I though that there was something missing... It was Keene.
Once again I have to say I love how you described Hermione. You've captured her perfectly. And it's so like her not to jump and release the strange man from inside the mirror.
One thing I've noticed but have yet to compliment you on, is the little countdown you have at the top of every chapter ("... days until Halloween"). It gives the whole mystery a new air, I can actually feel that there is something heading our way and that the events leading up to it may be crucial.
I also love how she decided to do research and contacted McGonagall. We see so little of the Hogwarts staff in Post-Hogwarts stories.
I'll say it once more, Godric is an amazing character. I'm hanging on his every word and I cannot wait to see him out and about. Report Review
Hello Harry Potter!
I love how the old group is slowly starting to come into this story and crack this case. I actually feel very sorry for Hermione, she's so overworked already and this mirror/murder story isn't helping her. Oh but I do love a midday nap. That actually made me a little sleepy, right there!
I can't wait to learn more about Godric, he seems like such an interesting character you're developing and I'm very curious to see where you'll be taking this story!
Untill next chapter! Report Review
Oh the plot thickens!
We now have dead bodies, a centuries old wizard giving Hermione instructions and a very confused Hermione. o.o
I love the way in which you depicted Hermione Granger in this story. She is such a key element to the central plot line of Harry Potter and you've captured her essence brillantly in this. It's just like her to want to continue her studies for as much as possible and attend University just because she can. In my opinion, you've really highlighted her curiosity and booksmart.
The action scenes were very well written, I felt my heart quicken with the suspense and the emotion of it. Those paragraphs were fast paced and alert and fitted in perfectly with the whole story.
As for Godric, I really like his accent. I couldn't bring myself to write anything in Founder Era or about the Founders, because I'm sure I would miss something crucial like accent or beliefs that were common to the UK in that time and age!
Keep up the good work and I'll see you next chapter! Report Review
Ho Ho Ho! Merry Christmas!
This was a beautiful first chapter! You've set the tone for what I think will be an amazing journey. The description of Godric was perfect in my opinion, it's just as I always pictured him.
The plot is also very interesting, the idea that the founders are at odds with each other after all this time and that even Riddle himself was a pawn in this conflict is something I find really original and I'm excited to see where you go with it.
The writting is very good, it flows nicely, your grammar and spelling are flawless.
I can't wait to read more of this! See you next chapter! Report Review
I keep checking back to see what happens but no luck in an update yet :-( love this story! Hope to see more soon.Author's Response: Thank you the review and the continued support of my story. I am sorry that the last update is taking so long, but I hope to have it up by the first of the year. Thank you again. Report Review
So exciting!!! Nice that you finally had the time to make this :) I like it but I have a little problem understanding the old language because I am from sweden, but I love it:)Author's Response: I am glad that even with the little problem understanding some of the old language you have still enjoyed this chapter. The huge ending should be up by the first of the year. Thank you for all your support. Report Review
I like Hermione/Oc stories, and this one is great! Please
keep writing, and post soon! Also enjoying the plot, it's so
different!Author's Response: Thank you. The goal is to have the newest chapter up soon. So hopefully the wait wont be too much longer. Report Review
Please update soon I want to know what happens next :) You can't quit now when it's just the end left, I have followed this story for sometime and I have to know the end. You are really good at writing :)Author's Response: Thank you so much for being such a loyal follower of this story. I am sorry that I have not updated recently but real life has been kicking my butt. The goal is to have the next chapter into the queue soon, so your wait shouldn't be too much longer. Thank you again for reading. Report Review
I love it its one of the best stories i've read and can't wait to read moreAuthor's Response: Thank you so much. I hope to have the last two chapters up soon. Real Life has been a pain. Report Review
Dageus lied. What is the truth? What did he find? Please update!!Author's Response: You will just have to continue reading in order to find out. Thank you so much for taking the effort to leave me a review. Hope to have more chapters up soon. Report Review
This is really good! Please update soon!!Author's Response: Thank you so much for your support. The next chapter is in the queue and should be up soon. Report Review
Their time together is so bittersweet. Godric's words(that you gave him) were beautiful - they would melt any woman's heart. Thanks for the update!Author's Response: Your very welcome and thank you so much for all your words of encouragement. Report Review
