so has james "proporly" proposed? Will Remus take Holly to a town dance and one of her old friends from school? I think that she and Remus should leave in a hurry becuase they dont want to draw attention, though they were the eyes of the dance floor. remus should have to "obliviate" the memory of the old school friend of hollys and then something else interesting happens. And why did you take so long to update? This is one of my favorites! Please do not make me wait as long for the next update:) I checked every week hoping for a new chapter. But yeah, good, and I like that Holly's wolf form is more natural than Remus'. Why is that? I like what you are doing, keep it up!Author's Response: The proposal? Nope (wait just a little, please!)
The reason it took me so long to update was because I kept writing and then deleting, I had done about 5 different plot lines. It included everything from Holly going home, getting a job, joining them on stakeouts but it just didn't work and I didn't want to just do a several months later bit. I like your idea, I had toyed with that before so maybe I'll bring that back and work it in.
Are you referring to when James said Holly was a 'natural born huntress'? James was having a go at Remus and messing with Holly a bit as wel. Don't take that as she's a 'better' werewolf. ((yet.)) ;)
I have about half of ch 21 edited and ready to go...
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Screaming in frustration and happiness -- frustration because the chapter ended, happiness for how it ended. Ugh Lily is being bitchy but also not being bitchy and just being herself which is good. And just Remus and Holly are so great together and it's frustrating that Remus has to leave so much for the Order and that everyone is such a (excuse my lack of a better term) cockblock for Remus and Holly. Was so happy to see this update!Author's Response: Thank you so much for reading and reviewing! Glad that you are enjoying it.
And its tough when everyone drops in on Holly constantly- but they almost view her as a pet to take care of and check in on. Remus is going to have to get better locks on his door if they want to move further in their relationship, huh? Report Review
I LOVE THIS it is so good and I wish I could read this in a book LOL you should write a book!Author's Response: Thank you! Report Review
I am absolutely in love with this story! The idea is really unique and this story is one of my top favorites on this website. So please keep updating I am eagerly awaiting the next chapter.Author's Response: I'm sorry I'm making you wait so long!
Hope you enjoy the next update.
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Yay more Remus And Holly!! I love them so much, I think they are very realistic written! (despite the fact that many woul say magic don't exist, but what do hey know??) :PAuthor's Response: Thank you so much! Report Review
How does she know she's going to be a werewolf?
I know that in all the legends its sort of a given, you get bitten by one, you are one, stands to reason.
But she's just been told magic is real (still no real reaction other than; I see it, so it must be), and that she's been bitten by a werewolf (and I'm still lacking in some reaction over the other three turning into animals as well)
So why would she just jump to the conclusion that everything she knew as a story would also be true, it stands to reason that if magic turns out to be real, surely you ought to question everything else you've been holding as folk-loric-legend/true.
I mean, from what I see and how she internalises everything I like Holly a lot, but there's not really a lot to like. I need character development; so far all I've got is a shockingly clear head, no shockingly incapacitating amounts of pain after a werewolf attack and a tendency to flare up at the slightest antagonism. The last I'll accept could just be a reaction to the current situation she's in, but compared to her lack of reaction at most of the other, slightly more pressing situations, I'm not really sure.
Still, I'm not quitting on it, this has a lot of potential.
Bryarly :)Author's Response: Holly saw the animal, got bit by the animal, found out it was a werewolf along with the existence of magic. It was quite the load to be dumped upon her, but it fits with the legends and such.
She never did see the other three turning to their animagus forms so that question never occurred.
Holly's questions are mostly answered as she works her way through Remus' bookshelves.
You seem a great philosopher Bryarly. I like the thought of more skepticism on Holly's behalf.
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Holly's a muggle. Didn't expect that. Quite like it.
I think I feel slightly more now. So that's nice.
Your grammar and spelling are near on perfect, and your vocabulary is really quite impressive, which I like.
I don't think I'd've reacted in quite the same way though, I mean, surely it would be a lot more painful, and I'm fairly sure numbing charms and healing spells wouldn't take all the pain away, and if they did, really I don't think she'd be quite lucid enough to hold that sort of conversation and not go absolutely mental.
Also, she took it so calmly, I mean, I'm a very logical thinker, so I'd take a lot more convincing, but Holly doesn't strike me as a stupid person, or particularly easy to placate about anything, but to just accept it?
I mean, you'd've thought about strings and pullies, or alternative methods of everything, because evidently its that or just disappear. And anyway, what about her family? She'll disappear and obviously be fine, but what about when they start looking...?
I just need to quit ranting really.
Overall I think I'm going to like this a whole lot, it's just that when I like something this much I really want it to be perfect, so my criticisms are meant to be really constructive, and not quite as nit-picky as they seem.
Bryarly :)Author's Response: Good point about her accepting so easily. You'll see that Holly was in a total rut at home and going nowhere. Her imagination is just wild enough that this would be probable.
I'm getting to family soon!
Keep up the criticisms! It makes me realize plot holes or things I need to elaborate upon.
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Well, as beginnings go, I've definitely read worse.
I don't think I feel particularly. I mean, that wasn't supposed to be a whole sentence but I don't know what to think.
