I am so, so happy right now!!! Awww, this chapter is so adorable!!!
I love Leya ♥ ♥ and I'm so glad that Freya finally saw sense. I hope that Dom and Victoire will take care of her for Louis whilst he's still at school, and at least she'll have female company.
This chapter has made me so happy!! Can't wait for the next one!!
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Oh my goodness oh my goodness oh my goodness! They're having a girl! They're going to have a girl! I'm so excited! :D I love that I didn't have to wait until the baby was born just to find out what the sex of it was! It's going to be a girl! Yay! ^^
I do have a question though. Was Freya expelled or not? I thought the risk was expulsion? Wouldn't that mean that she couldn't go back next September? Hagrid wasn't allowed to go back, and that was even back when they thought they had a legitimate reason to expel him. Did something else happen since it wasn't on school grounds? I think I got confused somewhere along the way.
I love Vic. She's so down to earth, and I can't help but think of her as a sort of Blake Lively way. Sporty, gorgeous, and down to earth. I never thought of her as a Quidditch geek, but you have her down as a believable one because of how closely she pays attention. I love your detail! But, most importantly, I love that they're having a girl! :D On to the next one! Great job! Can't wait for more! Report Review
I'm really glad to see that is parents seem to have sort of adjusted to knowing what's going on over the last few weeks. It honestly will make things easier for him knowing he can talk to them without the current look of disappointment. Oh how I wish the Weasley family were my family!
Bill being a protective father.Oh Godric! I laughed so hard at this! I couldn't help but think of my father. :) That was such a wonderful touch! It's funny too, because he was more than likely one of those 'boys' who would like those girls haha. Oh how age makes us wiser.
Lovely chapter! Very cute and fun to read! Moving onward! :D Report Review
OK, so I'm beginning to like Freya a little more, if that really was her writing back. She doesn't seem as mad at Louis like I thought she would be, and she said that she wants to make the decision with him. So, at least he is a part of the decision. I hope they get to see each other for the Easter Holidays without too many problems. It sort of sounds like her parents have her on lock down.
I like how you included the fact that she has to take a lot of potions to keep the baby healthy. I think a lot of people in their writing forget that a baby needs a lot of care and a lot of mothers end up having to take prenatal vitamins and such, so it's good to see that you've remembered this little fact! :)
Mummy Horatio, eh? I think it's cute! And honestly, if Freya doesn't end up being a part of the child's life, I would love to see Horatio standing at Louis' side and helping to take care of it. It would be like Three Men and A Baby, only, you know, with two boys lol.
Great chapter! I can't wait to see what's next! :) Report Review
So many things I liked about this chapter! I loved the toothbrush bit! I'm one of the guilty ones who brushes their teeth before eating (I have no idea why seeing as I brush again afterwords) and the conversation just cracked me up! I also liked how they explained Horatio having no friends. This may sound sort of weird, but I sort of imagine Horatio as Patrick from the Perks of Being A Wallflower. I have no idea if he's actually gay or not, but he just reminds me of Ezra Miller and I loves him! :3
Molly and Lucy being twins? I've not heard of that, but I do like it a lot. I also like that you made Molly really nice instead of really obnoxious like a lot of other stories. It's just every little detail you add seems to add so much real life themes that it makes me smile. From the conversations to the descriptions in the rooms, and everything.
I'm glad that by the looks of it Freya has written him back. I do hope it's not her parents telling him to stop writing. He deserves to know what's going on!
Moving on! So far, this is one of my favorite chapters! :) Report Review
I'm warming up to the name Horatio now. And no, it's not just because his name was the center of attention for a while lol. He's a very good friend, and I think most boys would kill to have a friend as loyal as him.
It is very nice to see that the Gryffindors were picking on him. What I mean by that of course, is that you didn't go the normal route and have the Slytherins pick on him. It really shows that everyone, and not just a certain group of people, think this is strange.
I think this is the first time we learn they're Hufflepuffs, yeah? I like it. It really proves the loyalty they've shown so far. I also like how Horatio stood up for him in every way while walking to the common room.
I liked this chapter. It made me smile :). Though, I do wish Freya would write back to him. It's not fair to leave him hanging just because he can't see her, even though I know he would love to if he could. Report Review
I really like that it was Flitwick that told them. Not because I preferred it to be him, but because it was really believable. The kids were obviously terrified, so I like that Louis gave him the nod of approvement. Though, it makes him popping up so quickly to defend her a little strange. I'd still be too scared out of my wits to even do that.
