You have an incredibly easy style to read. Not that it's simple, but you word things to have the most impact they can without hiding that impact in confusing sentence structures. This prologue felt like It was finished as soon as I started it. Annndd I just got a work email. Okay, this review is going to be terrible but I want to leave it before I respond to my work thing or else I'll continue to the next chapter without reviewing later.
The way you took us through what Fleur felt during the tasks was perfect. You gave her such a personality, without making her this shallow woman we see so often. She's intelligent. She's fierce. She came to win and she was upset she didn't. That's incredibly realistic. But she wasn't this brainless, mean thing.
I honestly couldn't think of a more perfect way to start us with this story. It got me so interested, and those last lines were amazing. Fleur loves Bill enough to literally die for him. She understands what the risks of being a Weasley are, and even her wedding day getting destroyed isn't enough to make her want to walk away from the man and life she chose.
She's such a complex character and I love that you're already showing that. So excited to continue!
♥ Jami Report Review
I have just favorited this. I lalalalove it! I love Bill/Fleur, and I am really enjoying this look into the early months of their relationship. :)
Great work, and Happy Holidays! Report Review
I was so happily surprised to find out this story had been updated! This chapter was too adorable with Fleur realizing she wants to keep Bill, it really shows how much she is beginning to grow. Please update again soon, I really love this story, and I like how Fleur is insecure about dating and relationships. I want some Bill point of view dealing with his thoughts on their relationship post Arthur chat, and definitely a longer chapter! Good work!Author's Response: Haha thankyou! It sort of surprised me, too :P I am glad that awkwardness didn't take over from adorableness (I'm not good at this stuff!) but I do want to do them justice :3 I will try to update soon! And I love writing about Fleur's real insecurities, giving her real flaws and real virtues, because she's so often portrayed as an evil witch! There'll definitely be some post-chat Bill coming up soon, and hopefully a longer chapter too :D Thank you for your lovely review! Report Review
UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE! Ahem, I'm glad you updated :D (As if, you know, that wasn't obvious)
Fleur's met Arthur! Gosh, that was quick! I feel as if were you any other author and this any other story, it would be much, much too fast and far too soon for her to meet his dad, but it's Bill and it's Fleur and it's you and this story and so it's just so wonderfully perfect :)
I love how you mentioned about her returning to France for Christmas and seeing her family again. I felt as though I learned so much about her family in the few sentences you talked about them, and yet we haven't actually seen all that much of them. All of them feel as though you know them so well, even if we don't know them that well yet, but we will by the end of it... I feel like I explained that very badly... O.o
Anyway, I love this story so much and things are developing so neatly, but in ways I never expected. They still haven't worked out what's happening with Mhairi in the bank (or at least, Fleur hasn't, Bill might have already) but they're so far past that that it doesn't seem to matter any more. I love how their relationship has almost literally exploded without Fleur noticing. It's a bit like a snowball, I guess: picking up momentum until it's completely out of control and nothing and no one can stop it, except that big rock which is death, lol.
The only thing I did notice is you said 'inter-country' when talking about the Apparition Bureau. Wouldn't it be International instead? :P It's just a small thing...
Gah, this story is so very, very lovely and I'm glad I helped to encourage you to keep writing - even if just in a small way! :D
Aph xx Report Review
YAYY!! First to review ;)
Aw so sweet and awesome and cute :)
The way you portray their personalities is so perfect as they kind of slot together (cheesey metaphor coming up) like two puzzle pieces.
I love the way the plot is so original and creative.
Your description is very much like Rowling's herself, along with the dialogue - very realistic.
I like the way Fleur is so furstrated with Bill - yet still clings on like she is strangely fascinated by him. The immaculate detail on the chapters really paints the scene in your head and helps readers to really see it, even if they have a weak imagination, it does all the work for you through your words.
