I really enjoyed reading this story. I can certainly imagine Narcissa's desire to be more like her sister. I like to think that after the war Narcissa reconciled with her sister.
I don't think that she would be disgusted by Lucius, however. As I feel that she truly loves him, and she wants to keep her family safe.
CypressQueenAuthor's Response: I'm glad that you can imagine Narcissa's feelings. In response to your second point, I imagine that initially Narcissa would be disgusted by Lucius because of the situation that the Malfoys found themselves in toward the end of the war. However, I do agree that she truly loves him... I think maybe eventually she would have forgiven him, however I think that in the rawness of the situation, she would feel very hurt and betrayed by him.
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Hello! Thank you for entering my challenge! :)
Firsty, this was great! I loved the idea that she'd been to the room as a student at Hogwarts, it made it seem so much more special to the reader!
I thought it was a great touch how you added she was afraid of what the mirror would show her! I also liked how what she saw changed in the time that passed. :3
My favourite part was when Bellatrix faded away and she moved closer to Andy, I thought that was very sweet. :') I also loved the last line, "She needed to do something which was long overdue." because I always wanted something like that to happen like a reconcilation after the Battle of Hogwarts so it made me happy. :3
I can't seem to find any serious grammar mistakes or spelling and your paragraphing is great! :3
My only CC is that is was a little short! I'd have loved it to have been longer because it was a great piece of writing, well done!
Thanks for entering my challenge! The reviews from the other challenge will be up shortly too (sorry again for the long wait) and the results for the challenge will be up soon too. :) Lucy :) xAuthor's Response: Hey there.
Your challenges are the ones which I find difficult, though I love entering them. I always seem to have a theme/genre/character that I wouldn't usually write, so I'm honestly so happy that you enjoyed it. I wasn't sure whether it was too OOC, so the fact you haven't said so has made me extremely happy!
I had so many possibilities of things to write for her. I always had it planned that she would visit the mirror three times, but I couldn't decide what it was that she would see. I'm glad that you liked the choice of what she saw.
I'm sorry that it was short! But I shall remember and try to make any future writings a little longer.
Thank you for this review and I cannot wait for the other reviews and more importantly for the results! Great challenge! =] Report Review
I loved this story. I liked how you seem to show how a person can change if they desire it enough. And yet at the same time show that the deepest desire was to be happy for the family members that what it.
Nice story. 10/10 and adding to favs.
I also have done an aftermath story, but done for another challenge. It's called Was it Worth it. Please feel free to read it and tell me what you think.Author's Response: I am very happy reading your review. You have actually made my day! I was a little unsure when I was given Narcissa...but the point of a challenge is to be challenged right?
Thank you so much, I feel privileged!
I shall check out yours now! Thanks once again! =] Report Review
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