Awwwsome !!! I really enjoy this story: always liked the character of Narcissa (so much more than the eye can see)... The way you portrayed Lucius Malfoy also fits the facts- but I do wonder if N&L will end up together if N does integrate the Order of the Phoenix... Maybe you don't intend them to end up together (personnaly, I don't think I would like something as creepy as a Narcissa and Lupin pairing- Draco must live on !!!). Anyway, love the idea, acknowlege the effort, admire the editing and enjoy the characters. Please UPDATE soon !!! And Good luck ! ♡ Report Review
Hey Drue! I'm here as promised for our exchange :)
I really love the concept here, as I mentioned before, and now that I see that you've based it on the Prince(ss) and the Pauper, it totally makes sense! I thought the whole chapter flowed really well, and I loved the description, especially the way we were able to observe Bella's initiation through the eyes of her terrified, victimized younger sister. I can definitely see the reasons for Narcissa's feeling that she doesn't belong in her family, and I could also see her devotion through your attention to detail, like the way she gripped the mirror frame so hard as her mother laced her into her dress.
I love your characterization of Narcissa - she seems so unsure of this entire endeavor, so uncomfortable, but then she keeps coming back to needing to impress her family and at least act like the young pureblood woman she's supposed to be. I think she's a fascinating character, and I love writing her, but often I see her portrayed as being really two-dimensional, falling into either the devoted wife portrayal or the abused wife portrayal. I like your subtlety here, and I can see that there's more to her than what's on the surface. I'm excited to get to know her further!
The theme of being a female here is interesting. I guess I've always assumed that the Death Eaters were sort of sexist, or at least that they had little appreciation for having someone as bossy and unstable as Bellatrix in their midst. Here, though, Bella's participation seems to be welcomed by her fellow initiates, and I'm curious to know more about her invitation to join up with Voldemort. In fact, if anything was missing here, that might be it, though I could also see it fitting in later on.
This review feels really short, probably because (a) there are only so many ways to say that I loved it, and (b) I don't really have much CC to offer here. I'm definitely going to favorite this, and I'm really excited to dig in to the next chapter when it's posted, and to get to know more of your Lily and how she happened to meet Narcissa in that clearing. Additionally, I liked the way you used the quotes (which both seemed relevant) to anchor the chapter into place. All in all, very nice job - it was a pleasure exchanging with you! :)
-Amanda Report Review
This is really interesting so far! I can't wait to see whats gonna happen now! Update again soon please! =] Report Review
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