Reading Reviews for Kingdom Come
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Review #1, by wenlock The Switch

21st July 2014:
This is a really unique idea. I like it. I will definitely keep reading this story. One thing I worry about for you, the bane of all Marauder Era fics - the Peter issue. I know he's hard to write because I'm writing a Marauder Era right now too. But you are obviously a skilled writer, so he should at least make an appearance, or he should have a reason for not being there.
Anyways, keep up the good work. Your story has such an interesting, unique dynamic. I look forward to reading more.

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Review #2, by crestwood The Parting of the Ways

25th June 2014:
This could've gone so wrong with even just the smallest misstep. It's a really hard premise to try to write. I mean Narcissa and Lily impersonating each other for who knows how long, really? It all seems impossible.

But, with that said, you totally pulled it off. You've got me on my toes with every little reveal. Everyone seems to know the risks, but it doesn't seem out of character for them to give it a try at all. I can't wait to read on and find out what becomes of everyone! Thank you for your request, I really enjoyed reading :)

Author's Response: Great! Thank you! Your review had me worried at first, but then that second paragraph turned everything around! :D I'm glad you think that I can pull it off well enough. That was really my main concern. Thanks so much again! I wasn't expecting all three reviews, so that was a huge bonus! Thanks again!

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Review #3, by crestwood The Dilemma.

25th June 2014:
This chapter was so intriguing because the reactions were so varied. It would have been very unrealistic to portray everyone as completely ready to accept Narcissa into the Order, so I'm very glad you didn't go that route. Lily and Dumbledore were very in character, and I would have expected them to be all for helping the weak. And, of course, Mad Eye would be suspicious and untrusting, as is his nature. Although it is AU and kind of brand new to me, it isn't quite so far out there as to be outside the realm of believability in my opinion. I'm interested in whether they will force her to infiltrate her family, even knowing that she would not be great at keeping the secret hidden. I guess I'll just have to read on to find out!

Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you would have found that unrealistic. I know that would have definitely been the easier route, but I knew I couldn't just cop out because it was easy! Thank you very much for your input!

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Review #4, by crestwood Hellfire

25th June 2014:
Hey! Crestwood here with your requested review :)

You asked if the story is believable and I can assure you that, here in the early goings, it's very much so. Narcissa being characterized as kind of creeped out by the whole Death Eater business doesn't seem too far off to me, as she never seemed quite as enthralled with Voldemort's aims as everyone else even in the cannon novels.

I am interested to see how you'll approach her running into Lily and "taking her place" as you said. I suppose that'll be the true make or break moment. I can't wait!

Author's Response: Ah, thank you! What a turn around time! Thank you so much. I'm glad to see that you don't see this as too far-fetched or anything. I'm glad this seemed to catch your attention too. Really, thank you so much for your time and your thoughts! It's definitely very very appreciated!

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Review #5, by ArtyBird The Dilemma.

27th December 2012:
Awwwsome !!! I really enjoy this story: always liked the character of Narcissa (so much more than the eye can see)... The way you portrayed Lucius Malfoy also fits the facts- but I do wonder if N&L will end up together if N does integrate the Order of the Phoenix... Maybe you don't intend them to end up together (personnaly, I don't think I would like something as creepy as a Narcissa and Lupin pairing- Draco must live on !!!). Anyway, love the idea, acknowlege the effort, admire the editing and enjoy the characters. Please UPDATE soon !!! And Good luck ! ‎​‎​♡

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Review #6, by academica Hellfire

18th July 2012:
Hey Drue! I'm here as promised for our exchange :)

I really love the concept here, as I mentioned before, and now that I see that you've based it on the Prince(ss) and the Pauper, it totally makes sense! I thought the whole chapter flowed really well, and I loved the description, especially the way we were able to observe Bella's initiation through the eyes of her terrified, victimized younger sister. I can definitely see the reasons for Narcissa's feeling that she doesn't belong in her family, and I could also see her devotion through your attention to detail, like the way she gripped the mirror frame so hard as her mother laced her into her dress.

I love your characterization of Narcissa - she seems so unsure of this entire endeavor, so uncomfortable, but then she keeps coming back to needing to impress her family and at least act like the young pureblood woman she's supposed to be. I think she's a fascinating character, and I love writing her, but often I see her portrayed as being really two-dimensional, falling into either the devoted wife portrayal or the abused wife portrayal. I like your subtlety here, and I can see that there's more to her than what's on the surface. I'm excited to get to know her further!

The theme of being a female here is interesting. I guess I've always assumed that the Death Eaters were sort of sexist, or at least that they had little appreciation for having someone as bossy and unstable as Bellatrix in their midst. Here, though, Bella's participation seems to be welcomed by her fellow initiates, and I'm curious to know more about her invitation to join up with Voldemort. In fact, if anything was missing here, that might be it, though I could also see it fitting in later on.

This review feels really short, probably because (a) there are only so many ways to say that I loved it, and (b) I don't really have much CC to offer here. I'm definitely going to favorite this, and I'm really excited to dig in to the next chapter when it's posted, and to get to know more of your Lily and how she happened to meet Narcissa in that clearing. Additionally, I liked the way you used the quotes (which both seemed relevant) to anchor the chapter into place. All in all, very nice job - it was a pleasure exchanging with you! :)


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Review #7, by naflower05 Hellfire

6th May 2012:
This is really interesting so far! I can't wait to see whats gonna happen now! Update again soon please! =]

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