled to find something that would make an interesting first class. They are apparently mentioned in "Goblet of Fire."

Yeah, Nick wants Harry's son both as a boast and also because he was genuinely fond of Harry and wants to get to know his sons.

Thanks again for the awesomely detailed review. I do appreciate it.

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Review #5, by Pixileanin The Gryffindor Quidditch Team.

13th January 2015:
Hi! I'm back to read more of your story. Little Albus has me intrigued, so I wanted to know what he's been getting up to. Poor Albus and his house color confusion!

Oh hey, and Slughorn has returned to teach Potions again!

Haha! Albus’ brother pranks him here too, I see. Some things must be universal, like older brothers who like to pick on their younger, defenseless siblings. But James seems rather sweet later on. I’m glad he’s not as much into teasing Albus as that other James I know.

That was a lovely letter that Albus got from his dad, and it was sweet how he choked up a little and tried not to show how homesick he was, being reminded of home. It’s hard being away for the first time, and for so long.

I liked the way that you made the difference between Lucy’s father bragging so much about her achievements, and the way that Lucy acts. Still, it has probably rubbed off on her to be a little bit annoying. Sometimes people can’t help that.

It was very appropriate to throw in that suspicious vibe with Brian when Albus and Rose got to the pitch to watch the tryouts. It was awfully handy that Dominique was there to smooth things over. I like seeing these young characters have older family members to ease them into the transition of being at Hogwarts. Albus and Rose were cute, cheering James along during the tryouts.

Aww, and they get an unjustified detention on their first week of school. Albus is already living up to his brother's reputation, and he didn't even deserve it. And Rose too! I bet they were in the wrong place at the wrong time. Blackburn seems a bit fishy. I wonder what she’s got going on?

Author's Response: Really glad to see you back. Thank you so much for the review.

Yeah, Slughorn's staying around a while longer, so I can introduce new teachers gradually. I didn't want to bring in new teachers just for the sake of it, especially if I didn't have parts for them.

11 is SO young to go away from home for months on end. I know people I knew were upset enough starting college and we were 17ish and going home for weekends, so it was only 5 days at a time.

Brian takes Quidditch practice pretty seriously.

And yes, Albus and Rose DEFINITELY didn't deserve detention there. They were just in the wrong place at the wrong time. There'll be more about that in the next chapter, but I'll say no more about that now.

Blackburn has a pretty important part to play in this story. I won't say any more now except that I probably have more notes on her than I do on Albus or Rose. She has quite a lot going on, but it won't be revealed for a while.

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Review #6, by Pixileanin The First Night.

6th December 2014:
Hi there! I thought I'd come over and check out some of your writing. There was so much to choose from, and I really wanted to jump right into your current WIP, but I couldn't resist starting from the beginning, so here I am.

I love how this story starts right up after the epilogue of book seven. Poor Albus is so worried over his sorting, but then what magical kid wouldn't be?

"Albus jumped. He'd been so worried about being placed in Slytherin and so anxious for Gryffindor that he hadn't even thought of the other houses."

This was really great. I think I was just as surprised as Albus was when he found out which house he was sorted into. And then to see Lucy already there, we know he isn't alone. I loved how Lucy called him a Weasley, and then he knew exactly what she meant. :)

I'm happy you kept Rose and Albus together. They seem like they'd make a great pair and feed off of the extra security they would get from each other in tight situations. I also loved the little dig Rose threw out about Lucy, which I'm sure will make things interesting in their house. And ah, yes, James is a trouble-maker. This is fun!

Derek seems like an interesting character. I'd be missing technology at his age too. It's nice to see that the general attitude of the wizarding world has changed. But now I'm wondering if there are still some hangers on that may make life difficult for him. Though, it might just be that he's got a steep learning curve ahead of him. One of the things I enjoyed most about reading HP was discovering right along with Harry all the wonderful things about magic with him.

