Well done, left me wanting more, what more can you ask of a story.Author's Response: Aww, I'd love to carry it on but I think I should leave it suspensful. Report Review
Oh rj sunshine, this was lovely! Poor Harry, he is really in love with Hermione, isn't he? I never ever liked Ginny in the books and was disappointed that Harry ended up marrying her (I even prefer Harry/Luna).
The kiss was sweet and Harry was so romantic: "Then I'll wait forever." Aww :) I love that Hermione rested her head on his shoulder and took his hand after this :)Author's Response: Why thanks Sarah! I thought I should make it sort of realistic. He wouldn't just steal Hermione from Ron. I prefer Harry/Luna too and would have expected them to get together instead.
Glad you enjoyed this :D Report Review
i usually don't read a lot of Harry/Hermione, but i've been exploring it lately, and i think you did a wonderful job with this story. it was realistic and original and the flow was incredible. wonderful job on this. keep up the great writing!!Author's Response: Thanks confusedlover. These reviews keep me going :D Report Review
Oh my goodness, this was brilliant. Truly moving and wonderful. I love the hopeful tone compared to the situation. Really good job. :)Author's Response: Yes that was the only way I could think of to make it a Harry/Hermione because there was no way that Hermione would ruin her marriage because of this.
Glad you liked it :) Report Review
Well this was... interesting. I don't often read Harry/Hermione and I'm not a fan of it, but I'm not sure what to make of your story.
The description: perfect. Grammar: perfect. Characters: I don't know. I don't think Harry would ever have a crush on Hermione, especially since the moment they met. I'm not a big fan of Harry/Ginny either and I agree with you that they wouldn't have lasted.
This is just up to taste and who likes what and as much as I loved it, I didn't like the storyline, or maybe it's just Harry/Hermione that I've got a problem with and that triggers other things in my brain.
Good job and thank you for letting me review these stories.
dobbys_socksAuthor's Response: Thanks for the review. It was a really difficult challenge to be honest and I did my best Report Review
What happens next?
Please continue...Author's Response: Well I think whatever you want to happen happens. Harry waits for her. Hermione may leave Ron, or she will grow old with him :) You decide Report Review
Hello RJ, and thank you for participating in my challenge!
The story and its plo is pretty good, so pretty much, I don't see much stuff you might wanna go over. ;) However, there is only ONE thing that I think you might want to think over.
“I love Ron,” Harry admitted.
The I love Ron kind of made me giggle. This was because, for a second I thought he literraly loved Ron. So I would suggest changing that: You might give people the wrong message...
So I guess thats all, so I'll tell who is the winner in ze blog!Author's Response: yes i understand, but it is the truth: he does love ron and i can't find another way to put it. i just hope that the readers get it. you got it eventually right? anyway, thanks for the review and i cant wait to see the result :) Report Review
And will you be continuing with 'Witch!'?Author's Response: yes i am in the process of finishing the next chapter and then will be editing :) Report Review
Loved it! It was awesome! Another chapter perhaps? ;)Author's Response: oh no, i couldnt do it to Ron, i'm afraid. this one was hard enough Report Review
So Hermione cheated on her husband on Valentine's Day with hsi best friend.
Classy.Author's Response: I know! Classy lol Report Review
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