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Review #1, by Toni M. Chapter 19

8th May 2016:
Dear Little Miss Liz Potter,
After every chapter you ask for a review, however I like to only read complete works so a review per chapter seems to be redundant. Now for the comments, we need to feel that we will get an answer by the time you say good bye to the story, even if there will be a sequel. Now if you want to create an ongoing story arch, you should complete the first story, (the leading idea or premise) about a chapter before the main story ends, then if you decide to not write the sequel no harm done, story complete. What you did with “Exchange” was like ordering a Chinese dinner and only getting the white rice, and having to come back another day for the rest of the meal, your still hungry, then by not completing “Playing Hide And Seek” I’m still hungry. A second story arch could be suggested in the last chapter or epilog, now in some sections the characters are very clearly defined, in others they seem to overlap or merge into indefinability. As I said, would have liked to see more definition of character, more background for the plot. Overall I enjoyed story, I liked most of the descriptions of locations, could really imagine myself on that hillside with Al & Del. If you would like a story that has a sequel that ends and begins at the same time check out in this fan fiction “My Not So Imaginary Friend” by ‘The Quiet Girl’. It has a beginning, middle, and end, then lays the ground work for the sequel. The first book takes place in the Marauders time, the Second part takes place in Harry Potter’s time. Hopefully “Hide and Seek” gets finished, because the story deserves a true completion. I will be checking on it around June 30, 2016. If not updated by then I will have to consider the story abandoned.
Keep up the good work, best wishes, Toni M.

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Review #2, by sorry Chapter 19

1st June 2014:
wow. this is, unbelieveable.
like literally unbelieveable. this would never happen. and this is coming from an avid reader of a fanfiction based off a story wher emagic is real.
OK i know its been a while since u wrote this and idk if you still read the reviews, but i have a few questions i need to ask:
1) how on earth could they not recognise her? I mean, one of them is her flipping cousin, she has the same hair colour, didn't magically change her appearance at all, and no one could recognise her. come on even hannah montana put on a bloody wig. that just wasn't believeable to me.
2) does she not realise there's an UNBREAKABLE VOW ON HER HEAD?
3) no one cares athena POISONED a small child. speaking of; NO ONE CARED ABOUT DOM THREATENING PEOPLE WITH A GUN. NO ONE CARED ABOUT A GIRL NEARLY DYING OF HYPOTHERMIA? seriously people could go to jail for this stuff.
4) does the school know she's deandra? i don't mean albus or anything, but like mcgonagall or the staff.
this story had potential when i first started reading it, but you've really got to tone down the attempted murders and morbid situations (especially when involving the safety of second and first years)
im sorry if this sounded mean, but i really thought this story could've gone somewhere. you write well.

Author's Response: lmfao you're so right, looking back on this story it's so problematic. I was like 12 when i wrote the majority of it and I'm 16 now, so hopefully now that i have some inspiration to do some rewriting, i can fix this up. first thing i did was delete the gun thing and i'm definitely fixing the ridiculous stuff that i though was hilarious as a kid. thank you for constantly inspiring me to fix this story up

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Review #3, by greenbirds Chapter 19

29th January 2014:
i really tried to emphasize and relate to deandra/delilah and this whole story, but it's a bit too far-fetched. i don't understand how boys who tried killing her 3 years ago- boys who were family to her and turned on her when her parents died, destroyed the last thing she had of her murdered parents, embarrassed her, lied to her, mocked her, shut her out in the cold... they committed crimes onto her which could land them with many, many years in prison. vile, inhumane acts which could be compared to a psychopathic dictator at the least! there are many parallels i can draw between the four boys and i hate to say this but figures like hitler and stalin.
i don't understand how this girl can then love them "like brothers" a few years later. i don't understand how they could change so much, and then how they couldn't even mention deandra- as if she never existed! nobody, especially a unit of four, changes so quickly.
i think this story has major potential but you need to either make the torment and torture and almost MURDER of the protagonist less extreme, or make her toughen up. it's really difficult to relate to her, i'm sorry. bea xx

Author's Response: you do make a good point. looking back at what I wrote, what, a year and a half ago, it's far-fetched. keep in mind that the story is still being edited and does need some work. however, I will definitely use this. thanks so much for the criticism :)

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Review #4, by bubzi Chapter 11

3rd June 2013:
What? Are they back at Hogwarts for a dance or at the potter's family/ministry dance.
Cool plot but very disjointed

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Review #5, by WoodenFences Chapter 14

16th April 2013:
Please don't tell me that Aiden's gonna start dating Lauren! She's in second year! 5 WHOLE FRICKEN YEARS YOUNGER!!! I mean, I guess it would be alright if they were both fully-grown adults, but if they start dating now, then Aiden will take everything too damn fast and Lauren will end up without her virginity at 12. And none of us want that to happen.

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Review #6, by WoodenFences Chapter 2

16th April 2013:
Woah. UNBREAKABLE VOW? Don't you think that's a little extreme, Arianna!!! (P.S. Love this chap's quotes, also. THX!!!)

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Review #7, by WoodenFences Chapter 1

16th April 2013:
I seriously love that song. Is it lame that I sang the stanza... out loud... at midnight? oh well. You better love The Fray as much as I do... I'll look forward to more quotes in the next chapters!!! On a sadder and more depressing note, whoever this is about, she has got it REALLY bad.

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Review #8, by grenoiue Chapter 4

11th April 2013:
I actually want to marry Hugo. He is trés l'epic.

