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Review #1, by Crescent Moon  epilogue

14th January 2016:
I have loved this story so much. You've had me laughing or crying and sometimes both the whole way through.
You're a fantastic writer. Your characters are superb, their personalities just seeped through words and became so real, I love them all. And your plot was so beautiful and original, I loved the whole premise and I'm really having to force myself to write this review rather than going straight to read the sequel. You've had me so addicted to this story, I was up till the early hours this morning reading and then only stopped due to the fact that my eyes refused to stay open for any longer.
I really can't wait to see how James and Carla's life progresses. I can't wait any longer, I'm off to read Derailed.
Words can not describe how amazing you, and this story, are.

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Review #2, by ishi epilogue

10th October 2015:
I LOVE it. Need to read derailed!

Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing, I hope you check out Derailed! :)

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Review #3, by twitchy_piigeons sixty-three

9th October 2015:
I don't think it's the retiring that got me this chapter, but rather Fiona. He took her out of the closet, so does this mean she was already dead?? Because otherwise that's just messed up.

Author's Response: No need to worry, Fiona is James' Firebolt! Although I won't deny that it is a little bit heartbreaking that he burns his broomstick. But hopefully not quite so messed up. :)

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Review #4, by rosiful epilogue

25th September 2015:
I just spent the last two days reading this entire story from the start. This was such an amazing story to read! I loved it!!
And the amount of detail you went into about Quidditch, their individual games and tactics was just incredible. I almost forgot that Quidditch is not actually a real sport... I really wish it was though!

I was a bit put out that James gave up Quidditch, but I saw it coming and totally understand your reasoning! He grew up so much in this fic, that I could clearly see that the lime light wasn't exactly for him and the Hogwart's position would be perfect... but I still want him to keep playing for the Falcons! Mainly because their group and team spirit is so amazing!
I really, really love how you also developed all you side characters. There were so many that at times I was a little confused, but you managed to make them all so unique and interesting! My favourite was probably Lily. She's just amazing!

I could probably blabber on forever about how much I really enjoyed this story, but I'm too excited to read the sequel!!

Thank you for such a wonderful story, I really loved reading it!


Author's Response: Wow, thanks for reading, I'm amazed you did it all in two days!

Ah, the Quidditch, I did end up getting incredibly absorbed in it all, to the point where I almost ended up sick of it! In my mind it is a very real sport. And I honestly found it heartbreaking to have James give it up - I like what he goes on to do, but it's a shame to not have him playing for England and the Falcons any more. It was definitely the right decision for him to make though.

Oh Lily. I absolutely adore her. I know so much of her backstory that I could probably write a separate fic just on her. Maybe I will... Who knows!

Thanks so much for reading and reviewing!

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Review #5, by Juliette one

22nd September 2015:
Really like this story, hope there's more of Al soon :)

Author's Response: Glad you like, thanks for reviewing! :)

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Review #6, by The Riddle House two

16th September 2015:
I love the way you write the Potter-Weasley clan. This really seems like the next generation of the family we came to know and love in the series. And even though Brie is an OC I already love her and am rooting for her and Freddie! Your language use is very clean, and your style is entertaining and well-written. James is somehow both annoying and charming, but I have a feeling he's going to grow up a lot over the course of this fic. Awesome start, and I can't wait to read more. :)

Author's Response: I really do adore writing the Weasleys, so I'm glad you like them in Rails! :) Brigid is one of my absolute favourites as well. Annoying but charming definitely sums up James! Thanks for reviewing :)

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Review #7, by Sweetsandstoryz epilogue

5th August 2015:
Hey, can i just say how much i enjoyed reading this fic - seriously i was crying with James when he was depressed and was genuinely happy when things went well for him. It was amazingly writtrn and the characters were PERFECTION!

Author's Response: So glad you enjoyed Rails! Thanks for reviewing :)

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Review #8, by am0rtentia93 one

12th July 2015:
I'm very late to the party as I just started reading this and you already have the sequel up but I just needed to drop you a very enthusiastic BRAVO for the first chapter. As a humor writer myself, I can only hope to make even my least appealing characters as funny, charming, and relatable as you have done so with James. There is already so much backstory and so many characters, and you still manage to bring the laughs in a way that does not seem forced at all. I cannot wait to keep reading!

Author's Response: Thanks very much for your review! I put a lot of effort into trying to make the first chapter as interesting as possible, it's good to know you enjoyed it! :)

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Review #9, by Aleine sixteen

18th June 2015:
I had an issue with a sentence. You've indicated that magical elements and muggle elements are different. I'm not sure if you meant something else by the word "element", instead of referring to the elements of the periodic table, which are universal.