So that answers my question a little bit better. It isn't both that get expelled, just the mother, and then she gets to be homeschooled, which isn't all that bad I guess. Though, I do think it's hypocritical of Flitwick to say that what she does with her baby is her choice, but then he forces her to be homeschooled because he feels that the stress of schoolwork and the stairs and everything would be too much for her. It think that too should be the mother's choice. Though, I think to really spice the story up, it would have been good if Flitwick said that IF Freya decided to give the baby up for adoption (or if it was at all possible for her to abort the baby if she wasn't as far along as they thought she was), she could return once everything was said and done. If not in the middle of the year, at least the next year. I wouldn't think they would take her back if she decided to raise it, simply because someone would need to raise the baby now. Unless they got a consent (though with her parents I highly doubt it would happen for her) of her parents that they would watch the baby while she was returned for Hogwarts. This way it makes Freya think more deeply about the possibility of adoption so she can get her life back together at Hogwarts. It will lead to a good argument for Louis.
Though I know every father, and in a good portion of what we read and watch of father's when their teenage girlfriend is pregnant, feel as though they get to decide what happens with the baby as well, I wish it would sometimes be explored differently. Don't get me wrong, I would let my boyfriend/husband decide what goes on with the baby, but only after I make the permanent decision of what to do with the baby. (I don't know if this gets too political or not, but I would never abort, I would most likely never adopt out either, but if I so chose to go the adoption route I wouldn't let my boyfriend/husband choose on that matter because it is MY body). Though, that may be an entire legal case on it's own. I have no idea. That's also just me :).
Well, even though it was angst-y and sad, I loved this chapter. You have a very good way with words and setting a mood so unbelievably believable (is that a good phrase or what? xD) that I can't help but feel like this would be like an actual teenage couple. You do a great job, and I love reading the story! :) Keep up the good work and I'll continue on! Report Review
Uh oh! While I admit that being expelled from the school is a bit weird, I like that there is a punishment of some sort so that way they know what they did was equivalently "wrong". Though, I wish it was just a suspension or something, because I feel like expulsion would be terrible for underage wizards just because they had a baby. Now they can never get a good job, because they can't go back to school to get NEWTs, so it's like the school is setting them up to have a hard time in raising the child now. :( So I do hope that Flitwick has a heart! Maybe, even though it would still be sad, he could only expel one in order for at least one parent to finish their schooling?
I don't think Bill and Fleur will be too upset actually. I mean, don't get me wrong, they'll definitely be really upset, but they don't seem like the "yell about it and make a scene" kind of people. Just the sort of people maybe that you would extremely hate to disappoint. Freya, on the other hand, with how afraid she is to tell anyone, I feel as though her parents or something would go off the wall. Maybe Bill can step in?
I don't like that Malcolm kid makes me so mad! If he the repercussions of having a child, I don't know why he would go shouting across the classroom in the first place. No amount of lying is forgivable later just to find out if he can 'deserve' to hear if the rumors are true. I hope he gets a detention every Saturday until he graduates! lol
Nice chapter! :) I look forward to reading more! Report Review
Hiya! OK, so just a quick out of the way error review first: This chapter seemed to lack a bit of a look-through compared to the other one. There were missing commas, possessive apostrophes, a few misspellings, and a couple words that needed to be capitalized. Other than that, I like Horatio, and the goodbye between Louis and his parents was really nice. His sisters seem to get along with him well, which is a different take on the two girls than I've seen yet, so good job on that! :)
Yeah, the Freya vibe isn't disappearing yet. Hmm, maybe it's just because I get slightly upset at people who don't take up for their own responsibility? Typically I get upset with the males of stories like this, but that could be because normally this situation is in reverse character. So, I would safely presume this is a good and natural feeling for me to have! Considering I can't read into Freya's thoughts.
To be completely honest, I'm not a big fan of Horatio's name either, but that just has to do with the way I pronounce it when I say it out loud. It sounds so unnatural coming out of my mouth lol! I like the character though. I can tell he's going to be the comic relief of the story. Though Louis has his fair share of snappy one-liners at him. :)
I liked the chapter, and I do hope that everything is alright with Freya, even if she isn't exactly my favorite person right now. Hopefully she'll get her behind to the Hospital Wing soon so that baby can be nice and healthy when it comes out! :) Report Review
Hi there! I just finished reading Delicate and Still Delicate, so coming to find this is really nice! (I like my chapterly dose of baby drama, what can I say?)
