'They're a bit buggered, aren't they?'
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O.k. just realised I haven't reviewed a chapter in ages... my apologies.
So messers Moony, Wormtail, Padfoot and Prongs were hilarious, I was almost crying with laughter.
Ahhh Selena bless her shallow cotton socks.
Rose and Albus... Oh dear we are in trouble...
Can't wait for the next update! x Report Review
Well, this has certainly whetted my appetite for more of this story. You are such a great writer and your take on these characters is so spot-on, I've become attached to them the same way I do when I'm reading any published book.
I too missed Scorpius through this, but I understand thoroughly that you had to get into the relationships between Al and Rose and Selena and Methuselah. The cousins, I feel, are really missing the close relationship they had before Hogwarts and need a spell with just the 2 of them. I think the time they're stuck in Stubbs' office they will have a chance to really share.
Of course I hope you get them out! Let's see ... in addition to the House Elves that someone mentioned, there's Scorpius' guitar strings like he was telling Rose a few chapters back. Could that be what does it?
I hope that Rose tells Al what happened with her and Scorpius. I think he'll understand a lot of things better then.
Oh Selena! She's really growing on me, becoming more multidimensional as a character. She's finding that she likes being with Methuselah even though he's just with books all the time. It's like he seems more real to her than the other boys she's known. I hope they get shipped. I think that's the direction it's going.
As for him, he may be becoming more ... human . with Selena by his side. But I do hope he finds something soon they can work with.
Then Locket going to them and asking for Scorpius. I wondered what she thinks he's going to do, but since he's the only person there who's logically going to try to do something ...
I hope Scorp finds what a good guy he is after all. He begrudged the work before but he's putting his heart into it and people are responding to him. I think he's finding he's using his people skills and musical talents for a good cause. He's basically a brat, certainly not evil, but the way you have the character evolving, he's a teenage boy trying to grow up without any family love or support, and no real friends other than Albus, and that'd be hard on any kid.
I get the feeling he sees Tim as kind of a little brother, really cares for him. And that relationship will be good for him, too.
All in all, I'm feeling after reading this far that these kids are all going to grow through this crisis in ways no one would have thought. I can't wait to read more. You get high marks all around (I do hope you're writing your own stuff as well :-) ... my only gripe is that it seems to take long between updates. But I do understand -- I'm busy, too. :-) Report Review
That was wonderful to read! I am so glad that you updated! Great work all around, I love this story it has such a good plot and it keeps on thickening and just pulls you in. Report Review
Well, crap. This is going to be a problem now that Rose and Albus are stuck in the Headmaster's office, to put it lightly. I love how Selena swears that Methelusah is going to make a move but just grabs a book instead. I'm super curious to see how everything you mentioned that's been occurring in the outside world will correlate to what's going on at Hogwarts. Wonderful job as always! :) xx Report Review
i enjoy your fanfiction a lot and i think you're doing a really good job :) i would just like to have more of selena and methuselah ( like in this chapter) and i hope they end up as a couple or at least kiss x) i really ship them!! Report Review
Reading from selena pov was great. love how things progress and how you keep the suspense intact . I'm impatient to read more . Report Review
Brilliant as always! Can't wait for the next chapter.. although, i'm wondering, if they need to go in or out of the headmaster's office, they could just ask a house elf to apparate them in and out.. the wards don't affect house elves... It's a loophole.. Report Review
Another great chapter. The bickering Marauder's Map is officially one of my favorite parts of any HPFF story. I always look forward to your updates :) Report Review
ohhh!!! another cliffhanger!!!
i like your story, it is very captivating
i am looking forward to another update!
of course, i missed scorpius in this chapter
and i'm waiting patiently for her to make amends with him ... Report Review
Oh. OH. Review #100, woop woop!
Magic Thor hammer sounds like a good way of breaking in somewhere! Am I allowed to express my disappointment that Thor ISN'T going to be rocking up any time soon? Just think of the chapter images...
AHEM. Story. Yes. I like Albus' thoughts here - that he knows something BIG is up with Scorpius and wants to help, but at the same time resents that he doesn't KNOW what's up. It's definitely the kind of reaction most close friends would have about something like that. Poor Al!
I absolutely LOVE the Marauders' dialogue in the map! Even though it was just words on the parchment, you nailed the personalities of all four of them. And I love James so much. TOO much. Cracking idea, to go through the floor. I like!
Oh, poor Rose and her confused mind. She really doesn't know where she stands with Scorpius, does she? Kudos for the guitar making an appearance, I do love musical Scorp.
