I liked this chapter a lot. I liked how you got into so much detail with Cassie's thoughts. You also broke up your text more in this chaper than the first chapter. Most of it was with dialog but at least there wasn't too many giant paragraphs. Great job!

Author's Response: Thank you! I really appreciate you taking the time to read and comment on what I've written(:
- Brennings

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I liked the first chaper of your story. I think that it was interesting and entertaining. I think that you could have fixed some things though. You could have broken up some of your really long paragraphs into smaller, easier to read paragraphs. From a readers viewpoint, its very diffucult reading a large section of text on a computer screen. Normally when I see a huge section of text, I hit the back arrow and find a different story, but I decided to give your story a chance, and I am quite glad that I did. I found a couple a spelling errors, but nothing too major, so good job on that. The only thing that I really got from this chaper was backround Information and a small scene with Al. Its not that much to critique you on, not much went on. ALthough, there are some things that you can work on, this chaper wasn't that bad. I think that you know where you want this story to go, you are just trying to get it there.

Author's Response: Thank you :) One of my major problems as a writer is writing too much, so I will really try to work on that! I hope you continue my story and enjoy it... Thank you for your critique and compliment! Much appreciated!
- Brennings

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OMG YES SCORPY!! When do we get to meet him?? :) I really like this story!! Please update soon even though know that it can be pretty hard :) thank you for the story! Xx

Author's Response: OMG, your review just made my day. :') Anyways, what's a next generation fanfic without a little Scorp/Rose action? ;) I'm glad you like it! Hopefully soon, probably in the next three chapters or so - and I will try my best to update as quick as possible but I get a lot of school work... :( trust me, I'd much rather be writing the story!
Thanks so much, and please, keep reading! xx
- Brennings

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OMG this is so good. Your a great writer keep at it

Author's Response: aha thanks, im not sure if you have read my other story (not done) but yeah, they are totally different! I still encourage you to read it though ;) I find this one easier to write because I relate to it a bit more. Also because its not a third person point of view like my other (Same Light) :) Thanks so much! I really appriciate your feedback! I've finished writing Chapter 2, I'm just waiting for it to be validated :) Please, keep reading! Again, thanks so much !
xoxo :)

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