I LOVE this story! I feel horrible for Hermione and Godric. Can't wait to see what happens next.Author's Response: I am so glad that you are enjoying this story so much. It is by far my favorite story that I have written so far. The next few chapters should be coming soon. Thank you. Report Review
Salazar is truly horrid both physically and emotionally. He has tattoos inside his nose - ugh! Incinerating his minions (even accidently) is disgusting morally and visually (in my imagination). "There was always something in them (women) begging to be exploited." What a sicko! I hope your Hermione (who is brilliant) will not be susceptible. It was interesting to read that Salazar had planted someone at Hogwarts. He is so arrogant to believe himself to be impervious to any threats - I can't wait to read him be defeated (please!). I am glad that Hermione is done "licking her wounds". If Godric will be gone so soon she may as well enjoy the time available. Thanks for the update!Author's Response: I truly wanted to make Salazar a terrible bad guy, one that no one would want to survive the battle. Someone that made even Voldemort look tame in comparison, I just hope that I did that justice. As to how Hermione will react now that she is not licking her wounds you will just have to keep reading in order to find out. Only a few more chapters to go and then everyone will know what happens in the final showdown between Godric and Salazar. Report Review
Poor Hermione - she's right. He is a coward to have been so intimate with her and not tell her the truth. Who is Chloe (she answers the question about the tattoos)? Gwen and Jenna seem very sweet. I like what you have told us of Dageus and Drustan, too. Hopefully Hermione will not leave the Gryffin property or if she does maybe Harry will go with her to Hogwarts? If Salazar catches her I shudder to think what he wouldn't do! Thanks for the update!Author's Response: The chloe part was a typo, I didn't realize that I had done it. I must had have PW on the brain when writing that chapter. Thanks for the review and I hope you continue reading. Report Review
I absolutely love this story! Please keep updating! :)Author's Response: There are still a few more chapters to go so keep an eye out. Thank you for the review. Report Review
It's funny you should mention grammar mistakes, because I actually don't see any. I saw a couple of misspelled words,but for me, that is not nearly as big a deal as grammar mistakes. I really like this story!!Author's Response: Thank you. I have been working really hard to make sure and catch the grammar mistakes in my most recent edits. I am so glad that you are enjoying this story. Report Review
This is drawing me in more and more with each chapter :)Author's Response: I am so happy to hear that, Thank you for the review. Report Review
This is really good. You have to finish it please! I reallly like it! Please update soon.Author's Response: No worries, I have been working hard on the next few chapters and should have the next one up by next week at the latest. Report Review
I didn't even think that maybe Godric might refuse to talk until Hermione arrived - well done! Drustan was so apologetic (and rather sweet) about taking the mirror. I really liked how he acknowledged Hermione's past "work" in the wizarding world and values her opinion about Godric. I hope that Harry doesn't show up until the next day - I somehow sense that Godric and Hermione may not be available to meet with him. Thanks for the new chapter!Author's Response: Godric tends to be quite the stubborn man, as well as he can be a bit unexpected at times. I am so glad that you enjoyed this chapter and I hope to have the next chapter up soon. Report Review
Ugh! Sometimes I can't help but get frustrated with Godric. He's such a meat-head. Surrounded by friendly kinsfolk and he still can't help but insult them the moment he gets free of the mirror. I guess that's what being the alpha-male is all about.
OK, I'll admit it right up front: I was a little disappointed that you didn't make it more difficult and complicated for Degeus and Hermione to find one another. Or at least more time-consuming. Perhaps confrontational. I was prepared and even rather excited for Hermione to have some sort of adventure in the course of finding her way to Gryffin Castle. Perhaps even deal with another of Salazar's assassins. I feel like you skipped over something fairly significant there, since you created so much tension around it at the end of the last chapter. In fact, I should probably go back and make sure that you didn't rewrite the end, because I know you were planning to edit it. Don't go anywhere for a sec, OK? ... Alright, I'm back. So my suggestion remains. I think there was a real opportunity to give Hermione another great moment. At any rate, enough about that.
I'm glad that besides being hopelessly in love with Godric, or perhaps because she's hopelessly in love with him, she's finally decided that she needs to know everything about him, including why he's trapped in the dark glass and why he has this self-loathing streak. Overall, this was a good chapter for her emotionally. She figured some things out, she seems to be getting better centered and more of that strong determination was coming through.
