nice chapter! Does she tell Remus? Report Review
what a cool idea!
you might work on the friend thing, it's a bit abrupt, the changes. But I like it! Report Review
OMGOMGOMGOMGOMGOMG YOU NEED TO KEEP WRITING THIS STORY! I'm serious, bro. The description of it is captivating, and I'm so stoked to read this. And I love the character developpement through flashbacks. One little suggestion though - you don't need to specify where the flashback starts and ends. Just putting it in italics is enough to let the readers know. I'm so excited for this! And your name is Whovian. I'm in love with you, bro. Keep writing!Author's Response: Thank you SO much!!! I am glad you enjoyed reading the first chapter, the second one is coming soon. I'll keep the suggestion in mind as well. Thank you!
~Whovian. :) Report Review
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