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Review #9, by Zyii Chapter 2

5th March 2013:
Good news, I still liked it :) I promise my reviews will get better, I'm super tired right now (not a good excuse I know) You'll probs get inundated with better reviews tomorrow (: ~Zyii

Author's Response: Oh that's okay, I'm just glad you're reading!

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Review #10, by Zyii Chapter 1

5th March 2013:
Ooo I like it :) ~Zyii

Author's Response: Thanks! :)

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Review #11, by HP Chapter 16

12th December 2012:
How old is Aiden again? His relationship with Lauren is starting to sound a little perverted...

Author's Response: This story is going through major updates, once I realized how many plot holes there were. This is one of them, I realized I wasn't making Lauren and Aidan's relationship sound like a sibling relationship like it was meant to be.

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Review #12, by Hannah Chapter 6

7th December 2012:
SEQUEL. duhh. you should make a.

Author's Response: :):):):):):):):):):):):):):)

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Review #13, by Merlie Chapter 8

6th December 2012:
Wait, is Arianna a werewolf? I just got the feeling... I dunno. Anyway, great story, probably my favorite fan-fiction yet. And I remember in the first chapter when she said she couldn't remember a big part of her life and I could relate. I can't remember anything. It scares me. A LOT. Though, I'm not reviewing on my account, I'm using my sister's. I'm actually "Pheonix Patronus"...
Awesome story! :)

Author's Response: Well Arianna is not a werewolf, although it's my fault that you think that. I'm going through updates right now, and changing the story around a bit, so the earlier chapters probably won't have continuity with the older ones. I promise to get that fixed as soon as possible, though. Thanks for the review, though. I appreciate them a lot :)

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Review #14, by tothoseinterested Chapter 1

29th November 2012:
Woman, what is up with your spacing?! And your paragraph indention's?!

Author's Response: Hmm haven't looked at Chapter 1 in a while... I'll check that out.

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Review #15, by DumbledoresArmyRocks Chapter 8

2nd September 2012:
That's SOOO sad! I dOnt know what I'd do without my parents. I no this is my 2nd review in one day. But I have no life in the summer. All I do is read, right, eat, sleep, and occasionally go out when mom forces me to change out of pj's and go for runs or walks.

Author's Response: Haha same with me during summer :) But I don't mind you leaving two reviews ;)


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Review #16, by DumbledoresArmyRocks Chapter 1

1st September 2012:
I started getting a bit teary eyed also! Really good so far! And I LOVE your name! Mine so awkward. And it makes me stand out, I don't like standing out that much! Well, really good story so far!!! :)

Author's Response: Oh, your name isn't awkward, it's cool :) No judging, we're all HP freaks here :P

Thanks for the review!

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Review #17, by Calypso_conceals Chapter 4

1st September 2012:

I really love your story, it's really well written. However, there are a couple of things I don't quite understand. In chapter 2 you say that Del is an amazing chaser, but in this chapter she says she doesn't play quidich and is a strategist, she also doesn't have good reflexes which a chaser would have. Also, in chapter 1 it says that Aiden is Del's cousin, so surely he would recognise her? Just a few thoughts. Otherwise I think it's really good. :)

Author's Response: First off, thanks for the review. Secondly, I am in the process of completely re editing this. I'm not too concerned about things not adding up right now, because I know they won't, especially with the Quidditch, which I changed. It'll hopefully be done as soon as possible, and then I can come back and clean any mistakes I made up. But thanks for pointing that out :)

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Review #18, by septumsempra Chapter 19

27th August 2012:
NO. What ending is that? I'm sad :( I wanted her to have a big explosion where she yells at Al and them about how they ruined her life and then I wanted to know why they treated her like that...

Author's Response: Then check out the sequel! It's called Playing Hide and Seek, and I promise, there will be a big explosion. I've been planning that since the beginning...

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Review #19, by septumsempra Chapter 16

27th August 2012:
He's like five years older than her... I don't object to age, but in a school setting I do... I hope they don't date. PS: Love the story, I hope Del doesn't die :P

Author's Response: Oh, they're not, don't worry. I'm rethinking how I wrote that... I think I'm going to write them as a brother/sister relationship as opposed to what it is now.

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Review #20, by bookworm_hermione Chapter 19

25th August 2012:
Thank Morgana there's a sequel! I'm curious, what will be the title of the sequel?
Well, i just hope you start part 2 soon. You just can't leave us readers hanging like that!

Author's Response: The sequel's title is Hiding, and chapter one is up right now! I'm really excited. I'll edit chapter 19 and stick the sequel's title in the AN, though :)

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Review #21, by BBWotter Chapter 19

25th August 2012:
Oh My Merlin, you can't just leave it at that! :( i mean its a good story, but i really hope you write a sequel! :) thanks for a pretty amazing story though!

Author's Response: Yes, there is a sequel :) Thanks!

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Review #22, by Ella_Hammond Chapter 19

25th August 2012:
You had better make a sequel!

Great job, I read the whole thing in like, two hours, it was that good. Work on the sequel NOW!

Author's Response: The sequel's out now! It's called Hiding. Thanks for the review!

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Review #23, by MiSTY_VoLPe Chapter 18

25th August 2012:
oh good chapter! keen to read more!

Author's Response: Thanks! :)

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Review #24, by sarah Chapter 19

24th August 2012:
please update soon i love this story so much and cannot wait to see what happens! 10/10

Author's Response: Thank you so much!

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Review #25, by LilyLunaLovegood Chapter 19

24th August 2012:
Ahhh update update update!

Author's Response: Exchange is finished but there's a sequel called Hiding that's up.

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