Dom is in the kitchen in his underpants? I think that Lorcan should have jumped him right then and there personally.
I don't want them fighting even though they've now made up, I don't want them to ever be angry at each other and just be in love. Well Dom needs to fall in love first and then they can be in love forever!
I hope that Lorcan isn't in too much pain with his leg, Dragons are definately dangerous.
I really want Lorcan to tell Dom how he feels, but I can be patient and wait :D
Another wonderful chapter my lovely! :D

Author's Response: He's in his underwear! Haha, I totally think Lorcan should have as well. But he's stubborn and doesn't want to want his friend, so he's being silly now. Not thinking straight. *shakes head at Lorcan*

Yeah, Dom really needs to get his head screwed on right. He's messing things up with this whole getting married lark. ;)

Unfortunately, Lorcan needs a healer. But he'll be okay. :)

Be patient. It'll be a while...

Thanks for reviewing.

Sam.

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Hey the wedding is two days before my birthday! :D
I don't know if I say this enough but I do love your Hugo's all of them. And all of your characters, you have so many and yet they're all so different from each other, it's amazing how you accomplish that, must be why you're so fantastic! :D
This was a very good start, poor Lorcan having to deal with Dom being married soon and his own feelings for Dom. No wonder he got drunk. Although when Dom took him home and then the whole situation with the undressing I thought for sure something was going to happen between the two of them.
I hope that they kiss soon! It's only chapter one and I'm already impatient hehe :D Love this!

Author's Response: Is it? Really? Wow. A double celebration... If he goes through with it, of course... ;)

Haha. I'm glad you like my Hugo. There are little changes each time, depending on the story, but he's mostly the same in each one, especially his personality. And that's what's so awesome about him. :P

Yep. Poor Lorcan. It's no wonder he's drinking really. Embrace the impatience... No, maybe have a little. It'll be a while... *hides*

Thanks for reviewing!

Sam.

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I realized that I mixed up your character names (Lorcan/Lysander) in the last chapter and now I feel like an idiot.

Anyway, this is definitely what I was hoping to get after the first chapter. Lorcan is a well-rounded character, and his relationship with Dominique is a many-tiered, three-dimensional one. Your characters are definitely a strong point of the story, because they seem very human and interact in human ways. Even their dialogue seems natural.

Again, I wouldn't have minded a bit more description of the settings in this chapter. There's no desperate need for it, though. I was so caught up in Lorcan that I didn't really mind. :)

Another great chapter, can't wait to see where this goes!
10/10
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I'm so glad this review battle thing is going on because it introduces me to stories like this! I love this idea. Throwing in an LGBT character into the next-gen mix really brings the whole Potter universe up to the next level.

Lysander's situation is definitely interesting/engaging, and he's already a sympathetic character, because he's got so much going on in his head but he reigns it in, and doesn't really let people come close. I like Hugo and Teddy, too.

I think that one thing you could do with this chapter is go deeper. First off, with some more description to ground readers in the setting of the chapter. Second, with more detail about the individual characters, their personalities, and their connections to Lysander. Like I said, I really like Hugo, Teddy, Dom, and Lorcan - but at the moment their personalities aren't entirely distinguishable.

Great start! Off to the next chapter.
10/10
Faux

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YAY For Male Dom! As always thinking Dom was a man, I had no problems with the sudden switch (I haven't even read a story with female Dom so...). I need more M-Dom. ^^ Did that just sound like a very cool superhero? M-Dom! And F-Dom, but F-Dom fails all the time and M-Dom cleans up the mess!

Yes, yes, moving on again. Lorcan... I love Lorcan. More than I love Lysander - it's like F&G, F is cooler than G... for some reason no one understands. I always thought of Lorcan as the more shy, calm one with Lys being overly like Luna...

Drunk, fine, not OK. (I recommend writing OK as Okay or Ok though), you're Lorcan has a bit of mood shifts.. or reaction shifts. No one who throws up can be that 'fine' whilst being drunk... That's just mainly insane. (did that sound oddly mean? I try to make your day with reviews and I go mean!).

But! I need more M-Don/Lorcy! ^^

Trick or treat!
xOSB

Author's Response: Yay for male Dom! I love male Dom! I can't imagine female Dom! That will be his superhero name from now on. LOL.

*Gasp* I don't know. I can't choose between the twins. I love them both! But I've always figured Lorcan more outgoing than Lysander, who is the baby, the yuongest twin in my head. And that is how it's going to stay. :D

He's not having the best of days, Kath. He's not fine. He told Teddy he wasn't fine. When he tells Dom he's "drunk but fine" he means he's okay (better? :P) to get undressed by himself.

You shall have more M-Dom/Lorcy very soon!

Sam.

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Hey!
Whey another new story! And the beginning sounds great! I'm hoping for other chapters!
The idea of dom getting married and Lorcan loving him is something I never considered but I like it nonetheless!

Author's Response: Hey!
Yes, a new chapter will be on its way soon. I'm glad you like the idea. :)

Sam.

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This is great!

I love how you made Dom a male, I haven't read a story with that besides this one. At first I was a little confused but then once I understood what was happening, I loved it!!!
pleeease continue and update soon!

Author's Response: Thank you! I'll update as soon as I can! :)

Sam.

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Hey Sam, its me for your challenge reveiw!
And I really liked this! It was hard at first to adgust to Dom being a guy (as I read loads of fic's where Dom is a girl) but apart from that, this was awesome! I like how you wrote this, its awesoem! The characters are great too. A definate contender for the challenge!

Author's Response: Hey, Emma!

I've read a few fics were Dom is a girl, but Dom being a guy is SO easy for me to see. Dom's a girl in one of my stories, but he may have to be a guy in the rest. I just can't see him a girl anymore!

I'm glad you like it!

Sam.

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