Okay, so I normally don't review stories more than once (mostly because I feel like I just keep repeating myself), but I cannot sit by and not let this chapter get any reviews. This story is fantastic and it really deserves more credit. Anyway, I absolutely love this chapter and the whole story. Their whole relationship is absolutely adorable, and I love your writing style. Stay Amazing!Author's Response: Thank you so much true hero :) Thanks for the support and for the review. I totally understand what you mean about repetitiveness but now I know for sure you love it! Glad you're enjoying it and I will put the next chapter in the queue asap! Report Review
I love this story so much! You are really a great author. I am practically obsessed with Neville, and I hate how little fanfics are written about him. When I first found this story, I just about died. You write his character so well. Every time he and Hannah have one of those cute little moments I can't help but smile. I can't wait for more. Just keep up the amazing work :)Author's Response: Thank you so much true hero. I am so glad you enjoyed it! The next chapter is up and thanks for the lovely review :) Report Review
I actually really liked this chapter and im so glad that i took this chance to read it. The characterization is so interesting and fun and unique. The voice of the story is also really different and i liked it. I think its awesome that you are writing about characters who do tend to get overlooked in fanfiction and are filling in their story. I love that this is ground in canon events, it really helps us to understand where we are at with the characters and where we might expect them to go. I loved some of your word usage as well. In some spots things just really stood out to me just from a certain word used and really helped me to connect with the story. I thought characterization was pretty spot on for Neville, very much into herbology and very much not for potions. I felt for him when he describes himself of being an under dog, unnoticed, thats never a fun feeling. I love how hannah seems to have taken an interest in him as well but he cant see that at the moment. Really i thought this first chapter was pretty solid.
~slytherinchica08~Author's Response: Thank you so much. I absolutely love this story. Think it is my favourite to write. Thanks so much for taking the time to read it. It means a lot that you left such a great review too.
I hope you enjoy the rest of the story :) Report Review
For all it's worth, I think you are not getting enough reviews! There are so few stories focusing on the minor characters out there - and Neville being an essential part of the story - I don't understand why there isn't more attention on them!
So, anyway, I think you are doing a really good job at portraying Neville and his insecurities and feelings. Hannah is an interesting character and just like you would expect a Hufflepuff to be.
I might be going back to review the rest of the chapters at a later point. :)Author's Response: Thank you so much Kristina! This is one of my favourite stories to write. I love Neville's character so much, all of his insecurities and strengths. And Hannah is just as insecure, trying to find her place in the world. She doesn't enjoy school nor is an academic type, she doesn't think she is brave or pretty or anything like that; she is just lost and they help each other to find their way. I specifically enjoy the non-physical side to their relationship and the fact that they haven't kissed yet which makes what they have special because their emotions tie them together.
With this story, the small number of reviews doesn't bother me, I'm just glad it's out there for people to read and enjoy and I'm glad you did both! The next chapter is in the queue :D Report Review
I love this story so much. I don't understand why there are barely any Neville/Hannah fanfics and this one is really good. I really hope you continue it!Author's Response: Thanks so much! It's one of my favourites to write. I absolutely love writing Neville and Hannah because many people don't! I have been writing more when I can and I will try to update soon :) Report Review
well written, I hope you'll write how they get through the following year and battle.Author's Response: Working on it. Thanks for the review Report Review
Omg. Omg omg omg. I saw the title of this chapter and thought I knew what was going to happen--and when Ernie kissed Hannah instead, my eyes legit popped. Again, I love how Hermione is counseling Neville through all this. Another great chapter!Author's Response: I love your reviews! Yes, I try to trick people with titles. But yes, eventually it will happen, just not the way people expect and certainly not in a chapter entitled 'First Kiss'! Glad you liked it and I will update soon :D Report Review
*squee* This was an awesome chapter! I especially liked Neville getting the chance to talk to some of the other characters, especially when Neville was telling Hermione he didn't like Luna, and Hermione already knew the truth. You do a great job writing Hermione. I'll look forward to the next chapter!Author's Response: Thank you very much SereneChaos. I always intended for Hermione to know all along and she will be his source of advice for a while I think :) The next chapter will be up soon Report Review
Eep! Great work, and I'll look forward to reading the rest of this later!Author's Response: Thanks so much, SereneChaos. Glad there are are so many others out there who love Neville/Hannah and the Neville/Luna thing is coming up :D Report Review
Ah! Lovely! I really liked how you portray Hannah and her friends--I feel like a lot of romances tend to only follow the two main characters. But I think for Hannah, the way she and Susan got along, was perfect. She's just the right amount of babbly and gossipy with Susan, plus I loved that she asked for a muggle romance book for Christmas.
As a side note from the previous chapter: the shield charm is actually 'protego' so it was a little confusing hearing Neville say he was failing at casting the shield charm when he was saying 'expelliarmus'. It probably should have been his partner using the disarming spell instead.Author's Response: Yes, sorry, I do get a bit confused. ANother thing I will edit, but thank you for reading and helping me out with this. Report Review
Ah! I can never get enough Hannah/Neville!
I like the premise of the story you had in your summary--that love takes time. I loved some of the little IC things you included: Neville liking other girls before (I'd love it even more if you addressed the potential Neville/Luna ship at some point), the way Neville's narration got carried away when he talked about how he loved herbology (perfect), when he mentioned that he was interested in things other than the Mimbulus mimbletonia, etc.
My only real critique is that page breaks or dividers between scenes would be super helpful, and that at times the language seems a little...antiquated for a 15 year old to be using.
Example: "I needed to get fit, I pondered wearily. It was so heavy, but I darenít complain even though we only went a couple of feet once we got through the crowd at the doors and in the Entrance Hall."
I think it's fantastic he thinks he needs to get fit, but the word 'daren't' seems noticeably out of place. You didn't do this too often in the chapter, but it's a little thing to be aware of later.
As a Neville fangirl (and someone who would totally be Hannah if she was in HP world), I think your characterization is spot on, and I'm looking forward to reading the rest of this!Author's Response: Thank you. I suppose the daren't is just habit of me constantly writing fics about Hermione. Will edit. Thanks!! Report Review
so cute! More???!!!???!?!?!?!?!?!?!?!? Please?Author's Response: Oh thank you Report Review
Sorry I have not reviewed before now. Great story about Neville. Cannot wait for more!!Author's Response: Ahhh thank you very much. It is my favourite at the moment so I will keep updating :) Report Review
Brilliant. Would love more!Author's Response: Since you asked, I will provide :) Report Review
this is a nice story! im going to keep following it for sure. check out mine, its called The AftermathAuthor's Response: Oh thank you very much. I will have a look x Report Review
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