Well this is going straight to my Favourites. It was simply brilliant. Brilliant is less than what I felt when I read it. It was an exciting piece, beginning until the end. I loved the idea you had to write Harry's own First Challenge through the audience's eyes, especially his friends. I have always wondered how they felt about Harry competing and you gave me the opportunity to imagine it. And it was a great moment!
Really enjoyed how you blended in the prompts not to mention the way you kept every character true to himself. Excellent!Author's Response: Hi!
Wow this is so nice of you to add it to your favorite, I'm blushing over here!! I always wondered how his friends felt as well so this was a really great opportunity for me to explore it. I'm glad you thought I kept the characters true to themselves; it was difficult at times because (in the books) we rarelly see them all interacting together but it was a lot of fun! Thanks again! Report Review
WHOA. This is the first ever story I've read from outside Harry's head during the first task and it's brilliant. Not too many prompts squeezed in and nothing artificial. I love it Akussa. :D
*hug*Author's Response: Aw, thanks so much for those kind words, I'm glad you liked it and found it original! It was a first for me as well; I had never read a story like that before but I think it worked out alright. Thanks for the review!! Report Review
Another amazing story by you to add to your awesome collection! It was lovely to see the story of the first task in the triwizard tournament from the eyes of Harry's friends who were watching in the stands.
It really made me feel like I was there and actually on edge with the whole idea of being in the stands there with them watching their friend go into a potential death trap! I really felt you captured the scene and the atmosphere in this whole place even within the short amount of words which I think was fab!
Well doneAuthor's Response: Summer!
Thanks so much for your blush worthy comments :)
I'm so glad this turned out ok; I was afraid that it would be an overdone concept and be very cliche but it looks alright in the end! I'm really pleased if you say you felt like you were watching the scene with them because that is the effect I was going for.
Thanks again for the lovely review! Report Review
Hello, fellow Gryffindor!
Oooh, the Triwizard Tournament! A very effective way of displaying the prompts, as you can mention the spells used against the dragons as well as the various dragons' breeds without any of those prompts looking out of place.
Neville's such a good friend. :) It was nice to see this side of the scene, from the other students' points of views. I was glad to see Ron's support and loyalty in spite of the fact that up until that day, he had been angry with Harry. I enjoyed the dialogue between Neville, Dean, Seamus, Lavender, Ron, and Hermione, and found it very realistically-written. I especially liked the fire-extinguisher bit that confused Seamus, and the mosquito analogies and how you explained what was going on through their narration. It was like listening to a very exciting game!
Well done. :)
Gryffindor ftwAuthor's Response: Thanks so much for this review; I'm very pleased that you found my use of the prompt effective. I didn't want this to be overflowing with prompts, breaking the rythm of the story so I didn't use too many but I like the effect it had none the less.
I loved playing with Neville and the other Gryffies. We so rarely get to see them all interacting together that I thought it would be a great occasion to do so. Conclusion : it's hard but fun!!
Thanks again, I'm glad you liked it and felt like you were watching the scene, this is exactly the effect I wanted so I'm glad it worked out alright :) Report Review
Really nice job, love seeing things from the other side. It's a shame JKRs books focused on Harry's perspective, it is nice to see things from Neville or Hermione's side sometimes. And you pulled it off perfectly, felt like we were standing amongst them cheering along with them. Excellent.Author's Response: Thank you so much for this kind review, I'm glad you liked it!
You think it's a shame? I think it gives us a bigger playground!! I like going over some of those moments but from a different perspective (Ron being one of my favorite, as my story "Ronald's box" goes to show...).
I really wanted the reader to feel like he was watching the scene so I'm glad this is how you felt; shows I reached my goal!
Thanks again! Report Review
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