This story is extremely awesome, kep updating! :D Report Review
I think I remember seeing you post about this fic. It's curious to see that you started with the last task of the triwizard tournament, throughout this chapter your interpretation of Fleur was flawless, I wish though we could have more of her in the maze even if she didn't last very long. It's interesting to see that even after she hears Harry's words Fleur decides to stay in England. My favorite part of this chapter though was the way you described her anger, even angry she seemed elegant :) I'm going to read on so expect to see me again :) Report Review
This was another excellent chapter. I really enjoy reading the dynamic of Bill and Fluer's relationship. I feel like they would win funnest couple, if we did superlatives. Especially from the way they did the I'm going to be later than you thing. As I said before it was fun to read.
Just as in your previous chapters I love the way you are including the french, except this time I noticed the translation at the bottom, which made things make a bit more sence :)
I want to know more about what's going on with Mhairi!! The way she is acting just doesn't seem normal for someone who's kids are missing.
Anywho great chapter as with the last. Keep up the good work
~House Cup 2012 Report Review
Horray for plot progress.
I love that you brought Fluer and Bill together while looking through Mhairi's house. It was different seeing someting that wasn't along the linese of 'Bill and Fluer love at first sight'. Instead you're writing it so that Fluer is sort of headstrong about it. Its very in character of her.
I love the way you're writing her. I can see the triwizard champion in her in this chapter which is commonly overlooked in fanfiction. People like making her materialistic, and while she might have been to a level, she also had her name chosen out of the goblet. I see that half of her here, as well as the fashionable half. Its great
I also love your description. Everything time there is a ew character introduced, or a new scene you paint this really crisp image of it in my head. It is really lovely.
Also I like that you're inculdinng a lot of French. I can tell you're pretty educated in the language (maybe even fluent?). And while I don't understand a word of it, the use of it really adds to the verisimilitude of the novel (hows that for a large litterary word :p)
Anyway keep up the good work :)
~House Cup 2012 (Go 'Claws!!!) Report Review
Oh my gosh! I loved this! I loved it so much - I can't believe I haven't read it before. Bad Laura - I should have been here much earlier! :( Anyway, it was amazing, as usual (and congratulations on getting Ravenclaw SOTM, even if it's very delayed :P).
I loved how you made the time pass by using different little segments. None of them were too short - they all showed something important and the details you included were just wonderful. I feel like I'm actually there, you know, with Bill and Fleur, learning about each of them in turn as they learn about each other. It's lovely. I also love how you're not giving too many details away - just mentioning that Fleur's aunt has had more than one husband and Bill's story about Charlie with the chickens... ha, that was so funny!
I also loved the whole fight for control angle you brought in. I've never considered that it could be like that, you know, and I've never seen anyone do it like that, so it's really interesting. I love how Bill is Fleur's equal and how she doesn't have control and it's throwing her off. It's those little human touches :D
Gornuk! I'm actually kinda upset - I have a heart of stone, so well done! :P - even though we never actually met him. I dunno, it's the way Bill says that he doesn't want to grieve because Gornuk wouldn't want it. So bittersweet! Also, that bit reminded me oddly of a Terry Pratchett story O.o No idea why - I think it was the phrase 'he is golden now' which was a fabulous touch, btw.
