I'M HERE TO DO SOME BOSS REVIEWS.
"Telling the other boys nasty stories about a rabid half-gorilla, half-refrigerator swamp monster who attacks children when he smells that they've been eating mint chocolate." wow, that's very...specific. I hope my dream catcher works tonight!
And woah the toilets, that is rank, but I must agree with Trout and say that it was impressive. Disgusting, but impressive...
And Peeves is too good playing the Devil's advocate. Maybe I shouldn't go into teaching after all if there are boys like this out there... ;)
"You have been expelled from six different schools, one of them an all-girl's institution that I frankly have no idea how you managed to get into." AHAHAHAHA lol. That line made me chuckle.
Wowzers: "had even met the Pope once (it was raining and they were both trapped under the same shop awning, waiting for the weather to pass, and the whole time Trout just stood there gawking and couldn't think of anything intelligent to say; except much later in bed that night, of course, he thought of all kinds of meaningful, memorable doctrines he could have recited to impress him)" YOU KNOW ABOUT THE LYING IN BED AT NIGHT THING. I THOUGHT I WAS THE ONLY ONE THAT DID THIS. I feel so much better now.
This was brilliant. Weird, but brilliant. And so witty. Thank you for being so fantastic!Author's Response: WHAT UP, HANNAH. ♥
I see you have stumbled into my pit of Peeves over here. I love Peeves. I'm pretty sure he invented shenanigans. Also, endless rage that he wasn't included in the films. -shakes fist-
That specific half-refrigerator, half-gorilla is my specific brand of weirdo bleeding into the story, I must admit. I tend to be rather specific when spouting oddities like that.
THE LYING IN BED THING IS THE WORST. Makes you want to run into that person again so that you can be impressive and impression-making but it's always fail because that is the way of the world. Woe~
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This story -- FLAWLESS.
I couldn't stop laughing while reading it, I think you portrayed Peeves perfectly!
I absolutely love how you used St. Brutus's as well. I think that all of those pranks would definitely be something Peeves would do, and overall - just an amazing story!
Love the banner too, the troll face cracked me up XDAuthor's Response: Eee, yay! Thank you! A story about young Peeves attending St. Brutus's has been floating around my head for a long time, so I'm relieved that I was finally able to get it out of my system. I'm glad you liked it! And hee, the banner. XD I think da Vinci would be jealous of my artwork, don't you think?
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he. I read this and lolololol 5eva. this is great. Very clever, and hilarious and all sorts of wonderful things. I loved all the names for poor mr trout. And poor, poor hogwarts. I can't imagine its halls whilst Waldorf Peeves is there. Sarah, you area a genius.
xoxoAuthor's Response: loool I love Peeves 5eva. FOR CEREAL, WHY WAS HE NEVER IN ANY OF THE MOVIES. Poor Mr. Trout. I've got him pretty vivid in my mind - he's a fine sort of gentleman, but young Peeves is always his undoing.
U iz fabuloso.
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Hello Toujours Padfoot! I'm here on behalf of the HPPC Staff to say thank you so much for entering our Challenge! Your entry is such a great little story and I have nothing but wonderful things to say about it! Honestly, it was so much fun to read, I don't even know where to start!
The top, I suppose? ;-) Immediately you grabbed my attention with the listing of past pranks pulled by the one and only Peeves. You're so inventive, each one getting more ridiculous than the last. hahaha Gosh, Peeves is such a brat... ^.^ This one might be my favorite: "Reworking the entire plumbing system on the third floor so that when people flushed toilets, all of the waste came back up in the bathtubs." - Bahahaha ew.
Speaking of Peeves, can we please talk about how wonderfully you portrayed him here? I think you did such a great job with his character. He was so very canon, but also very much your own creation - a perfect balance of what J.K. Rowling gave us and what your imagination added to him. You gave Peeves such a great story outside of his life haunting Hogwarts, and I love seeing an author take a canon character and connecting how they got to Point B by creating a Point A. And the reason you gave for how Peeves ended up at Hogwarts was just too funny and so plausible. Those poor teachers... hahaha Omg, he's such a brat in this story! "Don't call me Salmon" - LOL! There was honestly a huge chunk of writing in which I believed that Peeves was a character you invented and sculpted yourself because you wrote him with such expertise. It wasn't until the sing-song rhyme about Trout that I remembered 'Oh, yeah, this is Peeves the Poltergeist from Harry Potter, not Waldorf, the trouble-maker from Toujours Padfoot.'
I thought Trout was a great character, too. He had a very distinct voice and the way he talked and thought painted a really clear picture of the type of person he was. This line was my favorite of his: "Really, what sort of lad who wasn't seventy shades of mad would wear such preposterous articles of clothing?"
