OHMYGOSH YOU'RE BACK!
Okay, I'll read the story now.
Beets and carrots? That's very interesting choice. xD
AWH no Quidditch?! Quidditch is, like, *awesome* though!
See? Quidditch is awesome! Even Charlie thinks so!
But you know that, because you wrote her. Anyways.
Okay, I found a small mess-up. When Penny's talking about Slughorn's dinner party, she said that Louis "said mentioned" something. One of those words doesn't really need to be there:)
WHOA, WHOA, WHOA. Scorpius is in Gryffindor?!
Hmm. I never thought about him being in any house other than Slytherin. It's interesting!
OHMYGOODNESS WE'RE GOING TO FIND OUT WHY SHE DOESN'T PLAY QUIDDITCH.
I was wondering.
She has to play Quidditch.
I demand that she play Quidditch!!
Of course, it's sort of your call, but anyways.
Freaking excellent chapter, as far as I'm concerned. No really problematic mistakes or anything like that. Can't wait for the next one!Author's Response: haha, thanks for such an awesome review!! You're my favorite reviewer right now!! Report Review
Oooh, yay, another chapter:) It seemed like a bit of a filler, but that vision was interesting. I'm really looking forward to finding out what Charlie thought was familiar about the tent.
The way you opened up the chapter was interesting, and I liked it! There were two spelling mistakes that I noticed; 'numbskull' which has a 'b' in it, and 'officially' which has an extra 'l'. If there were any others, I didn't catch them!
Another good chapter, though! I'm looking forward to the next one!Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing so consistently! Will have to go back again and edit the spelling- thanks for pointing it out! Thanks!! :-) Report Review
What? How do you get kicked out of Beauxbatons?! On second thought, if there's a way, it doesn't surprise me that Charlie found it.
I just love Penny! Her character seems very Hermione-ish, but not so much that she isn't at all original. And her friendship with Charlie is just awesome.
Okay, so that cliffhanger of an ending... you'd better get a new chapter up soon, or I just might be the one to spontaneously combust!
There were a few grammar mistakes, but other than that, I think the chapter was pretty good. Can't wait for the next one!Author's Response: Thanks for being such a great reviewer! Much apprieciated! Will go back and fix the mistakes soon, and another chapter is in the works!! Thanks!!! Report Review
Yay a new chapter:D There's not much to comment on, as we're still really early in the story and whatnot, but I still really liked it.
I especially loved the bit about Charlie having to jump on the caboose of the Express to avoid being late. That was awesome!
I'm liking pretty much every character so far, too! Keep up the good work! :DAuthor's Response: Aw, thanks! Thanks for being such a great reviewer, glad to know that you really like it! Thanks for the review again! Report Review
Finally, a Charlie/Penny/Louis (and all those other people) story! After reading In The Rain, I really wanted to hear more about them, so I'm glad this story is up! Can't wait for the next chapter:)Author's Response: Thanks! Really glad you liked it! Hopefully others will too!! The next chapters will hopefully be coming soon! Report Review
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