omfg I knew Scorpius wouldn't be dead but I was so scared!
Also, the last line reminded me of Lion King where Rafiki realises Simba is alive and he starts cackling and singing "ASANTE SANA SQUASH BANANA WIWI MI GU NAPANA" (or something like that, I just know it starts with 'Asante sana squash banana' :p)
but yeah, that was a really unexpected twist! I thought it was just going to be a fluffy love triangle fic! There were a lot of plot twists and I loved them all! :D
So yeah, great chapter and I'm going to continue reading this and the sequel!!! :D
(also this is my THREE HUNDREDTH REVIEW! *throws confetti*)
10/10! :DAuthor's Response: PAAHA. SQUASH BANANA, SCORPIUS LIVES! Congratulations, you just made me laugh so hard I snorted my tea.
Hehehe omg you had no idea what it was like planning these chapters. I had so many 3am skype crises over this story. But! Glad you liked it!
*also throws confetti*
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I saw that you don't want me to read 'Weather for Ducks' until you edit it, so I decided to read this instead while I wait. :p
Unless you're going to edit this one and you don't want me to read, then I'll wait - it's coo
WAIT NOT I HAVEN'T MISSED MY CHANCE YET. LET ME START THAT SENTENCE AGAIN.
Unless you're going to edit this one and you don't want me to read, then I'll wait - it's mega.
ANYWAY, I really liked this! I love how you've made a Flora/Fauna thing haha. I've always wanted to do that! :p
So yeah, I really liked this and I LIKE THE AL/FLORA PAIRING RIGHT NOW EEP.
I'm guessing the love triangle is going to be between Flora, Al and Scorpius. Unless it's Al, Flora and Fauna?
Hmm... Well, I'll just read on (if I'm allowed to haha) and find out!
10/10! :DAuthor's Response: Awh! I didn't mean to come across as so aggressive :P I just want it to be the best story possible for you to read, and I promise I'll have all the editing finished once my exams are over! I'm very pleased you've decided to read this in the interim ;D
One might say that I think it is...
Oh, god, the names! Flora & Fauna is the most ridiculous set I could come up with. They never acknowledge it; it's sort of a running joke.
You are mistaken. The love triangle is, in fact, between Willoughby, Mr Darcy, and Agnes.
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Someone likes Jane Austen. And the word mega. :) :) Author's Response: Ironically, I can't abide Austen! But this story is one giant slab of irony ;) Thanks for your review, one might say it is...mega. ♥ Report Review
it's like an end of an era.
or more rather, an end of a year.
well this entire story makes my heart feel wibbly wobbly and timey wimey but everything about it is perf.
you are an amazing writer and im so happy you exist.
i am really looking forward to more stories by you, whether they're starving artist or flora and co. or anything else, really.
i dont know how to thank you for writing such an amazing story, that changed MY LIFE okay not really but it made me aspire to be a better writer. (:
bye then (: for now.Author's Response: Baww, that's a very high accolade! I hope you don't suffer any long-term damage from having a timey-wimey heart. I can empathise, I've got a minor heart problem - it goes ding when there's stuff.
Eee! Also thank you for saying that :3 it really means a lot to me when people say stuff like that! I do dream of having the stamina and talent to write a book someday, and even though I know that's impossible, lovely HPFF people like you and the lovely things they say make it seem a little more achievable.
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okay can we just talk about how amazing this is :
The three of us sat in silence for a bit. For some reason, I thought I felt sorry for Fletcher. He was a year above me and technically an adult in the magical world, but a kid all the same. It was all his parents’ doing, evidently, instructing him from afar. Just like Scorpius had only suffered because of who his dad was, and I’d only been picked on because of my background. We were living with the legacy of the second war, just as we seemed on the verge of falling into another.
also was the spell sectumsempra? it was, wasn't it.
this story means so much to me now. i dont want it to end.Author's Response: The spell was sectumsempra! Draco taught it to the terrorist cell (let's call them a terrorist cell) under duress, and thus it was used on Flora.
All good (although this is of questionable quality) things must come to an end!