So then after Albus gets sorted and it turns out decent enough, and he's not separated from Rose, his new worry is that he's not smart enough to live up to his new house. Ah, the worries of youth! I'm sure he'll do fine.

This is a lovely start to the story. I don't read enough NextGen where the characters are young and inexperienced. I think that's where most of the magic happens, before they get caught up in 'other stuff'. You wrote the age quite well for my tastes, with everything looking fresh and new, and the general excitement/anxiety of being somewhere away from home. I really enjoyed this!


Author's Response: Thank you SO much for this review. It was really unexpected. And I do intend to catch up on Rabbit Heart. It's funny you reviewed this today, because seeing you'd a new chapter up had just reminded me I still haven't read your last one.

And yeah, while I personally prefer The Rise of the A.W.L. to this, it probably is a good idea to start here, since they do sort of follow on and some things The Rise of the A.W.L. might be harder to understand without having the background.

Oh yes! The wizarding world may have changed by this time, but it'll become increasingly clear across the series that not everybody is completely happy with that.

I'm glad you like the beginning of this story. Hope you continue to enjoy it.

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Review #7, by nott theodore The First Night.

20th November 2014:
Hi Margaret! I'm finally here for our review swap (I got caught up in a few unexpected things today, and then when I finally tried to post this my internet cut out, so I'm sorry it's taken me so long!) I've wanted to try and get to this story for a while now and I thought that this was as good a time as any to do it!

I thought that this was such a fantastic start to your story! For some reason, I can't remember ever actually reading a story like this one on the archives, that focuses on the next generation children from the time that they start Hogwarts, and I'm really glad because I was able to enjoy this as if I was reading the books again. Another thing I absolutely loved here was the way that it felt like it fitted in so well with the books - not only does it pick up as soon as we left off with the seventh book, but there's a return to the familiar scene and occasion and that makes me feel kind of nostalgic (if it's possible to feel nostalgia for a fictional world) and I couldn't help smiling straight away. It was also nice to get the sense that we're returning to some of the more innocent aspects of the earlier books with this story, since it's a much safer time.

I really liked the way that you opened this with Albus panicking as the Sorting approached. It makes a lot of sense to me that he'd be so worried - Harry was terrified, and he hadn't grown up with the same amount of expectation. Even though his dad did his best to try and allay his fears, I can imagine Albus being so scared at this point. I thought you did a great job of showing the way that the Sorting seemed to drag on and on for Albus, in his fear, without making it drag on for the reader, too!

Albus's thoughts during the Sorting were very believable and felt in character for him - at least, how I imagine him to be. At this point, we've only got his appearance in the epilogue to go off, so you've got a lot of freedom. I really liked the diversity in names of students that crept in with the first years' names being read out, too - especially the Irish that I spotted in there ;)

I did notice a couple of typos in that first part, though. Nothing major - just 'house' instead of 'hat' a couple of times, and a 'Gryffindor' that's missing the 'R', but if you wanted to edit them out I thought I'd let you know they're there.

Yay! Despite being a proud Gryffie, my head canon for Albus actually puts him in Ravenclaw, so I was really pleased to see him there! I don't know why, but for me he actually fits there better than any other houses. I liked the fact that he hadn't even considered the possibility of any other house but Gryffindor and Slytherin, but I get the feeling he'll definitely fit in with the Ravenclaws! It's great for him that he's got Lucy to help guide him through as well, and that Rose joined him in Ravenclaw. I get the idea that they'll stay really close friends through this story, and I'm glad about that.

Oh my goodness, do you have any idea what you've just done to me with those delicious descriptions of the food at the feast? To be honest, even listing British foods is enough to make me hungry right now, but I thought you really captured the sort of indulgence that I always imagine the start-of-term feast to be. It just seemed so Hogwarts-y to me.

I thought you wrote McGonagall very well here, even if she only made a brief appearance in reminding people of the rules. She seems to have taken a lot of her speech from Dumbledore, but why not when he was such a role model for her?