So yeah. Loved it. Would love to see more soon, pretty please! :D
Aph xx Report Review
Okay, okay, I couldn't resist! I've read this before - twice before, I think - but I had to come back and review this chapter! It was too good an opportunity to pass up! Plus, I love this story to pieces so it was on my list to do! :D
Bill is amazing. I'm just... gah, he's wonderful. He's so real and full of conflicting traits. It's literally like you've taken a real person and somehow pushed them into ink or something and created them on the screeen in this fic. It's incredible. I love how sometimes he's a bit almost angry with Fleur, about her conversation with Mhairi, and then when she says she forgot to take a note he's almost consoling her. It's such good characterisation... ah, he's just wonderful :)
I love Fleur almost as much as him, too! She's so manipulative and clever and all perfect hair, perfect smile... it's so impressive and so her! I just love it. Also, kudos on writing the accent in - I did it for a one-shot but I could never have done it for a story this long. It would have driven me mad! :P
Ooh, they're going on a date! I'm so excited! I can't wait to see where this goes - how their date goes, how their investigation continues and... everything. This is such a good story, I'm so in love with it... :)
Also, one last thing: 'pwetty French girlie'. Oh Charlie, oh Charlie... he's so wonderful and I haven't even met him yet ;)
House Cup 2012! :DAuthor's Response: Ahha thank you Laura!! I do love reading your reviews on each of my chapters, you're so encouraging and lovely :3
I LOVE BILL SO MUCH, and I am so glad you like him too! I do so want to keep him in-canon and realistic, but keep him within my personal fanon, which often leads me astray with inconsistent characterisations :/
I LOVE writing Fleur, too! She's such a tricky character since I want readers to like her, but to keep her as her own person with real problems. Hee RELATIONSHIP PROGRESSION :D
Haha I'm very glad it's keeping your interest for the date! I am trying to keep this away from the twee end of the spectrum, so I do hope it's not too contrived-sounding :P But YAY INVESTIGATION, more to be revealed soon ;)
Charlie is fab, I can't wait for you to meet him too - you're his biggest fan and we've not come across him yet! :D
TGK xx Report Review
I absolutely adore Bill/Fleur, and this story is so absolutely wonderful. Please don't abandon this. I have never read a take like this--where Fleur clashes with her mother, is afraid of getting too close to Bill--on their relationship, and I just need to read the rest of this! I hope you update soon!Author's Response: Eep thank you so much! :D I have no thoughts of abandoning Enchante, because I love Bill and Fleur far too much, and I'm very glad that you like my interpretation of them too :D I will try to update soon - and thank you for this lovely review! Report Review
Mehehe, I've stolen my brother's laptop today (which is far cooler and faster than mine, although I'm going to overlook the skull stickers everywhere) and decided to celebrate my sneakiness by reviewing meh favourite gal's new chappie! ♥
This was just the most perfect way in the history of perfected perfect-ness to have Bill and Fleur's first date! Homg, the way they were fighting for control and trying to act dominant (;'D) they reminded me of a couple of headstrong primary school kids. AND I LOVED IT! I couldn't imagine it any other way.
All the descriptions, the way you link together so smoothly, the characters~ it's just so fabby Lottie! I particularly love this description- 'She was a calm lake with no ripples of anger or hurt, just peaceful stillness inside.'
AND THEN OH NOES WHY YOU HAVE TO GO AND DO A ROTTEN CLIFFIE? YOU SMELL :P
He's gone? *launches herself onto bed and sobs* Has he left her or has he been kidnapped? (Or would you say man-napped?)
Loved it as usual you talented thing, you. xoxAuthor's Response: Ahha that laptop sounds AWESOME 8O Send it to me so I can update faster, skull stickers and all? And aww thankyou so much Annon! :D
I'm so glad you liked their first date! It took me so long to perfect it because I wanted to capture their characters so much in this turning point, but in the end, I just couldn't imagine doing it any other way either! :D
Mehe thankyou!! I do try to keep it all smoothed together but struggle most of the time, so I'm glad there's not a weird imbalance or anything. Aww thankyou :D
YES, ROTTEN CLIFFIES KEEP PEOPLE HANGING *evil laugh*
You'll find out soon(ish), don't worry! Just think over certain prewritten events... ;)
ooh thank you so much for this lovely review! :D
~Lottie xoxo Report Review
Oh, I love how Fleur so desperately wants the upper hand and Bill won't let her have it. It's very sad, though, how she won't let herself have feelings for him. Liking, or even loving, someone is just what Fleur needs, and she is not letting it happen. Ah, I love this. Thanks!Author's Response: It's so sad to write them like that, but poor Fleur - there's reasons she's set herself apart, and things will go their way eventually! Their even-matched-ness is why they can have an equal relationship, though :D Thanks so much for reviewing! Report Review
I can't believe I didn't find this earlier! This story is best Bill/Fleur story I ever read. Keep it up!Author's Response: Aww thankyou so much!! I'm really glad you liked Enchante so much :3 Report Review
Hi - I am a new reader. I like your Bill and Fleur. I feel a bit sorry for Fleur that she won't let anyone get close and let "feelings" get involved. Is Bill on a Order mission? I look forward to reading more - thank you for sharing your story.Author's Response: Hi there! I'm so glad you like my story, and Bill and Fleur in that. I feel so sorry for Fleur as I write her, because it's really not her fault that she's been programmed that way :( And yes, he's definitely partly on an Order mission! Yay, I'm really glad you're liking it~ I love writing it so much and I'm glad it shows :D Report Review
Uh-oh... Broom closet time?! It was like a cliche that wasn't a cliche anymore, because it was about the mission instead of a random snogging session.
