Hey, thanks for entering the challenge!
I thought this really fit the song/lyric perfectly, which was pretty much the idea. The only grammatical error I spotted was that you used '&' instead of 'and', but I'm not that great at editing. You probably could have described the characters a little more, and a tip: don't start a sentence with 'And' or 'But' or 'Because'. I know most people (including me) can't help it and every now and then you type it out without noticing, but this is just something to watch out for in the future. Maybe reread your story before you post it and edit it and all that other stuff.
Great job! I'll post a blog with the winners on the forums so please look out for it!
Recenseo - 2012 Report Review
oooh this is really good! You should make a sequel!!Author's Response: I've actually got at least two full stories from this one-shot, that will show what happened before & after. Of course, Rose isn't the main character - Dru is - but, you'll still be able to understand what happens after this, anyway. I'm working on the first chapter right now. Report Review
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