One of my favorite things you did throughout the story that made me laugh each time was the changing of Trout's last name into other fish. 'Tuna' and 'Salmon' and 'Sushi' LOL I don't know if you watch the show, but it reminded me very much of 'Psych' and the way Shawn is constantly renaming things and when Gus calls him out on it he just says 'I've heard it both ways.' hahaha ...No idea what I'm talking about? Never mind. Moving on!
The ending was brilliant, of course. Very funny, and a perfect example of 'be careful what you wish for'! hahaha Really, the entire story was just so enjoyable, start to finish.
As far as the challenge itself goes, I think you did just a brilliant job with both the way you used the quote and also the fact that the first place prize is a full-sound-effects podcast that I think this story would be so much fun to turn into! The way you used the quote... To be honest, I was laughing so hard I had to stop reading for a bit. LOL I don't know why, but the way the quote came into play just took me by surprise - I knew which quote you had chosen, but when Peeves actually said it, I was just like 'Oh.My.God.That.Just.Happened.' LOL I know that's not a very articulate summation of why I loved it so much, but I simply did. haha
Before I wrap this review up, I just have to tell you that the banner for the story is just beyond hilarious. After seeing the picture of that meme guy and then reading the description about what Peeves was wearing (his hat with with the bell and the bow tie), I seriously could not stop picturing that face sitting in the chair casually in front of Trout the whole time! Hahaha
I think the only thing I noticed, and I'm not even sure if this is truly accurate, but I believe bowtie is two words... I thought it was one, too, but it keeps coming up as a spelling error when I type it and when I google it, 99% of them are saying 'bow tie'. Meh, certainly not a big deal, but figured I point it out anyway and you can do with it as you like! :-p
So basically, to sum all of this up, you're a fantastically talented, creative, and gifted writer and I truly enjoyed this story and thank you again for joining our Challenge! :-)Author's Response: Holy wow, this review. You are very thorough! Oh my goodness, I don't even know how to reply. I'm so glad that you enjoyed adolescent Peeves: Menace To Society, as I had a lot of fun writing him. I'd been turning around the idea for a Peeves one-shot in my mind and as soon as I saw the HPPC quotes challenge and the 'all the meat fell out!' quote, I knew I would have to sit down and finally give Peeves his due. I'm also glad you liked the banner. :3 It took me weeks to make, perfecting every pixel so that it could become the work of art you now see. I labored over placement of the polka dots for many long nights~
Thank you for pointing that out about 'bow tie'. I didn't even notice that! And thank you very much for the thorough and wonderful review and for issuing that challenge. It was so much fun to write for! :D
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BRILLIANT. Waldorf, haaa.
Oh, I enjoyed this so much! You wrote Peeves so well -- no surprise there -- and I really was just awestruck at how his canon traits balanced so well in the seventeen-year-old persona. He was both a poltergeist and a human teenager, and I cannot imagine that's a very easy thing to convey with accuracy (never having had to write such a scene before). The grins, the clothes, the little songs he sings that must be maddening to those who can't find them amusing -- all totally canon, straight from the pages of the books. Mad props to you, yo! ♥
He just might come back to haunt me, he thought with a nervous jolt. -- FORESHADOWING FOR THE WIN. Peeves is so obnoxious, you have to love him. But really, all of Trout's inner commentary was fab. Peeves needs that wet cement stat -- especially for the Salmon and Tuna and Sushi bits. (Except not really, because that's sort of genius.)
YOU'RE AWESOME AND THIS ONE-SHOT IS TOO FUNNY. ♥ How you wrote this in such a short time span is beyond me. I am in perpetual awe but that hasn't changed since I first started reviewing you.
Write moar thingz ~ ♥Author's Response: PEEVES ♥ I feel like Peeves has the best job in Hogwarts. He just does what he wants, yo. My appreciation for him grew after he terrorized Umbridge. WHY WASN'T HE IN THE MOVIES, /WHY/? I rather enjoyed writing Trout, as it was a change in pace to write from a Muggle's perspective. Eee, thank you. ♥ I like to write funneh thingz. Thank you for reading and continuing to read even though you're certainly not obligated, and for leaving me sunny reviews like this one that always make my day more awesome.
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Haha this was a nice little read. I saw your status on the Forums and came to read this. You've written Peeves extremely well, and I like how you incorporated St. Brutus School for incurably criminal boys. This was great fun reading!
The plot was well done, the narrative well written, and the characterization superb.
Great job! 10/10
(AditiDraco95)Author's Response: Hi there! I've been wanting to write about Peeves going to St. Brutus's for ages, and finally saw the opportunity when I decided to write for The Ridiculous Things We've Said challenge. I love Peeves. He's so underwritten. I mean, he wasn't even in the movies at all (such rudeness!) so I felt like he needed some special attention.
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