I really like the beginning of this story already. I feel like the length of it really can sum up just how it would go in someone's real-life situation. She has just told him, and now it's time to go. I love how it's in Louis' point of view, because we hardly ever see much of a father's perspective on or in anything we see. So, this is a nice chance to see it.
For some reason, and I don't know why, the name Freya really reminds me of Frito. And I don't like Fritos, and oddly enough, it's making me not really like Freya in a weird sense. This is totally not your fault! I have no idea how my brain comes up with these connections! Just, for some reason, I see myself not liking Freya at this point of the story lol.
In a sort of quick, off-hand question (still story related sorta), is that Evan Peters as Louis in your banner? Please tell me my eyes are correct, because I LOVE him, and therefore, my brain doing that weird connecty thing again, it just helps me love Louis already a ton more ;).
Anyway, I didn't notice much that caught my eye (why would I? You're a validator now! :D). I like what I see so far and I definitely want to continue! :) Report Review
Hello, Siriusly89 here with your eleven day late review. I am so, so, so sorry it took me this long to review your chapter!
Anyway, Iím here, ready to review!
Gah! I wish I could find this rumour-starting so called Ďfriendí and give her a good talking to! Does she have nothing better to do than stand around gossiping about other people? Now honestly!
And now Malcolm is having a go at Louis. I can completely understand Louis losing the plot, but he really has landed both himself and Freya in hot water now, hasnít he? Because that idiot Malcolm is going to spread it around Hogwarts that the rumours are true. Freya is going to kill Louis, isnít she?
And now the consequences are beginning to set in. Oh no, so now Louis is going to have a very angry Freya, her parents and then his parents on top of that jumping down his throat!
Again, I am so, so sorry about the horrifying length of time it took me to review this for you!
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-BookDinosaur- here with your requested review!
I really liked this chapter, and the story seems very interesting already. Can you keep a secret? I'm not that much of a fan of teen pregnancy stories. BUT, since this is about Louis (squee!) and it's from the father's point of view, I actually really like this story.
I like the relationship between Louis and Freya, Louis seems to really care for her, and I also like the fact that they weren't one night stands or 'enemies', but already in a relationship.
Your characters' reactions to the news was believable and well written, I could really imagine it going on. Their desperate attitudes were very realistic, they weren't sad and then suddenly happy dandy again, so good job on that. (I actually used the phrase 'happy dandy' in a sentence? I'm going insane.)
Your characters already have good personalities, I think that within one chapter you really developed them well, especially Louis and Bill.
So, well done on writing a teen pregnancy story I actually enjoyed reading. A lot.Author's Response: Thank you so much for taking the time to do this review for me. I really appreciate it.
Thank you, I can definitely keep a secret. I'm so glad that you like this story even though you're not much of a fan of teen pregnancy stories, Ah yes, I wanted to have a story from the fathers POV and who better then Louis? :p
Louis cares for her very much, I wanted to try something different, so that's why I chose to have them being in a relationship. It seems more real to me then a one night stand and that.
Thank you, I was quite worried that I wasn't making it seem that believable. I love that you used Happy dandy :D Definitely not going insane.
Thank you so much for your lovely and wonderful review, I'm so glad that you enjoyed this so much :D Report Review
Ooo pretty new banner!
I love Bill, and Dom. I like that she is capable of taking care of herself rather than being a typical girly girl who can't fight her own battles
Horatio is a mad one aye, I love that he's sort of like Ron with his relationship for food and I think it really makes him seem like part of the Weasley family even though he's Louis' friend.
I reckon Horatio and Molly should just go for it, and they would make a good couple.
Ee! I am SO, SO, SO HAPPY RIGHT NOW!! I'm so glad that Freya turned up at Louis' house. Ok it's bad she and her dad had an argument and left her house but yay she's at Louis'!!
Argghhh, you can't just leave it like that. OHMYGOD!! That's just evil ;)
I honestly cannot wait for the next chapter because there is bound to be Leya action ♥ and I seriously can't wait to find out what Freya has to say.