If you were indicating that the magical world has different elements, I'd love to see you explain it. I can't quite wrap my head around it, seeing as how both the universes are one and the same...

I guess I'll read ahead and see :)

Author's Response: So I've just read over this chapter again ... and I don't actually know what I meant by that part! I wrote this chapter a good few years ago now. I THINK what I was trying to get at was that while in chemistry you have the periodic table, and all the elements within that with their own characteristics, the wizarding world doesn't seem to know about them at all; they seem to have a totally different way of using materials. I mean, they can Conjure up pretty much anything, they don't need to know about atomic construction etc etc. I THINK that's where I was headed with this! Thanks for reviewing :)

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Review #10, by Aleine thirteen

11th June 2015:
Oh dear... Lily a Squib... Oh my God... I cannot believe it!!


Your award is truly deserved...

Author's Response: BAHAHA I love these kind of reviews! Thank you so much, it was ridiculously amazing winning the Dobby. Thanks for reviewing!

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Review #11, by Aleine nine

11th June 2015:
I loved the last bit... So touching...

Simply, amazing!

Author's Response: That was an emotional moment to write. Poor Harry. Thanks for reviewing :)

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Review #12, by Aleine seven

11th June 2015:
Hey!! Spoilers!!

I do want to know more about James-Harry not seeing eye-to-eye though.

Hopefully it'll come

Author's Response: The James/Harry issue will be addressed in due course, I hope it's satisfying :)

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Review #13, by Aleine five

10th June 2015:
I still can't pronounce the Muggle's name properly.

You know, Brie is fast becoming my favourite character. You've done an excellent job with her.

The Muggle's portrayal is superb. Not just as a Muggle, but also as a girl. Her actions and reactions are so realistic, and life-like.

You've won the Dobby for the best plot twist...

You better not hurt Brie...

(Too much game of Thrones)

Author's Response: Thank you for the Brie love! She is one of my personal favourites :) Aha no need to worry, nothing Game of Thrones-esque in this! Thanks for reviewing :)

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Review #14, by Aleine four

10th June 2015:
I seriously thought that the girl he ends up liking is shy and innocent...


Author's Response: Haha, definitely not! :)

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Review #15, by Aleine three

10th June 2015:
"Women" I like how it ends.

I should say though, the repetitive reference to James' character as a player is putting me off.

Probably because I didn't expect him to be so... Bad :/

I'll have to read and see how it sits with me

Author's Response: Hopefully James' character will become clear in time. He's certainly not a bad person, he just has flaws. As do all of us. :) Thanks for reviewing!

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Review #16, by Aleine two

10th June 2015:
I got really confused about the Murph thing. And I don't know if the "close shave" is going to be explained or if I missed it...

Oh well. I'll know soon enough

Author's Response: All will be revealed in due course... as you now know! :)

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Review #17, by Aleine one

10th June 2015:
Wow... This is amazing. It's so lifelike and real. I wasn't a Next Gen fan to begin with, but I am now.

I did dislike the fact that there were so many rolling-eyes, but that slipped away really fast. The fact is that the Briticism in this story is amazingly done.

Need to keep reading. Will review properly when I'm done with the entire thing.

You're amazing.

Author's Response: Thanks for your comment about all the eye rolling - I tend to get quite repetitive when it comes to physical description! Glad you're enjoying, thanks for reviewing!

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Review #18, by DancingMooncalf epilogue

