Aww poor Freddie, but I'm glad Roxy was there for him.
Annie is just so sweet but I can't help but feel bad for her because I think deep down Freddie is totally, madly in love with Ryan. And it'll break her heart if they break up.
"Though a good snog every once in a while doesn’t hurt."
I looked over and half her body was covered by my own pillow. "You know I’m not going anywhere, right?" - I dunno whether it was on purpose or it's just me but I swear Freddie is practically inviting Ryan to snog him since he's not going anywhere and for a minute I really though she was going to. Fryan feels ♥
Yay :D I can't believe Ryan got off her high horse, I'm so glad she's letting Freddie become more a part of the pregnancy and letting him go to an appointment.
Doctor Who reference :D Yay Freddie!!!
She's been cheating on him with Andrew hasn't she?? It's that stupid Parise isn't it? and I felt sorry for her, not so much now. Damn you Annie how can she just discard sweet, adorable, insane Freddie like that for that evil idiot.
But on the plus side that means Freddie can finally follow his heart to Ryan! yay! :D
Fryan needs to happen! ♥ ♥ and if it does at the doctor's appointment then even better :)
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It must have killed you not to write the Quidditch scene.
Buy some tickets to the gun show.
- Waking up from unconsciousness Freddie is silly.
I couldn’t take my eyes off her. I knew she didn’t want to be there. She probably wanted to be upstairs studying with Scorpius Malfoy, but she was here. In the hospital. I had no idea what happened, but suddenly I was reminded of when I skinned my knee when I was nine and Rox wouldn’t leave my room until it was properly bandaged and I had ice to stop the swelling. She brought me her teddy bear to make me feel better.
- Their relationship makes me so sad. I need to know what happened and that they can move past it.
“I can survive. James has unconsciously volunteered to bring me sweets.”
“I’m so considerate,” he muttered.
I'm so stressed by Annie and Ryan. Their relationship with Freddie is so different! Annie and Freddie are built on friendship and mutual respect and cuteness. Ryan and Freddie are 100% heat and chemistry. And both of those are good things! Why can't we just combine them into one person and make this a fun rom-com instead? Ayan? Or Rannie? Or Margaret? Anywho, Ryan has the chance to grow into mutual respect and understanding plus heat. Which is good. But Annie is also great and grounds him. I'M SO CONFLICTED!
I dog-eared the book (causing her to twitch)
- Yes. I too have that compulsion.
I see your Doctor Who reference you sneaky little goose!
Well I guess there goes my conflicted feelings. Except I still think those two crazy kids could make it work! AGH!
Things getting real again on the baby front. Glad she is letting him in more and that he is trying more. Even if they don't end up together or anything, it would be nice for the kid for the two of them to be friends at least.
I know what that means.THE BRAND FRIGIDAIRE COMES FROM FRIGID AND AIR BEING COMBINED, MEANING THAT A FRIGIDAIRE IS ACTUALLY COLD AIR WHICH IS WHAT A FRIGIDAIRE DOES, AND THIS WAS ALL DONE ON PURPOSE BY THE MAKERS OF FRIGIDAIRE!...is what he will realize...yeah... Report Review
awww poor freddy hes so adorable, he didnt deserve that:( but atleast now fryan (lol ship name) can get a move on right? :D Report Review
I love you. So so much.
I actually Skipped a heartbeat when I saw you updated.
You make me happy:) thank you for being such a wonderful writer! Report Review
Good chapter. This is my favourite of your new stories. This is going to be a rambling review since it's my first for any of your stories.
I like OC centric stories a lot, since the OC brings something completely new to the story. That's what attracted me to BTQC. Incidentally James/Avery in BTQC/DTTT are very well written, I especially like your interpretation of James, among my favourite. next Gen characters across fanfics.
I do find it a bit jarring (not sure if that is the word I am looking for) when James is different in this story and especially when there is no Avery. Got that pairing associated very strongly :-)
Freddie and Ryan are well written. I look forward to understanding Ryan more as a character. Avery is also one of the characters I like very much, but for me as a reader, James stands out as the primary character- probably intentional on your part. I guess my point is that Ryan comes across as a very interesting character and it would be great if she could stand out more strongly than Aves did.
Also like the Annie angle; will be very interesting to see how that 'progresses'.
Been meaning to review for quite some time now. Just got around to doing it.Author's Response: Hi there! I'm really glad you like it so far. I know it's very different from the casual humor and extremes of my other stories, which is a reason I really liked the idea of it.
I agree with you about OC stories. There is something very interesting and new about them. Sometimes, it can go terribly wrong, but then in so many cases it makes things so much better.
Trust me. It's jarring for me to write James in this story. If you notice while reading it, there is less James/Ollie than there probably should be. It just weirds me out because James and Avery are together and that's the way life works.
