I'm intrigued by the story line. However, sometimes you slip and use 'me' instead of her.

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Amazing story! There were lots of mistakes in grammar, and a few in spelling, but over all, it was wonderful to read. Thanks for sharing!

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Wow. Beautiful story and wonderful characters

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Second time I read this story and I still loved every second of it! You're doing a great job. You are a great writer.

Author's Response: Thank you for the smile you put on my face. I needed it. You rock! Thank you for reading my story once, but twice is amazing. Wow! you are the bestest.

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I quite enjoyed your story. You had several plots going on with several twists that it was hard to predict what was going to happen. That's usually rare for fanfiction, so congratulations on achieving that. The one thing I have to stress is your spelling and grammar. That's the one thing that I think will hold you back. Presents are something you open on your birthday and presence is when someone is in the vicinity. Throughout the story you made a lot of spelling mistakes. I'm pretty sure you also meant the character Rodolphus who was in fact married to Bellatrix. Now that I've gotten that off my chest, I still wanted to say good job. Usually spelling mistakes make me leave a story, but the plot line made me stay and finish it. You have a lot of potential. If you are planning anymore stories, I would get someone to look over the spelling. Someone that will pick up on them. I remember reading in one chapter that you had someone look over them, but they didn't change some of the mistakes. I hope I wasn't too hard on you and good luck with future stories :).

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I really liked the story... All the characters were evolved and had substance.. Loved how Sirius has children... The black line did not end after all .. U should really get more reviews .. U deserve them.. Really liked justice..

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ok it's getting interesting and i like it...but you need to do something about those grammar mistakes 'cause they're awful...otherwise good story ;)

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That was one of the most amazing stories I have ever read and I really hope you write other stories! In fact, you have inspired me so much that I want to write my own Dramione fic! Thank you so much for giving me the courage to write my own story and, once again, an extraordinary story which I hope will be the first of many! Good Luck!

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I love this story!!!

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I like the emotion and the attraction between Draco and Hermione. The suspence is keeping me at bay with this story so that is a good thing. Now the only thing that is really bothering me are the spelling mistakes.
It is CRUCIO not CRUSIO, this may seem harsh but if you want to write a good story you should at least get the names of spells and characters right. Fix it please because you really do have a good story here and those mistakes are really distracting.

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Hey just so you now, It´s Rudolphus Lestrange, please correct that, it´s really annoying when names are misspelled. otherwise good story though!

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The mirror reminded me of Beauty and the Beast how the beast just said show me bell and she pops up :) And it wasnt' too cheesy

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This is a nice change from the other fic's I'v read lately. I like it. :)

Author's Response: Thanks. I wanted a story that was more than just a love story between our two favorite people. Thanks for digging it!

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I love it! It was so much drama, but all came together in the end!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for your kind words. Needed them. I afraid I went too side ways, but it did tie up ok in the end. It was so much fun to write and so happy you liked it.
~S

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Hey, i've been reading so far, and i really need to say that you HAVE to decide on whether you are writing in 1st person or third person, it is really confusing!
Else, i liek your plot and it is okay written :)

Author's Response: Thanks for pointing it out, I have been trying to fix the slip ups. Guess I need a fresh set of eyes for it. But, that a huge task to put on someone; it's like 42 chap and all. I will do best to fix them. Just hope it didn't ruin your experience.

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The story itself was good and in depth. It was just a bit hard sometimes to read around the horrible grammar mistakes and the HP fact misspellings. (I.E. Its Rodolphus Lestrange NOT Randolphs Le Strange and its Wizengamot NOT wizard gamut. That almost made me stop reading. You should at least take the time to please check Canon spellings at the very least.

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its a great storyline, and taking ron from good to evil is a great set up. the only thing that i would watch is you have a slight tendency to go back and forth from first person to third person. most of the time its when you go to hermione and draco being together. but i sincerely do love it! :)

Author's Response: It was fun playing with Ron's character and flipping the status-quo. The pov thing thought I fix but guess some slip by. Will do my best to fix them.

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Btw it's Rodolphus Lestrange not "Randolphus Le Strange". You really need to have someone beta this.

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Pretty good story so far. Anxious to see what Ron's up to. However I.noticed u mentioned at the top.of the chapter it had been revised/edited already and I think you should double.check it. The structure is completely centered and you tend to switch between third and first person alot, usually mid-sentence.

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This made me go from the verge of tears to sappy fangirl but not neckbreakingly abrupt

Author's Response: Great! that was my goal. Thank you so much for your kind words!
~S

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I'm trying to get into this but you keep writing women for woman and have some canon errors, like Draco's eyes, they aren't blue, they're grey.

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I like the story but I have had trouble reading it at some points you flicker between first and third anon points of view... For example: " She brought up her other hand to the other side of his face to try to make him turn his head to look at me."

Author's Response: Sorry about that. I am in the process of fixing all of that right now. This was my first story that I have ever wrote and I was learning my pov style. Thanks for checking it out and bring it to my attention.
~S

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Haft:
n.
A handle or hilt, especially the handle of a tool or weapon.
tr.v. haft·ed, haft·ing, hafts
To fit into or equip with a hilt or handle.

I think the word you're looking for is half.

Author's Response: Lol, thanks for the shout out, thought I fixed that, but will go back and check it. My auto correct kept changing it. But, anyway thanks for checking out my story and shoot that def my way. @]--
~S

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I loooved your story!! But one things been gnawing at the back of my mind... why didn't anybody tell sari that it was bellatrix who killed her father when she was all angry about molly killing bellatrix?

Author's Response: You get a cookie for finding that hole. It's not that I didn't think about it; but there was more of an emotional tie with her aunt than with her father and not to mention that she would have just thought it was slandered about her beloved aunt. Justice knew and so did the others; it's more like a choice for her not to believe. She didn't want to know kind of thing. Thanks though, thank you for choosing my fic. I am about to re-re-re-edit it to really clean it up. I will write something in to cover that aspect. Thank thanks
~S

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My favourite Dramione story so far. I loved the way each chapter has a mystery, the plot twists and turns and the surprises. And the ending was perfect. Nothing like a happy ending. Such a wonderful story. Keep writing! ^_^

Author's Response: Wow and thank you! Your kindness really means a lot to me. Writing this story was one of the best things that I have ever done; thank you for liking it; thank you for looking over some of the grammar mistakes. Thank you for everything. Potter forever!
xoxox
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Thanks for saying it was your fav Dramione. That really really means a lot.

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