I like it:) i think you got the guys hormones just right. I have an older brother so yeah... But i definatly think you should make this a novella...that would be pretty goood.

Author's Response: Thank you. I have two older brother's myself, so I used them for a bit of guy inspiration. xD

And novella is in the works. The reviewers convinced me. :D

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haha, this story is good! I hope you do turn it into a novella!! Great writing, and a GREAT scenario! =]

Author's Response: Thank yous ^^ I actually got the idea from listening to "Jessie's Girl" by Rick Springfield.

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This is pretty well-written. I can definitely tell because of the fact that you're twenty, so that is a big help! I really liked how Remus describes the girl. Where was he when he was staring at her? She did not notice, so I am curious!

Author's Response: Thank you!

*hands you a cookie in appreciation* ^^

In my imagination (scary place that xD), he was standing just inside the doorway of the dormitory. Sirius' bed would be the one to the right of the door. She doesn't notice him because of the plot I'm contemplating for the novella. I'd give you a proper answer, but I don't want to give away the surprise. Lol.

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Very well done. Awkward on his part though. Cool if he had a girlfriend. Think you did a really good job at writing for a boy, I know how hard it is. Would love to read more.
Keep up the good work!!

padmoonyfoot7: over and out!!

Author's Response: Thank you! You made me feel much better about the fact I wrote as a guy. :3

*doles out another cookie*

I don't know if he has a girlfriend or not yet. Would definitely add some drama to the story if he did.

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