Heyy, you're back!

And I'm back too! Sorry, I'm a bit behind the times it seems - I was checking for new chapters regularly, but the story never seemed to be updated. So I stopped checking. And now, once I stopped checking, BAM! like five new chapters! Made my day, it did!

So I really want to leave a thorough review but I need to get up early tomorrow so I'll have to think it over a bit before I do. All in all this is still definitely my current favourite story and I enjoy it immensely! Keep up the good work!

Just something I thought about though - Henry's reason for agreeing to break up seems a bit, I dunno, flimsy? I mean, there's a war raging with maniacs killing muggleborns like Keira and he's all "quidditch is too dagerous for girls". He's worried about quidditch. Not Death Eaters. What? I just keep thinking I'm missing something about Henry and the breakup and I'm sooo curious about finding out more!

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Hey! I usually leave a review on your Canis Major blog but it takes up a lot of space and I thought it would be better to start leaving reviews on HPFF instead! Now with that out of the way I just wanted to say I was so surprised to see a new chapter! I love it when stories are updated faster than they said they would be; it’s fantastic!

Now, onto the chapter! Okay, this is one of, if not the best chapter in Canis Major yet. Seriously. It was AMAZING! Really, truly brilliant.

I’ll start off with Henry. I think you could not have done it more perfectly. Really, they were mature about it and it ended on good terms. There wasn’t some ridiculous, dramatic fight. No one cheated and it wasn’t because she realized she was in love with Sirius even though she still barely knows him but apparently he’s ‘the one’. I really do love Henry and I hope they stay friends because he’d still make a great friend. It took me by surprise as well! I really wasn’t expecting that but in a good way. It felt right and it wasn’t too soon. “I love you. Always will”: I kind of broke down inside at that point, it was so sad! But I was kind of too shocked to cry or anything. Will he really always love her? And will there always be a part of Keira that loves him too? Or will it kind of fade into a deep affection or something? Because I don’t really know, I always figured that when you fall in love, even if it isn’t meant to be, there’s a part of you that will always love them. Oh, I feel depressed again just thinking about it. Oh God, okay, moving on to brighter things.

I am loving the development between Keira and Sirius. They aren’t quite friends yet but that’s what I love about it; it’s realistic. That’s what makes you such a good writer, you don’t rush it and what I love about each chapter is that something happens in each one, something significant, not always massively significant but significant none the less. I can see what you meant when you said that these chapters affect Henry a lot now! Back to Sirius though; “I caught a glimpse of him still standing there as I went to shut the portrait hole behind me”, I can’t tell, was he watching her, or was he just lost in his thoughts? Anyhow, it made me think to ask you this. It was sweet that he went to find her and that felt he owed her. And I love that you’re showing how observant Sirius actually is because a lot of people seem to forget that he is a very good reader of personality. Did that even make sense? Probably not! They do have natural chemistry though, or maybe I’m imaging that but that’s what I’m getting. Sirius is obviously attracted to her, which I gathered from past chapters not recent ones. He did keep ogling at her chest! “He was standing behind me. It was remarkable how much better I felt when he was. He was like a shield, blocking anything from touching me, from seeing me.” I loved this paragraph. There are small hints like this dotted around that they will be really good for each other. I love what Sirius said to her, and Keira needs to believe it! They both kind of have a natural understanding of each other I feel, because they’ve known each other for barely any time yet Sirius can already gather this about Keira and Keira obviously has some sort of understanding about him from what she’s said and observed. He picked her up… To quote Keira (or you to be more exact), “Bet he got a lovely view of [her] chest then”! I was really sweet that she fell asleep in his arms! ‘Wanting Warmth’ – “He was warm. So warm.” I loved that. And I also loved the difference in Henry’s smell and Sirius’ – Henry’s expensive cologne is slightly overpowering whereas Sirius – “He smelled like soap and something else that I couldn’t put my finger on. The first thing that came to mind was dog, although that couldn’t be right, so I dismissed it lazily.” I don’t know if that was intentional or not but I liked it!

Anyway, this is over 800 words long so I think I should probably wrap it up. I loved this chapter and I can’t wait for the new one!

Nel

P.S. What was Sirius’ “expression” when Keira asked him why he went to look for her? Just curious. I ask way too many questions but when you can actually ask the author what they meant without having to guess you kind of give in!

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Hello :)

I just read all twelve chapters in one go and all i have to say is that i absolutely love the way you've written out the entire thing! I normally don't read Marauder fics but your summary was very intriguing and i'm glad i gave your story a go :)

I really like how the whole thing is not rushed. I mean you've taken your time to introduce everyone and the entire setting for the story, which is great! I really like all the characters, especially Mel! i don't know, i think she seems the most spirited one!

Naw, Sirius and Keira action! I think it's really cute :') Though, i really loved Henry! But the fic must go on, yes? ;)

Update soon :)

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incredibly well written, thank you

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I loved this chapter, it is definitely my favourite so far!! Abra is so cute!!! And Keira and Henry broke up!!! He annoyed me so, Yay!! Please update soon!!!