Fleur's character is showcased so well in this chapter, I think, especially since Bill is starting to like her a little bit. She's definitely a manipulator, but he isn't drooling over her. He's in control of himself, and he complements her perfectly!
There were a few confusing sentences this time around, but I managed to work them out for myself. Other than that, I think a few words could be taken out or rearranged here and there. That's really all I saw that I was iffy about.
I hope the next chapter comes out soon, because I want to know about the date!! :)Author's Response: Yeah, I had so much fun with that - I just couldn't think of anywhere else to have them enclosed in a small, dark space, and hoped for the best :P I'm really glad you liked Fleur here, too! I'm trying to do them both justice without sugar-coating things. Bill and Fleur's strength is certainly fun :D
Aargh I do have trouble formulating what I want to say sometimes; thanks for pointing them out, hopefully an edit will sort them! I'm trying to update as much as possible, and thank you for such a lovely review :) Report Review
Yes, flirtatious Bill!! :D
He was just perfect, not too much, and not too little. If you'd have spent paragraphs and paragraphs on him, it would be boring, but only a glimpse was not enough. What you wrote was just right!
When you spoke of Fleur's waitress job and then went right back in to her job at Gringott's, I felt like there was something missing. Not a HUGE something, but enough to be slightly befuddling to me.
Again, the suspense builds with the brilliantly-added newspaper article, but I feel like the last sentence is a bit choppy after the action that it follows.
I must stop writing this review now... The rest of your story is calling my name!Author's Response: Now don't tell anyone, since it'll make them wonder why I don't update faster, but flirtatious Bill is the absolute bee's knees to write XD I'm so glad that you found him easy to read, because I love writing him like that so much and really wouldn't want him to be boring - I do often find myself rambling for paragraphs and often need to remind myself to demonstrate it instead :P
Yeah, I did have trouble switching from one job to another, since it felt clunky at the time but I couldn't work out how to smooth the transition over more :/ Thanks for pointing it out!
Yay, I'm glad you liked the little add of canon - I want to set the scene a bit more for the war, but don't want to make it seem to random. And thanks for the point on the last sentence - it's hard to keep it suspenseful and not clunky :P
Thank you for such a lovely review! :D Report Review
Whoa! I've never read the Triwizard Tournament from another perspective before, much less Fleur's perspective!
It's very well done, and quite chilling towards the end. The take on Ron and Hermione from an outsider's view was really clever, too.
I couldn't find any grammatical errors or weird sentence derps, which are my pet peeves in fanfiction. Excellent work!
I look forward to the continuation of the action that was so suspenseful in this chapter!Author's Response: Hehe yeah, that's what I've always thought too! In a way, we don't want to touch it because of the weight and meaning it carries, but I wanted to show another side to the events. I'm really glad that it worked, though, since Fleur in the mix of this darkness wasn't easy to write!
Yay, thanks! I always like not having grammar issues :P Thankyou so much! Report Review
AHH ALL MY FEELSEYS! This was so undescribably cute- talking in a broom cupboard?
NINJA FLEUR IN DA HOUSE YO.
Did I ever tell you how awesomely you write Gringotts in this? WELL IT'S TRUEE. I can feel the whole workplace atmosphere, with the office hierarchies and everything.