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YOU ARE NOT ALLOWED TO PLAY WITH MY HEART LIKE THAT. I MEAN SRSLY NO. I WAS *LITERALLY* CLOSE TO TEARS.
LIKE MY EYES WERE WATERING (but don't worry i didn't cry, im not a loser.eh...ehh...)
BUT YOU DONT KNOW HOW HAPPY I AM THAT HE'S ALIVE.
IMEAN, I DIDN'T PUT IT PAST YOU TO KILL OFF SCORP BUT I MEAN CREYS. oh scorp. im literally so happy he's alive. you have no idea.
also, perfect imagery, and description and everything. also, sorry for being MIA for the last 2 months and not reviewing any chapters, i had mock GCSE's.
oh and the healer, was that supposed to be Oliver Wood? idk, im just pulling at threads here - maybe i'm wrong. but you said scottish, and fairly attractive so i just assumed...Author's Response: AHHA AT LAST I HAVE PROVOKED PHYSICAL EMOTION IN A READERRR
Casual reminder that Scorpius is only semi-alive...
No worries! I hope your mocks went well, and good luck for the inevitable GCSEs!
Also, no, the Healer wasn't Oliver at all! Oliver is only Scottish and attractive in the films, I think :P
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you're amazing, this is amazing, the ending was amazing and i've really enjoyed sitting behind my computer screen reading this! i'm pretty sure i've increased my vocabulary by at least one word (MEGA!). anyway, i sort of love how you ended it will albus and flora not really together (though i'm still finger-crossing (it's secretly a verb) for future floral children) and scarred flora (because fanfic people are usually too damn perfect) and undead lightning-powered scorpius is the best thing since trolley ladies on magical trains. thank you for writing this!Author's Response: You are also amazing for leaving such a lovely review! And I'm glad I've slipped 'mega' into so many people's vocabularies ;D
When you say 'future floral children'...I imagining some sort of cross between a child and an upholstered armchair. Please don't ask. It's been a long day's revising and I'm going a bit mad here.
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It's been a whole year since we were first introduced to Flora, with her tragic jumpers and awkward friends - and now, she's a hero!
First of all, I LOVE that you made this story about Flora. Not about Floral and all the love triangles and romantic drama- it's all about Flora. How she grows and changes. That's mega.
Many, I could even say most, stories with romance, the romantic aspect is the main focus. It's really wonderful to have a story where the main character grows by themself, pushed by events, not guided by other people.
Of course, this story (as all of your stories) was brilliantly written, managing to still be funny even when the story took a darker turn.
I love everything abou this story, from characters, to plot twists (ZOMBIE SCORP!... ELECTRIC ZOMBIE SCORP!) to just use of language.
So, to sum up my feelings for this story: ASDDFLASDHGKJHEORIGHERNB'J'PI]K.;LOIR;LKAHJ
Love it. Love you. Keep writing amazing things please :D
~GillAuthor's Response: Aaah, I'm glad you liked that! I always found myself getting really frustrated with the neverending focus on love triangles and relationships in stories - I'm like, hey, a female protagonist doesn't need half a dozen boys hanging off her arm to be awesome! Also, Albus and Scorpius are both prats. There. I said it.
Really glad you liked it - even the random zombie!scorpius plot twist ;)
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It's been too long! I decided to check on this story and realized it was completed! I really liked reading about Flora, Scorpius and Al, I'm really happy neither of them ended up dead, I was too worried about Scorpius and Draco.
Poor Flora, I know that she ended up pretty well considering she could possibly have died, but having all those scars in her face reminding her of such traumatic events has to be terribly awful. And even though I wished Flora and Scorpius had ended up together, I'm glad they all became friends and remained together, I guess the ending was perfect as it was.
I'm eager to read 'Counting Daisy Roots'! : )Author's Response: Ah, glad you liked it! It is a pretty bittersweet ending, yup - and I'm slightly surprised that most people ended up shipping Flora/Scorp in the end! Sorry I sunk everyone's ships :P
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It finish ... After all they walk throug !!! I'm happy she is okey with her scars, and has her real friends with her, it finish a little lonely but really good, really loved this storyAuthor's Response: ah, glad you liked it! thank yo for reviewing ♥ Report Review
And it was MEGA, really. I almost cried. (Almost cause they are dorm people around me and dorm people must not see you cry)
Oh Julia, you're brill. Nuff said.