Really love how the relationship between Al and Rose is developing. I hadn't really considered how they would have become more distant since being at Hogwarts, but it makes a lot of sense; they're in different houses, with different friends. That must be difficult for people so used to spending time together. In that sense it's nice that they have this opportunity to bridge that gap a bit.
Stuck in the office. Uh oh!
AHA. I was loving this Selena/Methy moment, and was going to comment at the end, but as Methy mentioned Selena's left breast pocket I thought "Oho, been looking there, have we?" And then Selena thought the same. But he's only looking there because the letter's there in the first place. And this annoys her! Oh, they're so adorable. And to think I was shipping Al/Selena at the start. Blasphemy, I say, blasphemy! And yet, it all seems one sided. Methuselah remains utterly Methuselah-ish.
The goings-on in Cairo and Paris certainly sound as though they and this could be connected, and Selena's mum is right to let her know. At the same time, I get Methy's point of view - it doesn't necessarily help them to DO anything about their situation. Find a motive, yes. Cure the illness? Not necessarily. So yeah, Methy is possibly right to put that idea on the backburner FOR NOW. But it's still worth thinking about when they DO ask why this is all happening.
OH Selena, assuming the situation is Scorpius. So unfair, but so true. It always is! Except for now.
And Selena's last sentence? Got it in one, girl! FANTASTIC stuff. Report Review
I love the way Rose finds out that Scorpius is doing the post. Not just that she doesn't find out from him, but the fact that Hugo nonchalantly mentions him, assuming she already knew. And thus her guilt at not already knowing. Bless her. But it's about time she gave him more credit.
Although the way he's talking to her right now, he doesn't really deserve that credit. Come on, Scorp; it's one step forward, two steps back right now!
Love the door's question. Reminds me in a sense of something I have planned for Derailed. It's not entirely related, but it's a similar thing.
It's about time Al and Rose had a nice chat. Interesting that he DID know about Scorp and the letters, and chose to keep away. It seems a very Albus thing to do. And you know what? Funnily enough, I absolutely adore Al as well. He's such a lovely, gentle soul, he really does compliment the utterly mad, boisterous Scorpius. And while Scorp needs Al to keep him in check, I think Al needs Scorp to keep his spirits up, and that's partly why he seems SO weary right now. The poor guy.
A lot of love for overshadowed-Al, as well. It must be incredibly hard, being a Potter; far more so than being any other Weasley. Because Harry really and truly is one-of-a-kind, and so it's bad enough being expected to be HIM, but when you've got an older bro as well to try to dodge ... yeah, that sucks a bit. But Al shouldn't let himself worry about that, he should just let himself be his own person! And if that's a similar person to Harry or James, then so be it. To the people who care about him, he won't be in anyone's shadow; he'll just be Al.
I also very much like the "James is Dad-without-the-war" comparison, as well as the "James-is-Granddad-James". The latter because I evidently have a lot of love for all James Potters, but the first comparison is one I hadn't given much thought to before. And I like it very much, because it's so clear to see how that leaves Al thinking as though he doesn't fit in somehow. Bless him.
God, I just love him. So much. I want an Albus, please.
Ho hum, disturbance in the greenhouses is mysterious. WHAT HAPPEN? Ah, wards are failing. Yeahhh, that's not ideal! Need to get into Stubbs' office somehow. And I love the way Rose invites Al into her next plan, haha.
"It's where he died." This sentence gives me weird goosebumps. This is serious stuff now. And ... the whole tapping into death thing with the Stone, this is AWESOME. I knew it was a bad idea of Harry's to just leave it lying around in the Forest for anyone to find!
On a serious note, I really do love this little twist, if we can call it a twist. Juicy stuff!
Listening. Scorp. The wireless. Oh, SCORPIUS MALFOY YOU GORGEOUS GORGEOUS BOY. I think my heart just melted. Honestly no words. And Methy knew but didn't think to tell anyone, and Hermione knew but assumed the others would, and Scorp didn't tell anyone else because that's a totally Scorp thing to do... Oh, this is just the best. WARM FLUFFY FEELINGS AND INCOHERENTNESS RIGHT NOW. Report Review
I'm here! Where had we gotten to again? Ah, yes, Scorpius was screwing his life up, wasn't he? MARVELLOUS.
*DIES* Oh my word, you would not BELIEVE the thought process that's been going through my head the last few days! I had to introduce a new character to Rails, and I looked online for a nice, wizarding sounding one, and came across Thaddeus. I thought "Hmm, that sounds familiar, where have I read it before?" But I couldn't put my finger on it! Lo and behold, by the second sentence of this chapter I've discovered the source. STUBBS. Hope you don't mind, I'm using the same name!