Fleur's accent again! It's so charming! I keep sort of pretending to be her in my head and 'Fleurifying' normal sentences so that i can, you know, get into the mood of the story xP
‘Treat ‘em mean, keep ‘em keen’
NO NO NO NO! FLEUR DON'T TREAT BILL MEAN HE'S TOO MUCH OF A SWEETIE! (okay yes a very flirtatious sweetie and not the sort of sweetie I'd give to my kids to eat, but.) But at least they're Allies now! Allies is better than nothing, allies...means a team.
Wow, I know the definition of allies.
Oh wiat, he's not going out with Sara right? He's taking Fleur to dinner! BACK OFF SARA.
EHHEEE I LOVED IT. I LOVE YOUR WRITING LOTTIEE.
Stupidly excited for next update :3
xoxAuthor's Response: Ahh FEELSEYS FTW! I have to admit, I just described to screw all the angst and throw in CUTNESS for the first half - I just cannot keep up extended angst *hides behind Hufflepuff pillow*
Hey, ninja Fleur - I can so see her going undercover :'D Y'know, when I next hit a huge wall, I'm going to write that story about ninja Fleur, it needs to be written!
Hee THANKYOU! It took me so long to work out originally, so I'm glad you liiike it and it was worth it ;)
I DO THAT, except it's to work out how to say them! I'm glad she's charming with it, though, since I sit at the laptop saying sentences over and over again, trying to get the inflection...
Ohh I know, she's so mean :( but in a sad way, and Bill is sort of bringing it out in her... Still, allies they are! And clever Annon for knowing the meaning *pats on head*
Nope, not going out with Sara, though I do need to sort out the details with her. And yep, Bill is taking Fleur to dinner :D
EEEHEE THANKYOU 83 THANKYOU
Ahha I hope it will be soon! I'm trying to write them, anyhow!
xoxo Report Review
AHHH! I'd forgotten how much I love this story. Honestly, it's just fabulous Lottie and please can there be endless updates because this is wonderful. Ack, you've been writing such wonderful stuff lately and you keep improving too and it's really lovely just to sit around and WATCH YOU GROW (sorry for the cheese, this is my revision break; revision dissolves the sanity from my brain, you know. True fact).
Anyway, I love this. Fleur is just perfect (how do you do her accent? It's wonderful) from everything down to her haughtiness and her dislike of the french food they serve in a restaurant. And her ability to be charming and then stubborn is so good - and the fact that Bill gets to see some more of these sides of her character is just really exciting and luvverrlyy juvverrly and... did I mention I loved this?
Plus, they're allies now! Thats excited. Althought I wonder what the Order lot will think about his partner in crime? Either way, Lottie, I want an update pronto, thankyouverymuch.
This is wonderful. Seriously :)
-ACAuthor's Response: Ahha thankyou Helen!! I wish there were endless updates too... lol not gonna happen sadly, but I'm so happy you like my writing stuffs and that I'm getting somewhere with it? *fingers crossed* (revision should die, it dissolves sanity and insanity!)
Eep I'm so glad you like it all! I end up sitting at my desk trying to work out how she says things for like half an hour at a time and I sound like a huge loon, so I'm glad that all pays off :D Fleur is so much fun to write, with her haughtiness and then everything else - it's even more fun showing it to Bill, so I'm really glad that comes across 8D
ALLIES! I've been dying to unleash the allying, especially since there are indeed progressions with the Order very soon concerning partners in crime and whatnot. Yup, it's all go from here ;)
THANK YOU FOR THIS LOVELY REVIEW 83
~TGK Report Review
Hello! I'm here from the Review Battle!
So I'm glad to read more of this story! I love the element of mystery you added to the story, perhaps of Bill and Fleur.
Interesting that Fleur must also work at the restaurant. It seems a shame, though I guess she needs the money. And I can see why she would hate it there. But that definitely makes me sympathize with her more.
