love it. Honestly, this is different, and refreshing, and more over- real. So yeah, love it, love you, and yup:) bye!
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Honestly, I adore this so much. Your writing style is incredible and you really portray Piper interestingly; finding the perfect balance between angsty teenager and responsible adult. Piper is a fantastic character; you've developed her perfectly, so that she's both relatable and different.
I read the first chapters really quickly, and I'm looking forward to the next (: Report Review
It was the title that drew me in. Stagger. There are some words that just give a feeling. Stagger is one of them. This was a hooking read. No doubt. I read all four chapters and I enjoyed it all. I love how much you include Piper's life at home. Some stories graze over it to a point where I wouldn't know if the main character is an orphan a muggleborn or what, and that's alright s'well, but I do love how you worked it in. If it hadn't been for the family, I don't think I would have liked Piper. Sullen, angsty, angry at the world - just like any other angsty teenager. Nothing interesting. But how connected she is to her family, how affectionate she can be with her siblings; that I love.
I love the way you write. It's very direct and deliberate. You describe things just enough to let me know thet yes, Hogwarts is a bunch of mismatched stones, but it also leaves enough lacking to let our own imaginations fill it in. Fortunately, in the fandom, we already have a good idea with the help of the books and movies. Your wording is lovely. I just love how you say things. Rose - I like Rose but don't in the same time. What she's doing to herself - well, no, clearly don't like.
This was brilliant to read. I hope you keep on writing! c:Author's Response: Ee this review has made my day! Thank you so much! You're absolutely lovely. Piper's a little ball of hatred isn't she?! Ooo I don't know what to say I'm all giddy, thank you so much for the lovely review, you're amazing! Report Review
I think this can become a great story! I like it because it shows Hogwarts in a completely different way! Good job, and please keep updating!
InesAuthor's Response: Thank you so much! I was trying to go for the alternative sort of angle from someone with a warper perspective, so glad you like it! :) Report Review
So, you requested a review from me AGES ago, and I'm just now getting to it...sorry...
Okay, so: this is going in my favorites in a couple of minutes. I adore it. I think you're doing brilliantly. Really, it's one of the best I've read in a while.
I love the characterization and interaction between all the characters. The only thing I'm having a bit of trouble with is a couple of aspects of Piper's character: namely, if she's got to be so responsible at home, why does she get in trouble at school? And why would she smoke? Knowing she doesn't have much money and she should stay healthy for the kids.
You know what I mean?
Okay though, moving on: I love all the names you've chosen. They sound like they would all be in a family together.
It's a bit of a predictable plotline, at least, I've seen something similar to it before, but I think you're taking a new spin on it. I find it really interesting that Piper doesn't like being a witch, yet she agrees to go to school. Weird...
And why aren't the other siblings at Hogwarts yet? Are they not magical? Hmmm...
I think this is making out to be a really good story. Your writing is really quite good. I like it a lot. Well done! Feel free to come back to request again if you write more!
--Emily (DarkRose on the forums)Author's Response: Well Piper's family life is tentative, hopefully more can be seen later on. No, her siblings aren't magical, but with good reason! I think her trouble in school is due to her family, mainly; a reflecting that they need her and she resents this, but she resents going to school more, hates the restriction and the magical world entirely. Thank you so much for the lovely review! :) Report Review
absolutely love it!!! Keep up the super writing!!Author's Response: thank you! Report Review
this is really impressive, especially for an OC story, keep it up. :)Author's Response: thank you so much! Report Review
It's good :) Interested to read more.Author's Response: thank you! Report Review
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