Anyway. It is indeed frustrating that Stubbs is one of those who's NOT regained consciousness, and I assume that's partly for literary effect! It would be so much easier for them all if he awoke and was able to let them into his office, wouldn't it? It's intriguing that he's one of the ones who has it most severely, and I'm wondering whether there's a reason for that (other than the aforementioned one). Is it because he's older, or maybe because he's somehow been in closer contact with the Phlegethon? Not sure. Hmm.
It's so cute, that Scorpius has fallen straight back into his original routine, especially with Rose. Al is one thing - Scorp probably realises he WAS entirely to blame in that confrontation and so can't be angry with Al - but the argument with Rose was much more two-sided. Granted, Rose is in an awkward situation, but she chose to put herself in it. So I think Scorp has the right to be angry with her, and so it's cute that he's still taking breakfast to her. I guess that's why she's both easier and harder to face.
Oh, wait. Now he's avoiding her. Haha. Oh, Scorp.
Scorp thinking he's not needed, SIGH. This really makes me sad because there's so much that he could do for people! They need him to lift their morale and keep them going! Although I suppose he'd be better at that if said people weren't mad at him...
I really do like Selena. There's just something about her. Yes, she's vain, yes, she puts herself first, but she's still clever, and has good ideas, and... yeah. And even though she's making the letter suggestion to Scorpius in a mocking way, it's a good idea and it's something HE would be good at. She seems to GET people, even if she's not good at handling them right.
And it's also very like Scorpius to decide to do something even if he feels it's below him, just so as to make himself useful. Bless him.
Love the Mona Lisa remark. Also love "That is so last week."
I'm intrigued as to Scorpius' relationship with Astoria. Because the clear inference is that she would care about him if she knew something was going on. But then, that also begs the question; why hasn't she just written to her son either way? Does she not like to stay in touch with him?
I think my favourite relationship here is fast becoming Scorpius/Door. He's hilarious, the way he talks to it. And that reminds me of the Door to the Head's office. You know, after all of the hypothetical Dimitri situations I'd love to see, I think Scorp talking to Stubbs' door would be next on my list.
I knew to take Hermione's story about Nat with a pinch of salt; it wasn't going to be as bad as it sounded, we just needed Nat's side. I didn't necessarily expect to find she'd even have good motives for brewing the Elixir in the first place, and for some reason that took me by surprise - in a good way, of course. It really does seem like Nat was just trying to do the right thing, and got caught in the wrong place at the wrong time and was made to look as though she was acting dishonourably. And that's so, so sad, and makes me a bit angry once more with Hermione. And, of course, the 'selling out' aspect also isn't what it seemed. Poor Nat, if only more people would give her a chance instead of judging her on what they perceived to have happened. She really has come out of this badly.
I guess this breakdown ten years post-BTP, followed by the three-year lay-off, was the catalyst that seems to have changed Nat from the person she was in BTP. I may be wrong, because of course ten years in itself is a long enough period of time for someone to change gradually... but I wouldn't be surprised if this was partly the reason for it. And... the fact that she changed the focus of her research to the more 'money-spinning' elixirs because of this breakdown... crikey, EVERYTHING Hermione assumed and told Scorpius about her was wrong. Oh, poor Nat. I really do hope Scorpius makes sure Hermione knows the truth, because there's being wronged and then there's THIS. I don't think I can put into words how much I love how this has all turned out in the end, but it's such a relief that Nat is nothing like the person Hermione made her out to be.
And it's about time Nat came up with some good advice for someone - although thinking about it, she's had a few good things to say to Scorpius throughout. But she's right in that he shouldn't let others judge him. I think his problem is that he needs to stop judging HIMSELF. He paints himself in such a bad light, and that makes things so much worse.
Oh, I was hoping little Timmy would crop up again. It breaks my heart that Scorpius doesn't think he's a good guy. I think he's an absolutely wonderful character, and the archetypal Slytherin; he doesn't do things to make other people happy, but because he's bored, or thinks he may as well do them. Whether it's delivering the letters, or feeding Rose, he doesn't seem to do it primarily for their gratification, and I like that. Albus is the one exception; Scorpius DEFINITELY tries to please Al where possible, but that's down to Al being basically his only friend. But when he's doing these nice things, it does seem as though it makes him happy to be making other people happy! I don't know if any of this makes sense, or is RIGHT, but that's the feeling I get. And either way, I absolutely adore him. And am out of characters. CRACKING CHAPTER. Report Review
this is a grate chapter cant wait for the next chapter. Report Review
I'm impressed by your writing which his as good as I've seen on here, and I've seen some good ones! I love this story and it's one of those I can't WAIT to see updated. Please, please update real soon!
