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Review #1, by Freda_and_Georgina chapter one

7th July 2014:
Not going to lie, that was not what I expected. But it's not necessarily a bad thing. You have a great idea here but it hasn't quite reached its full potential. As a suggestion, try to edit it to make it longer, explore more of Voldemort waiting for Harry to show and his collapse. You can even have him remember more instances of his life without having to take lines from the books. On it's own it's not bad, I really like the beginning of this. You handled Voldemort's perspective quite well.
--Georgina
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