I liked the way that they all approached the Ravenclaw tower - because it's a different house to the one that Harry was in, I got more of a sense of excitement than I would have done if Albus had been Sorted into Gryffindor, I think. The riddle was really good too (although I found myself hoping that the door knocker is able to distinguish between first and seventh years). The descriptions of everything made me smile - I felt like I was returning to Hogwarts with Albus, and now this is making me question why I've not read more stories like this before, because this is giving me the chance to go back and start over with them!

From what I've seen of them so far, the other boys in Albus's dormitory seem nice! I liked the inclusion of a Muggle-born to remind us more of the sense of wonder and how overwhelming an experience like this can be, especially if you've not grown up expecting it to happen. I think it must have been nice for Albus to talk to someone who didn't know about his father, too.

One other aspect I thought you achieved really well here was capturing these children as characters. They're still only children, quite young at eleven or twelve, but at the same time you haven't written them too young. I find that balance hard to manage, so I'm really impressed by how much these characters seemed to fit in with their age and all we know about them!

This was a really great opening chapter to your story, and I'm hoping I can make it back soon to continue on (since there's plenty more of it to read)!

Sian :)

Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review. Hope you weren't up too late writing it. *grins*

Yes, while these are mysteries, I'm avoiding major warfare and Dark Lords, because I kind of feel that another war or another Dark Lord's rise would kind of take from the Trio's sacrifices. I like the idea of their having created a safer world for the next generation. So while villains exist in this series and may hurt individuals, there isn't going to be a whole society living in fear.

I tend to stick in Irish characters when I get sick of trying to think up British surnames. And I couldn't imagine Fionnuala being other than Irish or Scottish anyway. I also have a few references to Irish wizarding customs sprinkled here and there. Just for fun.

Have fixed those errors. Leaving out the "r" is rather typical of my spelling patterns.

My immediate thought for Albus was Hufflepuff actually, but I have an older story that predates both Half Blood Prince and Deathly Hallows in which a son of Harry's ends up in Hufflepuff and Albus reminded me a little of that character from the little I saw of him in the epilogue, so I thought if I put him in Hufflepuff, I'd end up basically writing the same character again. So then I thought I could develop a personality for him that worked with Ravenclaw. While you can't really tell from one or two conversations, especially since Albus was clearly in a situation where any child would be a little subdued when we saw him, but he didn't strike me as predominantly courageous or ambitious.

*grins* I remembered to say "bacon" rather than "rashers". To me "bacon" are the thick slices you eat with cabbage, whereas the thin slices you have for breakfast or with chips and sausages are "rashers".

I love next gen. stories because there is so much freedom. We don't know much about the characters' personalities and we certainly don't know what'll happen to them at Hogwarts or how the wizarding world has changed since the war. I've read some next gens. that have investigated how the wizarding world would deal with the advent of 21st century technology. In the '90s, "I'm going to boarding school and there's always a queue for the phone, so I'll probably only be able to write" was perfectly credible. In today's world, with mobile phones and the internet, not so much. I've sort of glossed over that, as my characters aren't particularly connected to the Muggle world and I don't have any good ideas in that way anyway.

The riddles get progressively worse as this series goes on. And I'm still only two terms through their second year! I am rapidly running out of ideas. This one is one of the best, I think.

I'm glad you think my characters are convincing for their age. It is a hard age to write, because they're not really children, not little children, any more, but they're not teenagers either and it can be hard to balance between not making them act like 15 year olds or 8 year olds.

Really glad you liked the opening chapter. Hope you get a chance to read some more and that you enjoy it. I know there is a LOT there. I think of the story as really starting at the end of chapter 4 or in chapter 5. The first three chapters are basically introducing the characters and so on.

Thanks again for the utterly amazing review.

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Review #8, by YourFan The First Night.

29th June 2014:
this is the first fanfiction I encountered that Albus was neither sorted into Gryffindor and Slytherine..