You are correct that Avery takes a back-seat to James because the story is essentially about him achieving his goals and his life. And he's the narrator (and a very unreliable one at that). So yeah, you are very right about why I made that choice with Avery.
Though Fred is the narrator here, Ryan is an entirely different person and situation. He has a much bigger connection with her that he did not anticipate and because of his heart of gold, he can't let go of that connection. Over the course of the story, you'll begin learning a lot more about her and what motivates her and why she acts the way she does.
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poor freddie, it was so mean to use his realsonship with his sister against him.Author's Response: It definitely was. That was definitely not cool.
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Ryan was so mean here :( I'm sure there is a reason as to why she behaves the way she does! She's quite different though from how people normally portray pregnant girls - and i like that! :D
And good for Freddie for standing up to her! I think she needed that.
I can't wait to see how the Quidditch match plays out, so update soon! :DAuthor's Response: There is definitely a reason. Ryan is very complex, but Fred only knows what he sees and hears from others. In the same way that she only knows about him what she's seen and heard. They have to move past that. And yes, she was very mean, but at the same time, she's very hormonal, doing this on her own, and tends to assume the worst in people. Let's hope Freddie can turn that around.
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Yay a new chapter!!!
George is so cool. Like seriously. The way you wrote his character is so perfect; I can totally imagine George from the books growing up to be like this.
Ryan is going to do something at the match! I think. Maybe.
Aw, Freddie's book on pregnancy. He's soo adorable. And James's reaction, ha ha.
Great chapter! Please update as soon as you can :)Author's Response: I'm so glad you like George. He's such a complex character, as is Freddie. That's what ilove so much about them. They're products of their surroundings. It's marvelous to write.
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I LOVE George, he is like the most awesomest father in the world. He's amazing and I can see it now, he would be the 'cool, hip' dad.
Ooh I sense that maybe Roxy and Scorp are in a relationship, that's why their always together. It'd be an intresting thing to happen since it's normally Rose/Scorpius.
Aww, Freddie is so adorable bless him. Reading up on pregnancy and telling James all the different things. Well done him! :)
I feel bad for Annie since Freddie is sorta leading her on, because deep down he knows he really loves Ryan. Fryan for ever! ♥ ♥
"Painting my chest was a bad idea?" - I think this just about says it all about George!!! Crying with laughter :D and this is why I LOVE the Weasley family. ♥
They should definitely get a dog 'shop mascot' and it should be a Lab. ♥ It'll be fun to see Freddie trying to take care of a dog before he has to take care of a baby.
Just one little thing, 'my pants were torn' Britpicking, it would be trousers not pants.
Can't wait for the next one, I'll certainly be on the look out for the Doctor Who referance!! And I have and inkling that the something that catches Freddie off guard is Ryan, maybe?
Soph x :DAuthor's Response: Reviewzilla! YUSS.
George is definitely one of my favorites. I love writing future-George. He's so complex, which I love.
I'm sick of all the Rose/Scorpius. Just becasue they are almost the only canons of a similar age that aren't related. More Scorpius/Other Characters! Revolt!
Freddie would just sort of poke at the dog. "What do you want? USE YOUR WORDS." and so on.
Britpick away :) I am not British and therefore most of the story will have plenty of words I am very used to. I have also never been to Great Britian. I should have disclaimered that. but thank you all the same!
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Dude. There is so much love for Fryan right now. Just. They are so perfect, okay? Ryan was perfectly tough on Freddie but still let him in, just a tiny bit. It's nice to see they're trusting each other a little. And oh Zonko child. It's quite a worrying thought that a twelve year old managed to knock out Ryan. And I feel awful for Annie. I really do. I just want Freddie to realise that she's going to get hurt a lot more than that. But, just a short review.
Shindig :DAuthor's Response: I love the way they are moving forward with each other. Slow, gradual steps. And yeah, Zonko is not going to let this slip by peacefully. It's going to get nasty.
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I LOVED this chapter! It had the same humor as the previous chapters (the comments about the light bulbs were really funny,) but it was also rather intense. At first I had no idea the attacker would be Gregory Zonko. I love that the Zonko's-WWW plot is becoming a larger part of the story. Also, Fred and Davies are adorable together! You are doing a great job of developing their relationship.Author's Response: I'm really glad you're enjoying it. That plot is super big and important and I really like the way it has started out. It's intense. But so is Ryan and her being pregnant. I like the way Freddie is being stretched and watching him handle it with a heart of gold. Thank you! Report Review
My 300th review :)
Squeal of joy :D Thanks for a dedication I think I may have just freaked out a teeny tiny bit :D You're welcome!! because this story is simply awesome!!!