I love Scorpius. He's a sweetie deep inside. He doesn't always behave that way (almost never actually), I think because he doesn't see himself as good. He doesn't see himself as very smart, either. He's a lot smarter than he acts. Hopefully he and everyone else will come to see how good he is -- as good as Tim sees him at least.
You've promised more on their relationship as well.
And, of course, as good as Rose will eventually have to see him. Hermione is starting to see him that way -- which as someone said puts him in good stead for when he's with Rose.
Al in this is everyone's favorite big brother! But I do have to agree he is indeed afraid he's not measuring up to his hero father. Scorp was right even though he shouldn't have said what he did. But he wasn't wrong and sometimes a best mate comes up with the truth you don't want to hear.
Of course, he was venting and Al understandably got tired of that. They will make up, right?
I like Selena, too. More on her, I hope.
Oh, the parts where Scorp is screaming at the Ravenclaw riddle door are absolutely hilarious! It makes me love him more! I know he's adjusted to it by now but it was our comic relief and he's good at providing that.
Anyway, all in all a great story and you can go in so many directions with it. Of course, I'm a sucker for happy endings so I'm hoping you'll give these kids theirs ... :-)
Now ... update. Pretty please! Report Review
Ahh loved this chapter! So good, love the twist using the place Harry 'died'. Brilliant! It was nice to see an insight to how Al is feeling as well, very interesting. ALso love the idea of Scorpius' radio show, reminiscent of Lee Jordans Potterwatch :) can't wait to see what happens next! Report Review
I can't wait for the next chapter. I hope the entire truth about Scorpius comes out soon. Excellent chapter! Interesting twist with the resurrection stone. Report Review
Scorpius sounds smarter than he talks. Good for him.Everyone is already too busey, he should be trying to solve his own problems. Now look how well that worked out :)
Darn stone, they may have to go into the forest and find the tiny bugger. Immagine if it could work like the philosipers stone? A little dip in a cup of water, and wallah! Instant cure.
Great chapter! My mind is working now. Report Review
DUN DUN DUN! Well that complicates things a little--okay maybe a lot! But that bump in the road aside, what a phenomenal chapter! I'm glad you didn't just have Rose and Scorpius make up, as that would ruin the dynamic you have worked so hard to build. But I AM glad you had Rose and Albus make up, because family really does need to stick together through everything because they're all anyone's got, really. So what's this adventure Rose and Albus go on?? And how does Scorpius react to Rose's delivering of Hermione's praise?? Ahh I have so many questions!! Great job, keep it up! :) xx Report Review
Great Chapter! I'm glad Tim is getting better and I can't help but feel sorry for Scorp, I hope he feels happier soon and maybe Tim will be a part of that.
Update soon :)
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WOW! I can't believe I'm stumbling upon this story now - It's just brilliant - I almost have no words.
Usually with stories, especially HP fanfic stories they get a little predictable. But this, man I am completely stumped. I can't really figure out the motives of Thane - he can't be psychotic because then he would have killed them all without regard, and he obviously knows what he's doing. . . but what IS he doing!
Why did he (they) spell Hogwarts? Why is he still hiding out and keeping watch? Why why why why why! Haha I should probably read through it again to see if you left any clues, I just powered through this last night.
I just can't even think of anything, unless it was revenge or doing a mad psychological experiment.
But then that raises the question that if the six weren't in the forest on detention that night when the ritual was done - they would have all been sick and all of Hogwarts would have been incapacitated.
Anyway enough with my rambling.
This is excellent writing. It's intelligent, witty, and enjoyable to read. I absolutely love the characterisations as well.
Selena is really growing on me. I love her personality and how she is caring but then doesn't take shit from anyone. She's very honest!
And yeah, love everyone else as well. You've provided depth to the characters and made everything realistic and relatable.
I feel like Scorpius has one of the most important jobs, even though he doesn't feel like it.
This story is wonderful, really. I can't wait for the next chapter! Report Review
I think Scorpius really needed that talk. Dealing with the owls will help him also with his own father I think, don't you? Get a different perspective about family.
Wonderful job on the chapter, see you next one :) Report Review
SO FANTASTIC!!! :D I'm glad there wasn't really any drama this chapter--it kind of let things calm down a little and set up for future things. The talk between Scorpius and Lockett was great and helped redeem her character (and Scorpius's some as well) in my eyes and like her more. Yay, students are waking up and getting their letters! Phenomenal as usual, I'm excited for the next chapter! :) xx Report Review
This chapter was great! You've made me a new fan of this pairing. This story is the first I've read in which Scorpius was written in such a realistic fashion. I can't wait to read more! Report Review
It took me several minutes to write this because I could not think...I was just too shocked, and I still am. I hope you update soon so we can know what happens. Report Review
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