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How does Keira stand it??? If Henry were my boyfriend and he didn't like the fact I was on the Quidditch team I'd tell him to- well that's a bit rude but I'd be super mad!
It pisses me off, why can't he just be happy for her, I hate it!

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Loved it! I love Henry too, and I quite liked Keira's relationship with him, and her friendship with the Ravenclaw boys. But I was waiting for the break-up, and I'm glad it was so amicable. And I'm loving the development on Keira and Sirius's part :D can't wait for the next chapter!

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PLEASE KEEP WRITING IM DYING OF WAITING SO LONG. I love her and sirius together, im waiting for some epic tragedy in keira's life though since shes muggleborn!!!

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Loved this chapter! was really nice seeing a mature break up for a change and not an abrupt ending because she finds out she loves Sirius! Love how you write Henry please don't say its the end of him? Sirius being all Serious about the war and his family really touched me to so good. Can i just ask you one thing? Please don't make Keira someone who doesn't kick bad guy ass! She's too much of a great character not to! Keep writing love it :)

Author's Response: Haha, thanks. Yeah, I wanted the breakup to reflect their relationship, because neither Keira nor Henry were the sort of person that was going to have a dramatic break up. They didn't have a dramatic relationship, and, therefore, having a dramatic breakup was never going to be realistic.

Oh, Keira will certainly kick bad guy ass. She just doesn't believe she's able too at the moment, but we're getting there. We're getting there. ;)

Thanks for the review. It's really appreciated, and I'm really glad that you like the story. ^_^
- A.

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ugh. love it so much. I can't even.

Author's Response: Haha, thanks. Hopefully I'll be able to update soon, and that you continue to enjoy the story.

- Adele. ^_^

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I absolutely loved this chapter! I think it's your best yet, so congratulations! :)

It was eventful yet heartfelt and definitely contained a satisfactory amount of Siriusness :P

So please update soon! I'm dying to read the next chapter!!

Author's Response: Woop woop! Haha, thanks. Hooray for Sirius! He's obviously going to be playing an increasing role from here on, although it lets up for a bit before they really become friends, as you'll see when I finally get a chance to write the next chapter! I've got an essay to write for tomorrow, but hopefully I can write some more after I get that done. Fingers crossed!

Thanks for reviewing, and I'll try and update soon!
- Adele :)

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Wow...this last section was so moving and heartfelt. You write beautifully and you have an amazing ability to create overwhelmingly emotive scenes. I love your writing! :) To be honest, I was almost moved to tears in this chapter!

Author's Response: Thank you! I was really worried about this chapter, to be honest, so I'm really glad that you liked it. I can't believe it nearly moved you to tears! I must be doing much better than I thought, if that is the case.

Thank you so much for taking the time to read and review. It's really appreciated. I hope you enjoy the rest of the story just as much!

- Adele :)

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This is BRILLIANT, simply brilliant! :) I love it!

Author's Response: Ahh, thank you! I'm super glad that you like it. Looking back on this it needs some serious editing, but at the moment whenever I have a spare moment, it's spent writing the next chapter, haha.

Thanks for the review and hopefully you like the rest of the story just as much!

- Adele ^_^

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Please keep writing i love your story, but we need more drama! Like a deatheater attack on Keiras family and Sirius helps her through!!!

Author's Response: I have written a chapter with a death eater attack, although it's not for a few chapters yet. (Shhh! Spoilers!) More drama is coming up though. What? You thought Keira could go missing with Sirius Black for all of Friday evening and the school wouldn't be talking about it? :P

And I will keep writing. I just need to get past my last two exams tomorrow and I have four days off that I want to dedicate to getting the next chapter written.

I'm super glad to hear that you love my story, and I'm sorry that there isn't more drama. I'll try and up the quota for you soon!

Thanks for taking the time to review. It's really appreciated.
- Adele ^_^

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Keira and Henry were right to break it off. He would never feel comfortable with her on the the Gryffindor (or any) team. Sirius was quite sweet to go after her when she didn't return to the party. I think you are right - now they are "even". Friends, even (or beginning to be). Great chapter - thank you for the update.

Author's Response: Exactly. Henry never would have been okay with that, but not because he thinks she isn't capable, but because he has this overwhelming urge to keep her safe, but he's aware that it's an issue, which is why he's letting her go, logical Ravenclaw that he is.

The start of friends, yes. Let's just say, it only gets better from here, haha.

No problem! Thank you for the review. (I love getting your reviews, they always make me smile!)

I'll try and update as soon as school allows!
- Adele. :)

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I like the way you broke up Henry and Keira. It wasn's over dramatic and you didn't make it so they instantly hated each other. It had a real feel to it and thats what I love about your writing! Great chapter and good luck with school.

Author's Response: Yeah, I didn't want some huge fight and them hating each other. 1) Because I love Henry and he still has a part to play in this story, so he's not going too far, and 2) because that just wasn't them. Keira and Henry were never going to have a dramatic breakup, as they never had that sort of a dramatic relationship.

