Hey Claire!! Here w a review :)
I really liked this!! Keira and Hugo are really well developed here and I do love how you didn't drag it out too much since we all knew what would happen.
That said, I felt that the flow of the story could have been made better with a few more descriptive factors since it felt like Keira changed her opinion almost too quickly.
However, I still really loved this! ESP Hugo!! So cute. No one ever writes bout him so I'm glad you gave him a chance :P
-- Mya :)Author's Response: Hehe I don't think that Hugo's character would let him drag this out for very long because that just doesn't seem like the type of person he'd be, ya know? xD
I love and appreciate your honesty! I'm glad that I now know that the flow and description of Keira's changes of feeling coudl be better because it wasn't something I had thought about at first.
Yes, Hugo certainly is one of those forgotten characters and I loved that I can give him a chance at the spotlight.
Thanks, love! (:
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Hello, Santa here!
This was definitely a different style than what I've seen of your usual style, but I liked it. It had a really olden feel to it, like something taken right out of Pride & Prejudice. It had a feeling of that era, and it came out really well.
The characterization of both Keira and Hugo was amazing. I usually read Hugo as a shy, introverted person, a 'rebel child', or a total player. I'm glad your characterization was a bit different- his head wasn't too big, with him not thinking he was perfect himself, yet he was still outgoing and a little cocky. I liked it :) Keira came out as a tad big-headed herself, and pretty prejudiced- so that worked out well I suppose.
I really liked the style of this, it was so mature and elegant. I wish this wasn't just a one-shot, I want to know what happens next! :)
I'm really glad I got you as my Santee, I discovered a great writer! I'm definitely going to continue reading your stories after the Secret Santa is over!
Happy New Year!Author's Response: this was probably the hardest to write but it did turn out really well, didn't it? I'm glad that you enjoyed this because reading the end product is really a joyous feeling.
I have considered writing a sequel of sorts to this because I would love to explore how Keira and Hugo get along in a relationship, working out the kinks of their personalities.
I'm so glad that you enjoy my writing!
That's a great compliment, thank you!! (:
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Hey! This was a great entry, I really enjoyed it. I love Pride and Prejudice, and the angle you put on it, with Keira and Hugo Weasley was fantastic. I loved the rant Hugo had in the middle, it really was eye-opening.
The formal language you wrote in was of course not really with the times, but you did it so brilliantly I think it added to the piece.
Well done on a superbly awesome entry!Author's Response: im so glad that you liked it!
yeah, Pride and Prejudice is my favorite book so i tried to do it some justice.
thanks so much for ur awesome review! (: Report Review
That was so sweet! I loved it! :D I love both Hugo's and Kiera's personalities; you characterized them both very well in such few words. Awesome story!Author's Response: thank you so much! im glad that you like hugo and keira (:
thanks again for R+R! (: Report Review
It's Rosie with your requested review! :)
So what I really liked about this story was that it mostly focused on characterization, more specifically, Hugo's characterization. When he was describing how parents use him as an example for their sons, I concluded that Hugo thinks a little bit too much of himself, or to say that he's big-headed. I'm not saying that's a bad thing, in fact, I found it interesting. I find characters with big egos very amusing. :P
Hugo Weasley prided himself on having the perfect life; he didn't pride himself on being perfect
^I don't know why, but I really liked this sentence, it made so much sense and I understood Hugo better.
One thing that really bothered me throughout the story was your italics usage. You tend to italicize every other word, even where a stress isn't needed. It made the flow seem choppy. I would recommend reading this over and carefully considering each italicized word and think if a stress really is needed there.
Overall, this was a very good one-shot. I thought it was really cute and fluffy. (It sounds like I'm describing a teddy bear oO) I enjoyed the simplicity of this piece. Keep up the good work! :D
~RosieAuthor's Response: oooh thanks so much for the review! this definitely helped (:
huh, i never thought about the italics.
thanks for letting me know; i'll definitely look over that and change it wherever necessary.
thanks so much!
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