But I kind of want Florp (haha strong shipper shipping weak ship) although Flora/Fauna driving off to a cliff isn't so bad, really. Team Feminist haha.
So yess, this is MEGA, you are MEGA and everything will be Mega if you think it'll be hahaha. (The morals are moral-y hee) :3 luff, luff.Author's Response: baww!
thank you :3 you are also brill, in so many ways.
ahh, I find it kind of hilarious how people shipped on this story - everyone started out shipping florp, then floral, and now...florp. and all along I was standing on the harbour like 'nope none of you can dock sorry'. I am the harbour master. *evil laugh*
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Scorpius is a zombie and the last scene is totally Florp. This is not a proper review but I love youuu hee. :)Author's Response: scorpius is now a fully-fledged member of the undead. fact. thank you for reviewing ♥ Report Review
Wow, so good. This story definitely took a turn, but I liked the ending. Especially that you brought back the thestrals, and how they remained a point of this story all along. You're a very talented writer, and I'm so glad to have been able to follow along with Four-eyes Flora and her friends. Really wonderful work.
Eagerly awaiting Counting Daisy Roots!Author's Response: 'This story definitely took a turn' is a bit of an understatement...
Ah, glad you noticed that! Even when this story was still following the original plan (and it was your average love triangle fare) the thestrals were always meant to crop up at the end in some shape or form. Kind of a callback to the start of some form!
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I FELT ALL OF THE EMOTIONS
Oh my goodness, oh wow, oh gosh. I can't believe Scorpius is alive after all--I thought the Ministry studying the afterlife was going to come back into play, but I thought Flora was dead and they brought her back. Oh wow. Okay. I feel better--I can't believe nobody told her! And poor thing, those horrible scars. Oh gosh. You must update soon. You must. I wish I could leave two reviews: one for now, one for when I have calmed down. But I just can't. Please update soon!
PS: I think you should know that I almost used the word "mega" in conversation yesterday.Author's Response: that is one epic keyboard smash, my friend!
don't worry. I feel like I went through the five stages of grief writing this.
also, yes, hurrah! I am not totally evil. I let scorpius escape with...well, a sort-of life. not that I'll ever have time to write it, but the afterlife concept comes from my plans for 'in dreams', a drastoria I'm writing - fact: the scorpius in this story is the child of the draco and astoria in that one. if that accounts for all the angst...
well, you know what happens now :3
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okey ... i have spend the last days reading this, OH GOD !!! what happen? .. i still don´t get it
btw really cool story, plis update soonAuthor's Response: glad you liked it! which bit don't you get? let me know and I'll try to clarify it ;) thanks for reviewing! ♥ Report Review
I really admire Flora for wishing she had never gone to the party at all, and truly resenting what she did with Scorpius. Most OCs would probably be thinking "omg wait does my friend like meh?" but she knew right away that she regretted it, and the fact that she had cheated on Albus was her biggest concern. The line about her not remembering what colour Scorpius's eyes were was really brilliant. :)Author's Response: Omg, you're so on it with every chapter - seriously, best reviewer ever: you're getting everything right. Scorpius is a bit of a meanie in this chapter. It felt about 50% wrong to even /consider/ shipping them together here. Flora puts too much blame on herself, though...
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How sweet of Albus to make sure that Flora gets her sugar quill fix. Ahhh, a wink. I am totally fangirling over this story, but so many feels. It's kind of like Pretty in Pink (which I at least find to be a compliment) with the Scorpius-Albus-Flora love triangle. So good!
It really made me sad that Albus said his friends abandon him often. But it said so much about him, I think: Flora may only have two friends, but they stick together, and have for years. Albus has a really wide circle of friends but they don't seem to be that close. It added a really nice touch of humanity to his character, even if I'm reading way too far into it!
I love when he asks her if she's afraid of ghosts. It's a really unique and somehow personal way of talking to one another--and her response about the fat friar was really funny.