N'aww Freddie sorta taking care of Ryan. Aww Freddie being so worried about her, so adorable. I want him!! ♥ ♥
Mox and Gemma?? I was not expecting that. :)
So much Fryan, I don't think I can cope ♥ ♥
I'm really intigued about Ryan's backstory. And I can't wait for the next chapter!!
Soph xx :DAuthor's Response: WOW THREE HUNDRED OMG. Congrats! That's a serious milestone and I'm honored it's on my story!
I appreciate all of your stellar reviews :)
I love how much Freddie cares. And it's confusing HIM how much he cares.
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I can't wait to find out Ryan's secret!!!Author's Response: It's a doosy.
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Ahhh It's a new chapter! :D
I love Ryan! I wonder what her back story is...
Annie is super nice but... I don't know. I ship Fryan. But I don't want him to break her heart!
Update as soon as you can!!!Author's Response: Ryan is great. She has a LOT of background. Now that the foundation has come out for the story, it's time to start discovering that backstory a little more.
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Another great chapter! I loved the twist with WWW having business problems. I didn't see it coming.Author's Response: Glad you're liking it! I wanted to throw in a nice plot twist that gave Fred something else to take on. But in a great way.
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"James kept missing his mouth with the fork." - He seems so adorable even when he tries not to be!!
Fryan!!! YAY even is she was mean again but hey ho there was still action! :) ♥ ♥
Amazing as always!!! ♥ ♥
P.s Who is the girl used on this chapter image??Author's Response: I love James in this story. He just has his head in the clouds.
FRYAN YUSS. Expect more soon.
I believe I used Dakota Fanning.
Can't wait for the next chapter.. Amazing as alwaysAuthor's Response: Thank you so much! I really appreciate the review. Report Review
Did Annie not agree to let you touch her (12+)?
You can’t just ask, Freddo.
Girls get weird about that kind of thing.
Shit! What if she was reading my thoughts?
Spicy mushroom wrap.
Was I hungry?
"LIGHT IT. I AM SO COOL NOW."
I think I laughed way too hard.
I felt so bad for Ryan and her quitting the Quidditch team... and then her jaded view on James being in love (can't people just be happy?!)... god, I know she's jealous that Fred has "an option", as she puts it, but seriously - he's trying!
I still want to pinch Freddie's cheeks.
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HELLO. Here to read as I review, or review as I read. Which is it. I'm not sure. Huh.
Chopper? Oh my god, best name ever. I'm thinking of a helicopter? Or a car? I dunno. Something deadly, as you said. With big teeth. *shudder*
Mox? Like box? Or Mop? I'm not sure which one I like better. ;D
Ooh, Andrew dating Ollie? Awk-ward. :P
ANNIE? OH MY GOD NO. SHE'S OFF LIMITS, ANDREW. GET YOUR FACE OUT OF THERE BEFORE I KICK IT.
I mean, he got Ryan pregnant, so I'm not sure how legit that is. BUT YOU KNOW WHAT I MEAAAN.
"It's late," James said. Thanks, Mum.
^ hahahaha. I laughed. So not the James I'm used to :')
Oh, they're the Head Boy and Girl? I think I missed that. Either way, I think the crowd just went *GASP*.
Also, Rune? Like Ancient Runes? Hehe, I love your names.
I love that Rose is captain, btw. GIRL POWER.
Aw, poor Freddie. Alessandra sounds like a non 12+ word (#rejected). I will club her with that beater's bat. ALL IN THE NAME OF FREDDIE. *squishy hugs for him*
But seriously, I think he really likes Annie. I hope she's not going to be shoved to the side (even though I think she will be) in all this. Annie's sweet. I hope she doesn't get hurt. ♥
"At least my breasts are to scale," Gemma replied nonchalantly.
Okay, I am very close to slapping Ryan in the face. Why can't she just talk to him? Freddie's such a sweet kid. He actually WANTS to be involved. Come on, girl!!
I guess I just want her to be vulnerable. But it's too soon for that, especially in front of someone she doesn't trust.
I really like George's values, here. *impressed*
They're going to keep it.
THEY'RE GONNA KEEP IT!!!
Anyway Janice, lovely chapter. Really enjoyed it. Can't wait for the next one! :)Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review and the re-post of the original review as you changed pennames! It means a lot to me! Report Review
Fred's home life makes me so sad. I want to go hug him and squeeze him forever and ever and ever. ♥ Oh, George. I know however sad everyone is about losing Fred, it'll never compare to his pain. I'm just happy he mostly doesn't take it out of Fred II. That would be bad.
Haha he really should change the store design, though...:P
Annie is sweet. I didn't think I'd like her, because of Ryan, but she's cute. And Fred's cuter. They actually kinda fit. Sorta. That line when he admitted to thinking about kissing her made me want to hug him again. That was ADORABLE.