Its fairly obvious who the dog, wolf, stag and rat are, that's fine, and I like the assessment by your main character, the first person point of view is generally my favourite; I visualise better when there's that, and I can identify with that sort of ineternal monologue, so that's great.
And then the wolf bit her.
Now. I get that to have my questions answered, I need to read more, so I'm gonna go do that.
Still... I mean, it's a prologue, it grabbed my attention... That's what they're for I suppose.
Bryarly :)Author's Response: Thanks, I really appreciate this review!
I loved it, so happy. I need more, I'm addicted to your story.Author's Response: Thank you!
I'll be updating soon! I know I say that all the time, but hopefully I can get back on track again! Report Review
Oh how I hate cliffhangers!! I am so looking forward to next chapter.
Love that Holly and Remus dance together, very nice :PAuthor's Response: Thank you! Just posted another chapter (sorry for the wait!) and its a long one!
WRITE MORE! it was awsome. i loved how remus knew how to dance and is now teaching Holly. i squeeled at the part where he made her look at him. please keep writing!Author's Response: Gracias, chica! I'm loving this short queue. Thanks for reading and reviewing, I love to hear your opinions! Report Review
Very nice chapter (;
Come on lets see some more holly/remus action!! though it's a good thing that you don't rush the relationship!!
And oh the way James proposed, ups :P I liked this very much.Author's Response: Thanks and soon!
Yep, big oops.
Also: just submitted the next chapter :) Report Review
Love this!(: Can't wait for the next chapter!(:Author's Response: Thank you!
(Is it weird that I always get confused by smileys that face the other way?) Report Review
I really, truly love this story. I can't wait for the next chapter. :)Author's Response: Thank you so much, I'll try to get the next update soon but my computer is at the doctor :( Report Review
I love this story! I'm hooked and Holly's character is a breath of fresh air (sometimes i find the lead girl characters in these stories a bit whiny) Really hope you update soon. Love BearAuthor's Response: Thanks!
I try not to let her get whiny, sometimes I'm afraid she is ... but given the situation, I'll let her complain every so often.
I'll try to update soon, having major computer issues now which is driving me bonkers! Report Review
Ah - just binged on the last twelve chapters of your story. I love the idea of Holly being a Muggle. It makes it much more interesting. All the tension and what-not. The characterisations are very realistic, and I hope there will be many many many more chapters posted! You should be very proud. :)Author's Response: Thank you! Report Review
I'm loving your story! Brilliant! :D Report Review
you must write more! please, please, please!
It's so good! the failed kiss scene was funny, just so you know. I don't like cliff-hangers so please write more!Author's Response: I will! Promise, promise, promise!
Glad you found it funny! I think this is something that has happened to many of us... but you can either laugh about it, take offense to it, or be mortified by it... right? Report Review
Yay, another chap!!
Really great done, I soo hope Remus and Holly realize that the are made for eachother!!
Was the fact that Holly came back after disapperating a mystery or just something that happend?
I hope for an update soon :PAuthor's Response: I am so sorry I fibbed about the last update, it was in the queue but I needed to update the warnings which held it up.
As for the apparation : I think that you must have magic even to side along. So when he tried to nab Holly, it didn't work. But Holly using the stolen wand was enough when she was w Remus... probably not canon but I'm going w it. Report Review
It just keeps getting better and better, I'm quite curious as to how Remus will react. I love how you make your characters seem so real. Great job really, and I look forward to the next chapter.(:Author's Response: Obrigada! Im glad you're enjoying it! But really, how would YOU react? :) Report Review
A bit more about Holly!! Hurrah :P
Very nice chapter, I'm looking forward to Alice and Franks wedding! Perhaps Holly should talk to James about marrige?? Oh and it will be really fun to see Remus as Holly's date to the wedding.
I hope theres an update soon.
-AmeliaQAuthor's Response: Well you asked!
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Yay. This is such a good story. :) Keep writing, please!Author's Response: Merci beaucoup,
You got it, dude!
Ooooh, they caught a Muggle!Author's Response: haha, this review made me laugh out loud,
yes, yes, they did! Report Review
Hey again :P
Good chapter, a lovely homie chap!!
I hope you in the next chapter will have a bit more action, but very well written.
If I may have one critique point then it would that we don't know much about Holly.
How does she look?
Didnít she have any ambitions, she might have felt grounded at her parentsí home, but didn't she have dreams?
What about friends, boyfriends and family??
You are very good at portraying peopleís feelings.
So keep on going you are very good!!
(sorry about the š's they won't go away!!)Author's Response: action in two chapters? If you're willing to wait, pretty please?
And I am editing the one I'm going to submit soon to include more about Holly. I often forget that what is in my head hasn't always gone into writing.
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This is SO good!! I really love it.
I'm looking forward to read about alice wedding (and franks).
I think it's a pitty you haven't had any rewivers in the last couple og chapters (;
Because people are missing out on something, that I'll tell you!!
This is with a plot thats alot different than the usually; Remus meets girl in order, falls in love, doesn't think he is good enough, she tell him he is, happy ending!! (not that there are not good storys with that theme, but still)
So i'm looking forward to the next update.Author's Response: Well aren't you sweet! Thank you! Report Review
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