I always find it hard or to even think of Albus sorted in Slytherine.. He idolizes his father to much to be sorted in Slytherine..

and Albus being sorted at Revanclaw makes this a very interesting story.. i believe that it is very challenging to go in that direction of the story, but you did it effortlessly, so Congratulations!!

I think that you started the story admiringly :)

Author's Response: I had basically two reasons for having him somewhere other than Gryffindor or Slytherin. The first is that there are more than two houses, which he seemed to forget and I always feel that when a character only considers two houses, unless it's make clear they wouldn't fit the others, they should not end up in either of those two.

Also, from the little we saw of Albus, he did not appear either particularly brave or particularly cunning and ambitious. He seemed quiet, thoughtful, maybe a little insecure (although that may just be about starting a new school), slightly gullible. To be honest, my impression was that the house he'd fit best would be Hufflepuff, but I already wrote a story about Harry having a son in Hufflepuff, so I thought Ravenclaw was the next best fit.

Glad you liked it. Hope you continue to enjoy the story.

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Review #9, by Anon The First Night.

14th May 2014:
Well this is certainly awsome. I look forward to more :)

Author's Response: Thanks for the review. Glad you enjoyed it. Hope you like the rest.

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Review #10, by Teddy1993 Farewell Slughorn

3rd May 2014:
That was a nice chapter to finish with. I really enjoyed this story, from the very first chapter. Thank you for writing it!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for your continued reviews. Always nice to hear what somebody thinks.

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Review #11, by Teddy1993 Questions and Answers.

3rd May 2014:
Well, I certainly didn't expect that, but I guess it makes sense if she is family of Nott. I liked the motive you gave her. I can easily see why she would hold a grudge against the Potters and the Malfoys. Great ending to a great story. One more chapter to go and then it's time for the sequel. :)

Author's Response: Glad you like the revelation.

I don't think many people figured it out in advance. A lot of people appear to have been surprised. It's hard for me to tell how obvious things are, because of course, I know which hints are important and which are red herrings.

Hope you enjoy the sequel as much.

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Review #12, by Teddy1993 Rose's Plan.

3rd May 2014:
Great chapter. I can't wait to find out how this story ends.

Author's Response: Next chapter now will tell you most things. Glad your enjoying it and hope the ending doesn't disappoint.

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Review #13, by Teddy1993 The Destruction of the Universe.

3rd May 2014:
I laughed at that last sentence :D Great job on the Quidditch final. Good job!

Author's Response: Glad I made you laugh.

Wouldn't it be hilarious of Filch had painted the graffiti himself, when he threw such a fit about it?

Thanks for the review.

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Review #14, by Teddy1993 Easter.

2nd May 2014:
I may be wrong, but I thought Muggles were able to get onto Platform Nine and Three Quarters? I'm not sure, but I think I remember a part during Snape's memories where Lily's parents and Petunia were there to see Lily off to school. Anyway, it doesn't really matter to the story and it's not really a mistake in canon. Just thought I'd point it out. Great chapter, by the way. I was kind of surprised when Scorpius wrote to Rose. Only four chapters left...

Author's Response: I must check that out about Muggles accessing Platform Nine and Three-Quarters. It's something I'm never entirely sure about. Thanks for pointing it out.

Yeah, only four more chapters and the last is really just a finishing-up sort of thing. You'll find out most of what's going on in Questions and Answers. I say "most" because there is one piece of information that remains to be revealed in chapter 1 of the sequel.

Scorpius is very anxious to find out who damaged him broom. It means a lot to him.

Thanks for your continued reviewing.

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Review #15, by Teddy1993 Eleanor Lockhart.

2nd May 2014:
Good chapter. I don't really think Lockhart's niece has anything to do with it, but you never know... Great writing!

Author's Response: Thanks for your review. I LOVE hearing people's theories, partly because it tells me if I'm giving enough information, or too much and partly just because it's fun to see how people who don't know how it's going to end interpret things.