The next part is very interesting! I'm glad they got to go to Mhairi's house finally. You did a wonderful job with the descriptions. Even as Bill was interpreting them, they told the reader so much about what potentially happened. It sounds like real crime scene examination work, almost.
Also, I love that you still have Fleur make mistakes in English. Her saying "What are you making?" is such a perfect mistake too, because in French the very for "to do" and "to make" is the same, though I'm sure you know that.
Overall, another good chapter. This story just keeps getting more interesting, especially now! And the dynamic between Bill and Fleur is certainly changing as well. I'll try to read more when you update! :DAuthor's Response: Hi there! :D
I'm really glad you've come back to read more! I love dabbling in mystery a bit, though I'm hopelessly inexperienced in that area, and do hope that Bill and Fleur don't seem too contrived as they go through the problem :P
I feel almost guilty for making Fleur work at the restaurant... but I just can't see how else she'd get the money, since she no longer has access to her parents' accounts! Also I'm glad that it makes her seem more real and sympathiseable, because otherwise I'm at risk of letting her become the spoilt brat who still has it all.
Yay, I'm so glad that the crime scene worked! I was worried that the descriptions were overly long and boring, but I wanted to show the reader around the scene as though they could follow the trail of clues left too, and I'm so glad you could follow it :D
Hehe yes, it's a mistake that a French friend of mine used to make a lot, and since Fleur did come over to improve her English, I figured that she'd still need correcting sometimes!
I'm really glad you liked this chapter, and that there's interest gathering! I just hope the Bill/Fleur dynamic isn't changing too fast :P and thank you so much for a lovely review! :D Report Review
YAY! Finally some angst! I know you treated that before, with all strange things happening, but in this chapter the descriptions are mysterious and more captivating.
And Fleur! French is sometimes rough but I don't think of it as a big deal. Her accent is wonderfully described and I actually read her lines with it, which is great because I could just avoid it you know? She really is the stereotypical parisian, always criticizing something and being all stubborn, but at the same time her Veela blood adds a special touch of manipulative ways. By the way, be a little careful with that and Bill, it'd be a little cliché if it didn't work at all with him, though through reading his parts I'm not that sure ;)
I love Bill, fighting as he's all out of his comfort zone and still keeps his mind focused-, almost (thanks Fleur ^^). I pictured him in this chapter as some sort of Sherlock's nephew, and I hope through the story he'll become Holmes himself.
I liked the little insight of her restaurant life up there. I get some people thought of it as unnecessary, but it gets us more into her character. Maybe adding some more thoughts about Mhairi as she works there, so we know where her mind is really on? I, personally, really liked her characterization there.
Please keep the mystery going, can't wait to read what happens!Author's Response: Hehe it was so much fun writing the angst for this chapter! I just couldn't help trying to perfect the scene for the mind of the reader, so I'm glad it was captivating and not boring :D
I'm so glad Fleur's accent isn't clunky or annoying, because I often avoid reading lines where accent is written in and I'm trying to not make it too hard on the eye now, and just have it as not drawing too much attention or interrupt flow :P But I like that you can see the French and Veela parts of her and relate her ways back to her roots, because it's part of who she is. And thanks for the point about Bill - it's difficult to keep him disliking how she uses her image without being affected by it!
I'm so glad you love Bill though! He's a load of fun to write, and I enjoy setting the trail for them to follow - I kind of see it as Holmes-type investigations too :D
And I'm glad that you didn't find the restaurant part too useless, because I did only keep it in here as a character help since she's out of her comfort zone in this working environment. I like your idea about adding more Mhairi parts!
And thank you so much for this lovely review! :D
~TGK Report Review
Ah, I really enjoyed this (again :P). This is so good - it's just the right balance of romance, action and mystery... it's so obvious that it's taking place in a war - you do a really good job of reminding us of that every now and then, just in case we forgot - but it still feels like nothing much is happening - which, of course, it isn't. Still seems like it could fit into the fifth book so easily.