Thanks! I've finished exams, but I still have assessments (school never ends!) but I'm hoping to squeeze in an hour or two tomorrow after I write my English essay, as I'm going on Camp on Tuesday, where I'll get no work done. :/

Anyway! Thank you for the review - I'm flattered that you love my writing. It's amazing to hear.

I'll try and update soon!
- A. :)

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Hey! I love your story!! I think you did the Henry Breakup just right! It wasn't just some out of the blue huge fight, you allowed them to still be the characters you created. I also enjoy the fact that you're not having some insta-love relationship with Keira and Sirius! So excited to see what you have next!

Author's Response: Hey! I love your review! :P

I'm glad that you like it. You have no idea how much I was stressing over this. I wrote it last June (can you believe that? I sure can't!) and have been paranoid about it ever since. Mainly because my writing has change a lot since I first started this story, and I wasn't sure about characterisation consistency, but it seems that I've been worried over nothing (although that doesn't stop me worrying...)

Yeah, I hate those stories where they have an instant relationship. That never happens, and I wanted my story to be different and stand out for its relate-abilty (if that makes any sense what-so-ever!)

I'll try and update as soon as I can, and thanks again for the review!
- A. ^_^

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AW so sad, but I loved it! The perfect way to finish things with Henry and Nyx, I loved Henry's character and I'm really glad they're still friends:) I'm also in love with Sirius. Please update again soon!
Love Bear

Author's Response: Phew. Haha, I'm glad you think so. I was really worried about how people would react, but it seems to have been positive feedback, so far. :)

I'm half way through the next chapter, but school is a pain, so hopefully an update won't be too far away.

Thanks for taking the time to review. It's really appreciated, and I'm glad that you like the story!

- A. :)

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BRILLIANT CHAPTER!
I love the way you've written sirius's character and I already adore Keira and his friendship. YAY

update soon :D
lOony

Author's Response: Haha, they aren't quite friends yet. But they're getting there ;) Sirius is hard to write. There a times when it's easy and he writes himself, and other moments where I just give up and go get food because he's misbehaving and not making any sense. I'm glad that you like him though. He's loveable when you get to know him, as Keira is slowly figuring out.

The next chapter is half done, although I'm not sure if I like it. Anyway, I'll try and update as soon as school allows.

Thanks for taking the time to review. It's really appreciated.
- A. ^_^

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Love this story so much. Keep it up!

Author's Response: Thanks! I have half of the next chapter written, but I don't think I'll have the opportunity to finish it for a few weeks, so the next update might take a while. I'm really glad that you like the story, though. ^_^

Thanks for the review!
- A. :)

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I felt the breakup was very realistic and because I love Henry so much too I'm glad he was reasonable about it and knew that he was holding Keira back. He loved her enough to let go and let her fly :)

Wonderful chapter and as always I can't wait to read more! Good luck with exams!

Author's Response: Thank you! I'll need all the luck I can get. (I've done absolutely no work this weekend, and it's terrible. D:)

I'm glad you thought the breakup was realistic. That's what I was aiming for, but I can never tell if others will view it the same way. :/

I'll try and update as soon as I can. I don't know if school's going to let me, but I'm going to try. The next chapter's half written, although I'm not sure how I feel about it, so we'll see. :P

Thanks for the review. I always love what you have to say.
- A. ^_^

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Ahhh loved this chapter!!! I thought the break-up between Henry and Keira was really realistic; I mean, it wouldn't make sense for them to have this huge blow up and leave on bad terms from what we've seen of their relationship, so great job with that! I was surprised with myself by being a little saddened by their break up but now she can get closer to Sirius!!! SUPER EXCITED ABOUT THAT!!! I know it's gonna take some but it's gonna happen and I'm unbelievably stoked about it. Sirius going to go find her (AND THEN CARRYING HER BACK TO THE COMMON ROOM OH MY GOD) was the cutest thing ever and they're gonna be such a power couple that I won't even be able to handle it.

So great job! Super excited for the next chapter!

10/10

~Jess :D

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Wonderful chapter! I can imagine writing Quidditch scenes to be hard, but you did a really great job with it! I loved the Hufflepuff commentator by the way - very funny! AND GRYFFINDOR WON WOO!!! So happy about that! That'll show stupid Henry; his comment way so out of line, by the way. I can't wait for her to break things off with him and then go for Sirius because they are seriously (pun intended) perfect for each other - that moment they had together in the beginning was just perfect and asdfghjkl love them.

Wonderful, wonderful, wonderful chapter! And onto the next one!

10/10

~Jess :D

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really great story! Keep at it :)

Author's Response: Thanks! I'll be putting the next chapter in the queue soon, so keep an eye out! Thanks again for the review! I'm really glad you're enjoying the story. ^_^

- A. :)

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OMG I LOVE THIS.
you are amazing and i love the story.
keep at it!

Author's Response: *Yes! Another one converted!* :P

But in all seriousness, thank you! Haha. I'm glad you like it, and I'll try and update soon.

Thanks for the review!
- A. :)

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