And speaking of adorable - wow, James! I'm so used to him being snarky, so this James just keeps catching me off guard. He kept all his love notes. Double dating. Aww, he's Sensative James.
Ryan just needs to get that stick out of her bum. *nods* but I like her, too. She still helped Fred, even if she hated him. At least she's sort of professional :P Library Clerk, huh? Needs the money?
And... Alessandra. I will break that girl for breaking Fred's heart.
Loved it, as always :) ♥Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review and the re-post of the original review as you changed pennames! It means a lot to me! Report Review
I know you love when I review and read at the same time, so here it goes! ;D
Herbology reminds me of gardening. I bet it's not THAT bad... but maybe it's the teacher. Ugh, they can make the best subject the worst.
If James is hot, he'll have fangirls. Screw historians. ;D
Ah, I love Ryan. That little... witch... *cough*
AHHH. Fred and Roxy. Reminds me a bit of my brother and I growing up. We're still pretty close. Gah, I miss my brother... love that little guy who's taller than me and has facial hair BUT HE'S STILL MY BABY BROTHER, FOR THE RECORD.
... aww. Did she really take the Ravenclaw thing to heart? My heart just broke. :(
Scorpius and Roxy? Sibling friendship or more? I guess we'll see.
Poor Fred. Gah. So sad now.
Aw, Annie's so nice. :)
Ooh, boy talk. I LOVE BOY TALK. Mostly because I never hear /real/ boy talk, since they're all GIRL ALERT.
FREDDIE, KEEP BLUSHING. I LOVE WHEN BOYS BLUSH.
Lovelovelovelove it, as always. Can't wait for chapter three ♥Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review and the re-post of the original review as you changed pennames! It means a lot to me! Report Review
Finally! waited months ! :P loved the chapter! cant wait for the ryan/fred romance to develop further.
“Where? Into the water? Sure.”
And Ryan had a baby in her. So she needed an elevator. At the very least escalator. Those Muggles were onto something.Author's Response: So glad you're liking it! These chapters have been great to write. I love the Fred/Ryan scenes. They have so much tension.
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OH MY GODRIC.
(ALL CAPS FOR THE WIN)
Fryan is such a funny name, don't you think? It's like... Frying Ryan. Or Bryan. Not so good, omenwise. Burning your girlfriend (or boyfriend, fine, Bryan can have a chance too) in a frying pan just doesn't seem like a relationship builder.
I loved the Fred/Ryan (I tried typing Fryan and just looked at it funny) stuff today. The lingerie part was hilarious. The snuggling and the crying at the lion king was the best. It was pretty much the most adorable thing ever. And he touched her hair! So cute!
However, M'darling, I'm getting incredibly worried about our dear Annie over there. I don't want Fred to break her heart, but I do feel like she's not as good for him as Ryan (though she is lovely, and I think they're good together - to a point). But I feel the angst coming, and I'm slightly worried about it.
The abstinence rally thing made me laugh, and so did a bunch of other stuff I can't find, but they did! Promise!
Sorry for the relatively short/lack of freaking out review, but yeah. Loved it!Author's Response: Look at those caps!
Frying Ryan. Oh my gosh. That's brill.
I like how they're moving through getting to know each other.
Yeah, annie definitely complicates things, which makes me nervous. But don't worry. Too much.
Glad I got you to laugh. It is a goal, you know.
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This was a great chapter. I really love your take on Fred II. Most people depict him as a manwhore who doesn't take anything seriously, and I don't think that's exactly realistic. I'm sorry to hear you've been under the weather! I've found Little Yellow Spider by Devendra Banhart to cheer me up :)Author's Response: I'm glad you like my Fred. For some reason he has resonated with me a lot. I don't like the idea of manwhore characters. I just don't think it's realistic ... or creative. So I'm glad you like him.
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Oh Roxy, what went wrong with you and Freddie - I'm dying to find out.
For some reason when Freddie went back in the draw I had this vision of him trying the corset on and then Ryan walking in.
So glad there was more Fryan action, in fact lots and lots of Fryan action ♥ ♥. I thought then end of this chapter was so sweet, and I'm staring to think that maybe just maybe Freddie's falling for Ryan ♥
Sorry to here you've been un-well, hope your better now xxx
Really can't wait for the next chaper :D
Soph xxxAuthor's Response: I feel for Freddie about Rox. It's a sad situation to be in.
HAHA. can you imagine? Though the Fred in BTQC probably would have. Let's be real.
As the story moves on, there will be more Fryan action as that plot becomes central.
Thank you so much, Soph! I hope you enjoy the rest. Though it's more somber than my other stories, I promise I have a lot planned! Report Review
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