Hi! I do enjoy your story, and i love the fact that the main charcater is so into sports, it makes her strong and that inturn makes me happy; i cant deal with main character who cant even defend themselves in anyway, and are all whiny :) well done !! it wasa a ll great for me, except for when she started to go in 3rd person? i felt it a bit weird for her to tell her story in that way, i get that se distances herself from it, but yh that was weird. But otherwise.. AWESOME! love albus, cant wait till he sees her boxing :) Report Review
This is actually quite good, i enjoyed it and there is not another fic on the site like it, I'm sure of it. I tried once to find a Dudley boxing fic, but no one had ever written one and this isn't that...but its the closest I've seen. And its good. Report Review
this is really good! i really wanna read more now, and i want to see Al's reaction to her crying! :) xxAuthor's Response: Ha! Totally made my day. New chapter up, so now you totally can! Be sure to check it out, yeah?
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ayy, loss of bad-ass=fine
yeah this chapter wasn't as good (relitivly, its still really good) but it was kinda sad...
btw what about greek boys? arn't they suposed to fantasicle? And I consitter anything over 67* F insanly hot...time to move to canada!! Report Review
Nice chap again. This one was better (not that your first one is bad, I just liked this better...STOP JUDGING ME! AH) :D
ok here is what I feel about the characters so far:
Lici: Is kinda, everywhere...I can't really tell her personality...but still pretty cool
Dom: Anoying and awsome
Al: Sexy(not as much as peter though) and amusing...I like this kid
okidoke, onto the next chap for me!
PS if your so bored you could always locate your phone and text me so I'm not so bored and lony doing my hw... Report Review
Hi Simmy!! Nice chap, Lici's purdy cool but could be a bit more badass if thats what your aiming for. I also didn't actually READ the harry potter books so I have no idea what is real and what you made up but I'll live... Report Review
Ooh, I liked it! A little slow and a lot of exposition, but that's to be expected from any first chapter. =)
I didn't think Lici was annoying at all! I thought she was really funny and I can't wait to see how she interacts with the people at Hogwarts and what house she's in. (Gryffindor, perhaps?) She doesn't seem to be too fond of the people at Hogwarts besides Dominique, so that ought to be interesting. =)
Foster mother? I'm very curious as to what Lici's history is. She's certainly got a lot of interesting things happening in her life.
And haha, don't worry about your Spanish. The one phrase I know is 'la animadora es graciosa' so you've probably got me beat. ;)
Great story! I'll definitely be looking forward to more!Author's Response: Thank you so very much, you are my first review. I was expecting serious flaming, so this gives me a very good feeling!
Lici is actually in Slytherin, which comes out in the next chapter. I'm still working on that one because it got rejected a week ago but this is the first place I've had wifi in FOREVER so I'm only editing now.
Thanks for reviewing. If you'll excuse me, I have to go do a happy dance all around my room because of this!
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