Oh. My. GOSH.
That was definitely adorable; this is the first ever piece I've read about Molly and Arthur and their relationship when they were still at Hogwarts, and oh my, I am pleasantly surprised.
I've got to say your summary really drew me in, 'and no, it's not James Potter'. Yup, that definitely amused me.
Then I'm going to go on and praise you for your amazing character development. Well... Arthur and Molly aren't really your chracters but still. You've made them into teenagers in a way I didn't think was possible.
I've always imagined them as the two adults they are, and it's definitely refreshing to see someone portray them in such a manner.
Then, you're own character, Sam. He was just plain awesome. I know this was an one-shot, because I was searching for One-Shots, but could you do something more with him maybe? Not that you have to or anything. I just found him very interesting.
Then I was wondering, when did you write the first version? I read that too, and it wasn't bad but the revised edition was definitely improved.
Especially with the flashbacks.
Sorry, if I'm rambling I do that often.
You know, I am definitely going to read some of your other work, because this was great. You better expect some reviews!Author's Response: Thank you, this is probably the longest review I have ever had. I'm really glad you liked Sam.
p.s. I'm making a one-shot about him! Report Review
I think this story is really realky cute. I have never read a fanfic about how Molly and Arthur got together and I think you did a good job. What I miss is the 'Weasley-things', you know, the things about Weasleys that they don't have much money and that they have more children than that they could raise and stuff. You could have put more of these facts in your story. I also would've liked to read more about confrontations with Malfoy and his gang. There are still some minor errors. But still: GOOD JOB!
Xxx SLGAuthor's Response: Thank you for reviewing. I will most likely go back and revise this again so I can put in some more 'Weasley-stuff'. Sort of realized while I was writing it that I didn't quite put that much in. Thank you! Report Review
Aw this was a really cute oneshot about arthur and molly finally getting together! I liked seeing how nervous he was about asking her out and thought that that was a sweet touch. And the ending with molly asking him on a date was really cute to see as well. I felt bad for him that he felt less manly because she asked him out rather than him being able to ask her like "normal". I think that while this was a short oneshot it did a good job of laying out your story though it would have been nice to have had more description going on. Altogether though this was a good oneshot and very cute. Great job.
~Slytherinchica08~Author's Response: Thank you! I have revised the story. so it is now longer with way more stuff happening. It's in the que. I hope you read the new version. Report Review
Oh! I thought this was really good. (:
I saw a few odd mistakes like wriggling instead of wiggling her eyebrows. To instead of too and such but they were only minor. C: My only other concern was it seemed like a quick run through but you did warn us. I think you should give it another good look at though, it deserves it!
It really is a good little piece though! I know you didn't give it much thought but you have done well. Arthur/Molly are such a sweet pairing that I love. They are taken for granted, though. Like they've always been together. This shows the other side while keeping true to character. Well done on such a sweet piece!Author's Response: Thank you! I probably will go through it again at a later time and fix it and make it longer. Thank you for your review! Report Review
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