Soph xx :DAuthor's Response: Yep a new banner :D I keep making them for this story, I really need to stop haha.
Oh yes Dom can definitely take care of herself, she was taught well by her father and uncles :D
Horatio is definitely mad, and yes you're right he does have a relationship with food, not as bad as Ron mind you, but yes he would really fit in with the Weasleys.
They should go for it! Sadly we just need to push them together to make it happen at the moment.
:D I'm so glad that you're happy, she has finally seen sense and left the house to go to Louis's.
I'm sorry! I will have the next chapter out soon I promise, I just need to write it. I'm about two sentences into it so far.
You'll find out soon! Thank you so much for the review hun! :D Report Review
I think I might be a mind reader or something! lol another great chapter as always and I can't wait to see how Louis and Freya's conversation goes!^_^
Harry and GinnyAuthor's Response: You are definitely a mind reader!
Thank you so much! You're the best reviewer in the whole of fanfictioning :D You always know how to make me smile :D Report Review
Louis is so lucky, his family are just so awesome. I want them, or just hug them. Especially Bill, he's like the best dad ever.
YES! Dominique and Kieron and sitting in a tree... ;) I love them, I'm so glad he was mentioned again. I can't wait to actually see him in this story! And, yeah, he can so protect her. Bill doesn't need to worry. :)
Louis is awesome when he's not worrying and scared, he's so funny and cool. I just love him. And Horatio, he's pretty darn awesome too. I can't wait to see him and Molly together. She should so ask him out.
She did it! She actually did it! I hope Louis gets to talk to her.
Amazing chapter, Tammi.
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Whoop, whoop. Go Louis!!!
I'm so glad he stood up to Mr. Jackson, I mean he has a valid point. I'm so proud of him *squee* ♥
Mr Jackson is horrible, poor Freya for having to live/put with him. Not too mention he's putting mad ideas in her head and making her feel like she has to hide her pregnancy.
I'm hoping that Freya will leave her parents and turn up at Louis'. Especially since Dom gave up her room for Freya and the Baby.
This chapter is just asdfghjkl, I don't know whether it's just me but I was getting teary reading it.
Aww Arthur ♥ That's just adorable, making the baby a cot. I always feel that Louis is left out a lot in stories and the moment with Arthur is just perfect ♥
There has to be more Leya (Louis/Freya) action!!! ♥ Hopefully Freya will come to her senses and just leave home and move in with the Weasley!!!
Can't wait for the next chapter!!
Soph xx :D Report Review
wow! great chapter hun! loved how Louis stood up to Ted and that Arthur made a cot and that it was given to Louis! it would be interesting if Freya showed up at Louis' house saying that she had been kicked out because she chose to be with Louis, and that Freya's parents could regret how they acted towards this pregnancy and to what Freya and Louis had done... can't wait to read more!^_^
Harry and GinnyAuthor's Response: Thank you my lovely! Louis definately stood up to Ted, he's not going to let him bully him into a decision.
Arthur is the best isn't he? :D
Ahh Freya turning up? Who knows? :D You'll find out soon hehe.
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You go, Louis! Stand your ground, be brave. Don't worry, your tag team is coming to punch his face, ring and all! Yeah, made sure of it! I love Louis so much more, every time I read. He's showing that he's mature and adult and can handle this responsibility with his family.
Dom cried! That's was sweet. I wanted to join the hug. Heck, I'll join anyway... *hugs*
That cot is adorable. I'm so glad Louis got to see it and have it and his little girl will love it. I cannot wait for her to be born and for Louis to have his family. It'll be adorable and amazing and... There isn't enough adjectives in the world to describe the cuteness.
Awesome chapter. Cannot wait for more.
Sam.Author's Response: Louis is definitely standing his ground! He won't have Ted telling him what he can and can't do.
Oh yes the tag team will so be there!! Go Horatio and Bill!!
Yep Dom cried :D She's so cute bless her! :D
I love the cot idea, I just had to have it in there. It would make sense that Arthur would build one for someone. :D
Hehe thank you for reading and reviewing my lovely!! :D Report Review
OHMYGOD!!! YAY! :D
Bless Louis for taking the bull by the horns and deciding to go to Freya's despite knowing her dad may be there and not let him see her.
I'm so, so, so glad that Louis got to see Freya! I'm so happy for him right now.