I liked you brief rumination on alpha males and what makes them tick. Every time you delve into Hermione's mind like that, it adds to the depth of her character. The same goes for Godric.
Your description of the castle through Hermione's eyes was breath-taking and also says something about her. The particular details she focuses on and the things that seem important to her. All of them continue to build and round out her character.
Then she releases Godric from the mirror and he goes full-on alpha-meathead. I completely get his need to be alone with her, but he over-does it by a mile. He's sort of comical that way.
It seems that Drustan has picked up on his tattoos. You made reference to them a few chapters ago. He seems to be gearing up for something big and not entirely wholesome. Hopefully Hermione can make him see reason before he makes a bad situation worse.
Overall, a pretty good outing. I just would have loved to see you make something great out of the time that Hermione and Dageus spend searching for one another. That's all. Still enjoying the story very much and kind of bummed that we're getting near the end.Author's Response: I must admit that you make a great suggestion about the beginning of the chapter. Even after I finished writing this chapter and posting I felt that something was missing but I guess after looking at this story for so long I just couldn't see what it was.
I will be sure to keep them in mind, when my beta and I go back over this chapter. I will be sure to let you know if I change anything big so that you can go back and read it.
Thank you for faithfully sticking with this story and for all the wonderful insight you have brought to it. Report Review
Hello, again! You are getting these chapters posted at a blistering pace lately! It's so much fun, being along for the ride.
Poor Hermione. Such a horrible feeling to suddenly find yourself all alone in a strange place with everything familiar and necessary torn away. At least she still has her wand.
I absolutely loved this line: "Don't answer that," she snapped at herself hastily. "That was a purely rhetorical question, not a show me proof one."
You sort of left us hanging as she enters the diner. Why do I have a sneaking suspicion that the waitress is going to give her the keys to Dageus's car and the two of them are going to miss each other in passing?
The conversation between Dageus and Godric was very different than their first. If there was one thing about this chapter that seemed a bit... abrupt, it was the way that their conversation suddenly became rather familiar, almost collegial, compared to the way that Godric completely blows Dageus off in the village. Granted, Godric is in a significantly disadvantaged position at this point, but Dageus isn't and he also seems to almost obey Godric instinctively. I guess I would have expected him to feel more put out and take longer to warm up.
Anyway, the dialog between the two of them was humorously practical in nature. It isn't often that you'll have a conversation with a thousand-year-old man in an enchanted mirror about something as pedestrian as the sun.
Drustan seems like an amiable fellow. It's interesting that he's married to a muggle, or perhaps a witch who simply took a liking to the natural sciences. If Hermione could decide to abandon magic and become an archaeologist, anything is possible.
Your writing was terrific in this chapter. I couldn't find a thing wrong with it.
You've mentioned in a few responses that the story is coming to an end soon. I'm very curious to see how you tie it all up!Author's Response: I didn't realize how different the conversation between the two of them was so different. Thank you for pointing that out, I will have to go back and double check that section. I can't tell you anything about what is going to happen when she enters the diner, if I did that would take all the fun out of it. The next chapter should be going into the queue sometime today or tomorrow, so should be viewable within a week at most.
Drustan's wife is a squib, who decided to study physics when she couldnt do magic, I guess I need to go back and explain that better.
Dageus wife Jenna is a muggleborn witch, I need to go back and make sure that was illustrated correctly. Thank you so much for your insight. Report Review
Godric found family!! 9/10 : )Author's Response: Thank you for the review and I hope you continue to enjoy my story. Report Review
I am so sorry that i haven't read this story in awhile. This was great. 9/10 : )Author's Response: That's fine, you are back now. Thank you for the review and i hope you continue to enjoy the story. Report Review
That will be one fascinating conversation between Drustan and Godric- I hope we get to read it! Dageus shouldn't have too hard of a time finding Hermione if she stays in the cafe. If Harry gets there first it will be more of a challenge. Harry might well enjoy meeting Dageus and Drustan. Thanks for the new chapter!Author's Response: The next chapter is already written and ready to go into the queue, so at least you wont have to wait long to find out what happens. I have had a lot of fun coming up with this story and it is nice to know so many others have enjoyed this story just as much. Thank you for the review. Report Review
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