29th May 2015:
I'm terribly sorry to be one of those readers that can't wait the tome to type a review before contineuing the next chapter, but i am and thats why you only hear from me now. In all honesty i lost a lot of good sleeping hours this week because i couldn't quit reading. I was impressed in every way by thus story. The plot blew my mind. I thought it was predictable but than it wasn't and than i picked up on it again thinking it could see a few chapters ahead and things change again. I did however predict very shortly after the big breakdown that james was going to retire to start teaching. i was gkad to know at least one think that was right.
Something else that blew my mind was the incredible insight in quidditch. How do you know those thinks about set up en point and matches and stuff? You must have done sone really good research!! Quite impressive indeed.
but the most mindblowing aspect of the story is the fact that it made my belief in magic as a real thing again for a bit. Much like when i was younger and reading harry potter for the first time. Those thoughts of 'Maybe its bit even that strange a thing to assume a hidden society exsist around us'. Not many fanfics have managed to get me to think in that way again. like i said the feeling i got when i first read harry potter. The feeling of a new an hidden world opening its doors, it being more than just a story. Maybe thats just the euphoria of the last few chapters speaking, but i really did feel it throughout the story.
i want to say thank you for giving me so many enjoyable hours of reading. I laughed a lot, the sarcasm, the sass, the ridiculous situation here and there. I was lovely. I got slightly depressed reading James' breakdown bit. I just wanted to be able tp hug him you know. I think said out loud that yelling at him wouldn't help because my mom looked really weird at me after that. I couldn't put my phone(my mobile fanfic reading device, more like) down to make dinner or eat it... peole must think me a social media junky woth all the time i spend with my phone this week. How wrong they are.
anyway... i'm a huge fan of james an carloota now and will definitely read the sequel to!!
Thanks again for this awsome piece of literature and you'll probably hear from me again some time!
Xxx Maya

Author's Response: No need to apologise! I know the feeling of needing to read the next chapter, and besides I'm terrible at REPLYING to reviews, which is definitely a far bigger sin. :)

I think I signposted James taking the teaching job, not necessarily VERY blatantly, but certainly enough so that when it happened, people weren't TOO surprised. The only deterrent from that idea was that to take the teaching job he had to retire from Quidditch completely, which was a pretty big call for James to make. I still think it was the right move for him though, and you'll see in Derailed that he's happy with his life.

Oh, the Quidditch. I won't lie, I totally immersed myself into Quidditch to the point where I was determined it was a real sport and I can't stand to think about having to write another match now. I've well and truly put myself off, ha.

Hey, magic is totally real ;) On a serious note, this review has made me so happy, I'm so glad that Rails has made you feel that way, it's the best kind of compliment.

Thank you so much for this wonderful review, I hope you go on to check out the sequel!

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Review #19, by LittleMissAutumn epilogue

30th April 2015:
Oh my gosh, I just sat back and read your entire story! It took all day but it was worth every minute of it. It's so creative, original, and I was on an emotional roller coaster the whole time. From James' s**t show to his glory win at the World Cup, I was knawing my fingers!

You are an incredible writer and I really hope you consider writing (perhaps outside of fanfiction if you have not already) as a personal career choice because you are fantastic.

Bravo. Solid 10/10.

Author's Response: Ha, s**t show is one way to describe James' troubles! Thanks so much for reading, I'm really glad you enjoyed it! And thanks for reviewing. :)

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Review #20, by Flying mandarin epilogue

5th April 2015:
Phiew, I've been reading this story nonstop for the past 48 hours, and now I've reached the end. I don't really have words for this story except that I'm very impressed. It might be because of the late hour or the fact that I've been reading with virtually no pause but I find it hard to find the words to describe the way I feel about this story. Deep love would be most accurate I think! It was so well put together, with as much humor as character depth and intrigue. I really like that all the characters were real, they all had flaws and insecurities and they made sense.
The fact that teaching is such an important factor in this story is really really cool and I thank you for making James a teacher and not just a big-headed young man.

Congratulations on the Dobby, it was well deserved

Author's Response: Wow! Thanks so much for reading, especially in such a short time span! I really enjoyed writing this fic so I'm so glad you enjoyed reading it. :) Thanks for the lovely review!

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Review #21, by TidalDragon eight

5th March 2015:
Well, well - the intrigue continues when it comes to the relationship between James and Harry. It really makes me wonder what happened and when or what's going on between them that James doesn't even like to be around him.

Lily continues to be an independent spitfire too of course, and so it's little surprise she'd like Carlotta, who has more than her fair share of spunk and attitude as well. James would probably do well to see that they don't ever join forces and gang up on him - that could get ugly and FAST.

I have to turn in for the moment, but I'm looking forward to picking up where I've left off soon!

Author's Response: The Harry/James relationship issue is a slow-burning one, and one which I hope is realistic when it finally comes to light.

Lily IS one hell of a character, definitely her mother's daughter. And - dangerously for James - similar in a number of ways to Carlotta. He'll definitely need to keep an eye out. :) Thanks for reviewing!

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Review #22, by TidalDragon seven

5th March 2015:
Chopping the season in half?! That's downright criminal! I suppose that will give plenty more time for Carlotta and James's connection to blossom. She's certainly showing herself to be much more than just a bartender though, with the cooking skills and the helping take care of James. I wonder though, is she really going to prove that caring of a soul? I hope so - otherwise it seems awful quick for her to be cooking a freezer full of meals for him.