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Review #16, by Teddy1993 Piecing the Jigsaw Together.

2nd May 2014:
Great chapter. I'm looking forward to the revelation of the story.

Author's Response: The villain is revealed in the second last chapter, so you've about five chapters to go. *grins* Hope you like it.

Thanks for all the reviews.

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Review #17, by Teddy1993 The Malfoy Dynasty.

2nd May 2014:
Scorpius seems to be quite alright, although it's rather clear that he is a Malfoy when you look at his behaviour and the way he talks. Great job!

Author's Response: Thanks for the review. Scorpius doesn't exactly have an easy time, considering the way his family is now viewed.

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Review #18, by Teddy1993 The Golden Arrow.

2nd May 2014:
Great chapter. I'm really enjoying the story.

Author's Response: YAY, the 100th review for this story. I've never had a story get into triple figures with reviews before. And yeah, this is the first fanfiction I've posted with 26 chapters, but still. Thank you so much for making it reach 100.

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Review #19, by Teddy1993 Hagrid's Memories.

1st May 2014:
I'm usually not a big fan of mystery stories, but I must say that you grabbed my attention with this one. Great work!

Author's Response: *grins* I think one of the most awesome comments one can get on something one wrote is something like "I don't usually like x, but I do like this version". So thank you and I hope you enjoy the rest.

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Review #20, by Teddy1993 Return to Hogwarts.

1st May 2014:
The relationship between Albus and Rose strongly reminds me of the relationship between Harry and Hermione. Good chapter!

Author's Response: Thanks for the review.

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Review #21, by Teddy1993 Gifts and Games.

1st May 2014:
It seems like James is really hitting puberty. It was great to see all the Weasleys again. Very good chapter. It was chaotic and entertaining, just as a Weasley christmas should be.

Author's Response: Yeah, James is definitely being a young teenager. He'll grow up eventually.

Glad you liked the chapter; thanks again.

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Review #22, by Teddy1993 Home for Christmas.

1st May 2014:
Nice chapter. I like how you pictured all of the Potters together. It's pretty much how I imagined them. James being too cool to hug his little sister in public and Albus being more caring and thoughtfull. I loved his idea for his father's christmas present. I'm really enjoying the story so far!

Author's Response: Glad you're enjoying it. It was good craic to be able to write more of a family scene and the relationship between Albus and his siblings and parents.

Glad you liked his dad's Christmas present. The reason he was stuck on it was because I was and I wanted to put off writing it for a while. *laughs* I eventually thought of the fact Hogwarts meant so much to Harry.

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Review #23, by Teddy1993 The Empty Inkwell.

1st May 2014:
That was another great chapter. I like that the fact that Albus and Rose were sorted into Ravenclaw supplies a different perspective on Hogwarts. I can understand they would rather go to Flitwick than McGonagall as she can be quite intimidating. You write very well. Good work.

Author's Response: I'm trying to give Flitwick a bit of an increased role here as their Head of House. Hadn't thought of it giving a different perspective on Hogwarts, but I guess it does.

Thanks again for the continued reviews and for saying I write well. I'm grinning as I read this. Hope you continue to enjoy the story.

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Review #24, by Teddy1993 What the Portraits Saw.

1st May 2014:
It's clear Albus and Rose inherited the detective gene from their parents. Good chapter!

Author's Response: *grins* Yeah, they really did, didn't they?

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Review #25, by Teddy1993 Suspecting Scorpius.

1st May 2014:
Nice chapter. I enjoyed the scenes with Scorpius. It seems like Albus really is a lot like his father. The whole situation made me think of Harry suspecting Draco during their sixth year, although he was right back then. Good story so far!

Author's Response: Yeah, Albus has some traits in common with Harry, but he is rather more cautious and less likely to go rushing into danger. He's also a little more rule-abiding. And since he grew up in a much happier home, he trusts adults more and asks for advice rather than taking things into his own hands.

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