N'awww, so much Louis/Freya I can't handle the cuteness and their having a baby girl!! *Insert me awwing about a zillion times here*
Shame her dad had to ruin the moment, It'll be interesting to see what happens next since Louis has been caught. I hope he allows Louis to be a part of Freya and his daughter's life.
I can't wait for the next chapter and fore more Louis/Freya action!!
Soph xx :DAuthor's Response: Louis really wanted to see Freya, so he didn't care what he would face in going to see her.
Aww Louis and Freya are cute together, but there's a lot of issues at the moment that they need to sort out, which her father won't let them do. And yep a little girl :D
Her dad is not a nice person at all! The next chapter is up my lovely! So I hope that you like it.
Thanks for reading and reviewing Soph!! :D xx Report Review
loved this chapter! now I wonder if Louis will stand up to Ted and say that he wants to be there for Freya... and I wonder if Freya will have to choose staying with Louis, in case her parents kick her out... anyway, I can't wait to read next chapter to see what happens!^_^
Harry and GinnyAuthor's Response: :D Thank you hun!
Louis is finally getting brave enough to stand up for what he believes in and what he wants, so he's not going to take Ted kicking him out very lightly.
And with Freya... well that would be telling :D
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Kieron! You mentioned Kieron! I'm so glad you've added him to this story. :D
Vic and Dom are just so lovely, even giving their niece Dom's room. My siblings would never do a thing like that for one of us. I love that Vic's the Quidditch obsessed one in the family. It's awesome to see.
Aww, he's smiled seeing the scan. That was just adorable. I really wanted to hug him right then.
This chapter was amazing. I loved it. :)
Sam.Author's Response: I had to mention Kieron, he is so awesomely awesome!
Vic and Dom are like the perfect sisters, if that was me, I'd tell my brother to use his own room and stop taking mine haha.
I wanted to have a different person obsessed with Quidditch in the family so I chose fashion and make up obsessed Vic :D
Yep he's being all cute and I just want to hug and squish him!
You're amazing Sam!! :D Thanks for reading and reviewing :D Report Review
I love this story.
It's great to read a pregnancy story from the side of the father for a change, very original.
I really can't wait to read what happens next.Author's Response: Yay!! I'm so happy that you love this story :D
Thank you for saying that it is an original idea, I've never seen a story from the point of view of the father so I'm glad that you like it.
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N'aww this chapter is so adorable. I love that his family are so supportive!!
Louis and Horatio = awesome bromance! :D
Louis, Vic and Dom = cuteness overload, so adorable. I love that they're willing to share so that Freya and the baby can have a room and stay. ASDFGHJKL!! I love them so much. If Freya's parents do kick her out at least shelll have somewhere to stay .
Can't wait to see more progress on the Freya front. I really hope she and the baby will use the room at somepoint :)
Soph xxAuthor's Response: Louis's family are very supportive, they're the best family :D
Ah yes Louis and Horatio do have a good bromance. They're very good for each other.
I'm so glad that you like Louis, Vic and Dom, they're such good brothers and sisters. Aww :D I'm so glad that you love them :D
I hope you continue reading to find out more :D All of your questions will be answered.
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I'm glad that Louis' family is being supportive of his situation, though I wish that Freya's father would let Louis see his daughter so they could discuss how things will go... though I wonder if Freya's parents will kick her out if she chooses to stay with Louis at his house. can't wait to read the next chapter!^_^
Harry and GinnyAuthor's Response: Louis has the best supportive family ever, they're all so good to him and all talk to each other, which is good. Unlike Freya's family.
I'm so glad that you liked this chapter.
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OMG. Louis' family are so sweet, especially his sisters. I just wanted to join in their group hug, then discreetly push them away so it was just me and Louis. ;)
I know I say this often, but I really hope Louis gets to be a father, even if Freya is out of the picture. I just want the baby to have that room now that Vic and Dom have suggested it.
I really can't wait for more now. I'm just so excited to see how things progress. :D
P.S. Thank you for the shout out and for the compliment about my stories. :)Author's Response: Aren't the Weasleys like the best family ever! :p I think that we should definitely join the group hug, don't worry I'll distract the others so that you can have Louis all to yourself :p
Aww he'll get his chance, don't you worry. Louis is not going to let his baby get away from him without a fight.
Your stories are awesome!! I love them so much, so you are very welcome for the shoutout and compliment :D
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