At any rate, I'm looking forward with interest to the next chapter - it's surprising how fast I'm able to read and enjoy this piece - KUDOS.

Author's Response: There's definitely more to Carlotta than first meets the eye. :) Thanks for reviewing!

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Review #23, by TidalDragon six

5th March 2015:
Despite the inclusion of the more drinking, partying, and innuendo this chapter was something of a change of pace in one major regard - the reactions of James's friends and family to the situation with Carlotta. Now, I'll have to confess straight out that I'm more on James's side. Statute of Secrecy or not, there really doesn't seem to be a problem with dating a muggle for witches and wizards. It's clear that plenty have done it over the years to no ill-effects. While I grant you that none may have been as famous as James, and accordingly, perhaps not as vulnerable (at least financially, but perhaps in additional ways), I don't really see what the big deal is.

I was right before though - smitten is definitely correct. James is all about Carlotta and it's nice to see that it appears to be partially for the right reasons - a matching sensor of humor, desire for adventure, and lack of fear when it comes to standing up to or interacting with him.

Well done!

Author's Response: This fic made me think about the Statute of Secrecy more than ever before - and it really does put witches and wizards who get involved with Muggles into a terribly difficult position. The two examples that come to mind off the top of my head are McGonagall's parents and - more recently - Seamus' parents; it seems as though the magical parent doesn't even tell their muggle spouse about magic until they simply can't put it off any more. Oddly secretive when they've committed to marriage with said muggle, and also it puts the muggle in a very awkward situation when it emerges that their magical spouse has kept such an integral secret from them for so long. In fact it makes you wonder how one can keep a magical lifestyle secret for so long...

Anyway, ramble over. I guess society is very different now, with marriages far less common, and so it's even MORE awkward for a magical person to decide at what point a relationship IS the real deal and the secret can be shared. At this point in time, James certainly isn't thinking about settling down with this girl, but it's difficult to keep your entire lifestyle a secret. And I would imagine the big deal is to do with whether you can trust said Muggle to keep the wizarding world secret? And that's AFTER you've overcome the situation of whether your Muggle has taken the news well. If it ends the relationship, I'd imagine there's a risk that said Muggle could talk - but then, as the Muggle Prime Minister in HBP mused, who'd believe them?

I just rambled even more. WHOOPS. Thanks for reviewing!

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Review #24, by TidalDragon five

5th March 2015:
Carlotta has definitely had an impact on James now. It's interesting to see him at the end of this chapter sliding into awkwardness more typical of "lesser beings." To her credit she doesn't call him out on the change with even a raised eyebrow though.

It was also interesting to see that he ISN'T entirely self-centered. Between trying to help Brigid and his detailed memory of every Weasley jumper, it seems like James is actually more "decent" (to use the word he used to describe Carlotta) than he wants to let on. Is he perhaps hiding his true self for his career or is he just changing?

I can't wait to see how he develops!

Author's Response: James has got himself into a bit of a situation here - he finds Carlotta a breath of fresh air, which is very at odds with his usual outlook on women. Bless him.

And you're right, he's not all that self-centered at all. He can just be quite obtuse, and that makes him come across as not caring about other people. Development is (hopefully) oncoming in leaps and bounds.

Thanks for reviewing!

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Review #25, by TidalDragon four

5th March 2015:
What's really driven this story for me so far are the dynamics. You've done interesting things with each that you've addressed so far and that DEFINITELY carried on with James and Ginny and the references to issues between James and Harry that first appeared in at the end of the chapter with Lily's birthday. I think what I enjoyed about the James and Ginny dynamic (aside from you putting the spunk in Ginny's character that is so often lacking) is their bond over Quidditch and the fact that she knows her son like an open book and tells him how it is. Great.

You also created quite a personality for Carlotta. I'm interested to see how she develops throughout the piece, especially with James seeming to be -gasp- starting to get smitten.

Author's Response: Book!Ginny is one of my biggest peeves with the books. I never used to be a Harry/Ginny fan, but reading other fanfics has actually led me to see the character who JK INTENDED to create with Ginny, as opposed to the character who we actually saw - not that she necessarily got the portrayal WRONG, but that I don't think we saw ENOUGH of Ginny (and her spunk in particular) until she was suddenly shoved in our faces in HBP. But I digress. The point is, my headcanon of Ginny is splurged all over Rails, and her moments with James remain some of my favourite moments to write. Thanks for reviewing!

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