My only critique is how much we see the word "awkward." I feel like it's become a buzzword in today's pop culture; socially awkward/tragically hip girl we see in characters portrayed by Zooey Deschanel, Kristen Wiig, Lena Dunham, etc. You've done a really great job introducing us to Flora, and I believe that you know her inside and out. So the word "awkward" is going into overuse and kind of detracts from her character, like she's really insisting how quirky she is. I hope that doesn't sound too harsh; I really like Flora. and she's a really believable OC. But I think you've characterized her so well that her 'awkwardness' speaks for itself and doesn't need to be mentioned so frequently :3
That being said.
The kiss in the snow! So perfect, so adorable, so believable, how she kept trying to say something; how it took two attempts before he could actually do it. I love that he blew on her face. It's a really sweet and unique gesture that perfectly encapsulates being nervous and not knowing what to do but it's so endearing. Oh my gosh. I am so happy now :DAuthor's Response: I've never seen Pretty in Pink - I'll have to give it a shot! (does it help that my favourite Fall Out Boy song is Pretty in Punk?)
Eee, I'm glad you noticed that! It was a bit deliberate. Flora makes a big deal out of being unpopular when she actually has two very meaningful friendships, Albus seems popular but he's actually a bit of a loner in a way. Five house points for you.
Thanks for pointing that out! I intended for this story to really play up the cliches so I think I kind of flung the word 'awkward' asunder without really thinking. I'll be sure to tone it down in the edit.
Heh. I used to know a boy whose one and only real trick was, er, breathing on your face to make you look at him. Real charmer, he was.
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I couldn't possibly stay away! So I'm back. :3
It's easy to see that you've really invested yourself in this magical world. The ease with which your characters talk about certain bands and their albums and concerts was impressive, but I was really blown away by Albus making the WS symbol at her from across the library. And you actually gave them a reason to click and start bonding, rather than randomly develop an attraction for one another when beforehand they knew nothing about one another. And when he said "mega" I was so happy!
I love "Life's a Witch" makeup. Like too much.
And extra-curriculars at Hogwarts are always overlooked in stories. Baking Club, Book Club, etc.--of course they had these! But we never get to read about them because the trio was busy with the Saving the World Club. I love the normalcy that we get to see in your story; it's something we didn't get much of with canon.
I get the sneaking suspicion that the entire reason Albus is hanging out with Flora is because of his I HAVE TO HELP EVERYONE complex. The way he invited her to Hogsmeade was so cute, but I think that she's reading into it. At this point in the story, at least, the relationship seems one-sided.
So I must continue on then, right?! :DAuthor's Response: Hello again!~
Ah, it was pretty easy! I just transplanted elements of my own life (my obsession with Pulp and Jarvis Cocker, etc etc) into this fic and gave things more, er, magic-sounding names.
I had to put in some extracurriculars - I'd be so unhappy if I was at Hogwarts and they didn't have an art club or anything! Also, heh, saving the world club, I like it.
Ah, you're touching on something there with Albus. He's not as shiny as he seems. Although there's still a good portion of the story to go so I'll keep my lips zipped for now.
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YOU TRICKED ME. i thought he was dead and you are a cruel cruel person
p.s. 2 chapters to go and still staying strong on the flora/scorpius ship! i speak for my fellow florp shippers when i say we're not giving up that easily :pAuthor's Response: >:D
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Oh wow, I really like this story!
I've been reading so many of your fanfics lately, I haven't touched the book I'm supposed to be reading at all...
This is one of my favourites, and I hope you update super fast!
Oh also, I like Florpius more than Floral :PAuthor's Response: Thank you so much! An update should be expected this Wednesday :)
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Me again! I really like your characterization of Scorpius. The only thing that I noticed in this chapter is that Flora acts totally cool and casual around Albus when he talks to her after Herbology. Much of her allure is that she's so awkward and that her brain keeps turning to different forms of stewed/mashed veggies when she's around him. xD I'm sure she's just trying to prove Fauna wrong, and say that she doesn't have feelings for Albus, but there was a stark difference in her character with really no time for her to evolve that much, realistically.