Bill! Lots of Bill! Excellent! I do love Bill... he seems so perfect. He's so clearly a Weasley - Fred and George's brother, but also Ron and Percy's brother and Ginny's brother, you know? He's like a mash-up of all of them, but he's also his own person with his own personality and it's so distinct from JKR's Weasleys. It's just brilliant. I like how Bill was effected by Fleur - giving in to her asking to work with him on the case of Mhairi's disappearance - without even realising it, even though he's not quite as effected as his co-workers. It makes him imperfect, and not special, you know? Not the exception or anything weird like that.
Fleur just gets better and better. I liked the snapshot of her working at the restaurant and the little details about that - how they liked to call their employees by French version of their names, instead of their actual names (Oh, on this point 'Jack' in French is spelt 'Jacques' - you just missed out the c, but I thought I'd mention it. It's pretty much the only mistake I noticed in the entire thing, tbh). It just made it come alive.
Ooh, Mhairi was attacked! I suspected, lol, but it's always nice to have confirmation that you were right :P Still, I can't wait to find out what's happened to her, what will happen with Fleur and Bill (I predict an explosion of temper in the near future...) and what Dumbledore/the Order will say when they found out Fleur's helping Bill with the investigation.
I'm so excited to see where this leads and how you work everything in. Keep writing, pwease! :D
Aph xxAuthor's Response: Hee I'm glad you're liking it! I love writing it with the tense sort of atmosphere, with this brewing war that's being held under cover for some people and others don't believe in it at all. I do wonder if I've managed to keep the events in-canon enough lol, since I don't want Sirius to appear out of nowhere at some point :P
I LOVE writing Bill so much, and I think you explained why so much better than I ever could, since I get to take all the Weasleys and pick my favourite bits to make into a new person that somehow fits in with canon! That sounds ridiculous, oh dear, but I think he's just a brilliantly fun character to write. But I'm very glad he's not too 2D and super-perfect, because I just want him to be fun, real, relatable :)
I wasn't sure whether to include the restaurant scene to be honest, since it doesn't as such have much of a plot point, but I kept it for the characterisation - so I'm very glad it worked, in that sense! (And thank you for the heads-up on 'Jacques', I completely forgot how to spell it :P)
Ahha yes, a part of my not-so-subtly-laid plans have been uncovered! Hehe I can't wait to plant more clues though, and show just how her story tangles in with the rest of them :)
Thank you so much for a gorgeous review! I'm definitely going to keep writing :D
TGK xx Report Review
While this is the first fleur/bill that i have read u really have me hooked and i want to find out what happens. I look forward to future chapters thats for sure! I think uve done a wonderful job so far with this story and i really cant wait to find out more about what happend to her coworker and if the person at work is really even her or someone disguised as her. Thecharacterization is wonderful as well. Honestly altogether this is a great story with lots of promise for the coming chapters. I hope to keep coming back and continuing with this story! Great job!
~slytherinchica08~Author's Response: Eee yay! I'm really glad you want to read on, and want to know what happens to them - a lot, that's for sure ;) But thankyou so much! And some of your guesses are... surprisingly accurate - though I'm glad you like the characters too, since they keep it going! Hehe, thankyou so much for your wonderful support and praise :) Report Review
Oh things are really starting to pick up! I love the bit in bills pov maybe thats because its where most of the stuff happend but it was so good and funny especially when fleur is trying to get information. The ending of this chapter was perfect as well and it really makes me wonder whats going to happen when she goes to mhairis place and finds no husband or children running around. I loved your description of the letters and you can really tell how much the two sisters care for each other. I cant wait to read the next chapter and see whats going to happen between bill and fleur because their interactions are rather funny! Great job!
~slytherinchica08~Author's Response: Hehe! I had far too much fun writing that scene, and Fleur's just so manipulative and brilliant to write because of it :D I'm really glad you liked it all! Hehe well, it's certainly interesting... and I just want to show that close relationship that we first saw in GoF. I'm really glad that you want to read more and like Bill/Fleur too! It's what every writer wants :D Thankyou so much! Report Review
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