...And then there she is again when she drops all of her parchments and quills xD Handwriting like that of a geriatric donkey on acid! She is entirely too fun to read.
BAH SO CUTE. "I don't think you say silly things at all." And you really capture the feeling of being put on the spot by a boy you like, and wanting to both crawl under a rock and receive more attention. I love the description of it feeling like somebody held up two candles to her face.Author's Response: Eee. Thank you :3 I do like writing my woobie Scorpius.
I'm glad you're finding things to comment on like that! Like I've probably mentioned before, I'm about to edit this fic from start to finish, and I could do with any concrit anyone wants to offer me~
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Here is my attempt to leave a more coherent review:
I love that you didn't make the kiss horribly romantic. It was exactly as it should have been; she was floundering and embarrassed and somewhat excited and then immediately after it was over, it was over. I think the word "linger" is one of my least favorite to read in fanfiction ever, especially during kissing scenes, and you didn't use it once! :D
The bit about her mixing up her plumber uncle with the subject of her paper is brilliant! I really love her, have I mentioned that? She is totally average--and I mean that in the best way. It kind of breaks my heart to read another "aw, man, Hufflepuffs are so average" story, but your OC totally makes up for it.
‘One of the Slytherins, like, hit me,’ I said, sounding as if I didn’t quite believe myself. ‘They hit a girl with glasses!’ Hahaha! So many parts of this story made me laugh, and this really stuck out to me. Your dialogue between characters is so completely natural. It's easy to read and totally realistic, especially for the age group you're writing.
I can tell that you and Flora share the same distaste for "such annoying teenage girls," hehe.
Reading on, of course!Author's Response: Who needs coherence? Your reviews are brilliant enough already!
Barrrgh, I'm not overly fond of writing any variety of physical romance - ergo an obvious lack of elaboration on kiss scenes, etc. And I also hate the word linger! Almost as much as 'deepened the kiss'. Also, why does every boy's mouth taste like cinnamon in fanfic? Just my two pence.
Ah, inspired by real life! Someone in my history class confused Mary Seacole with a Mary in the year below. Much hilarity ensued.
Having just left an all-girls' school that I went to for seven years...yes, I definitely do have a distaste for annoying teenage girls. In a big way. I take it out in fic ;D
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BAH! BEST SPONTANEOUS KISS TROPE SCENE EVER. My jaw is slack. Lit-rally.
Man, I am going to go ahead and apologize in advance for the nonsensical reviews I am about to leave on this story. I am already 100% fangirling for Flora. I mean come on, she's so mega. And I love your personification of Albus. He's so nice.
I can't wait to read on!Author's Response: I LOVE THAT TROPE. Not as much as I love the desperate 'we're gonna dieee!' kiss trope though.
Ah, I love your reviews!
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AAH! NOOO! I DONT UNDERSTAND! WHAT IS AIR, BECAUSE I DONT HAVE ANY LEFT.
I DONT UNDERSTAND, OH SO HELP ME OMG OMG OMG OMG NOPE NOPE JUST NO 10723498234092875% DONE OKAY JUST NO.
this is too painful to breathe, and way too many questions to ask that i have lost the ability to even.
all i can say is please, for the love of all that is holy, update soon before i kill myself - AND SCORPIUS BETTER NOT BE DEADAuthor's Response: AIR IS WHAT YOU BREATHE. PLZ BREATHE IT I DONT WANT TO LOSE U.
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How have I not read this before? Like, a million times before? This is perfect. Flora is the perfect OC, in my mind; she's clumsy and awkward but clearly those traits were not tossed in as an afterthought to balance out her wit and beauty. I love that Scorpius is an even bigger loser than she--to the rest of Hogwarts, that is. I for one think they're both lovely. And can we talk about Flora and Fauna? Too cute.
Usually I leave more cohesive reviews than this, but usually I have a gallon of coffee at my side. Needless to say, I have found my new HPFF read for the next few weeks and am very happy about it! Wonderful work.Author's Response: Aah, thank you! Heh, I will admit that the intention of this story was to be as cliche as possible so that I could deconstruct said cliches. And I'm rather attached to my loser Scorpiuses :3
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