Awesome, some of those things you mentioned in the story, like her mother meddling and stuff (and the last name problem. Always the last name... I feel your pain Sarina!), are so recognisable xd I'm from a turkish background, and yeah gotta admit I had some deja-vu moments there :D
btw, I love your story. You obviously know what you're doing while writing, you're main character is interesting and fun to read from and Al..
Love that guy..
No but seriously it's awesome how it's not a cliche, or only circling about her. She has a life and family which makes it much more interesting to read..
Have read a few very traumatizing stories recently so reading this one makes me go all happy :D
Oh, internet how I love you..
Anyways please upload soon!
greetings and mucho blessings x Report Review
I went through about five or six search pages, passing literally a hundred or so stories until I found this one. And I must say I'm happy that I did because this story is a gem!
I am a sucker for well thought out and written characters and yours take the cake. Sarina is such a fierce woman and despite the circumstance, you make her seem so relatable (probably because I'm Filipino and we are the same way in terms of meddling families, gossiping, and knowing everyone). And Al, ohmy. He's, for lack of a better/more creative word, sexy. He's pretty much the male counterpart of Sarina and I expect their relationship or whatever it is at this point to be nothing short of a fun ride. The rest of your characters, like Sarina's family or her group of friends, all seem to have mini stories of their own, which I like as well. I think it complements your main characters and the story in general, instead of overshadowing it.
And I think your writing deserves praise of its own. What I like best of your story is that everything seems natural. From the characters to the conversation to the situations, none of it seems forced or expected. No unnecessary details or pointless ramblings in conversation. Qualities that I have come to realize are getting more and more difficult to find as authors try to find some sort of quirky gimmick to attract readers to their story.
So yeah, in short, I think your writing is brilliant and wonderful and I cannot wait for the next chapter. Keep up the great work! :D Report Review
I've just found this story, and I already love it! Sarina and Al's interaction are great, and Sarina's family in general is really funny too x) I can't wait to read more~ c: Report Review
Seriously, I am so glad you updated. I had almost forgotten about this story and I wasn't sure if you would update. Anyway, I am super happy that Sarina and Al's relationship is progressing. I really like the Indian aspect of your story, probably because I'm Indian myself. I can't wait for the next chapter.
BTW I love the banner. Sonam seems like a good fit as Sarina and Andrew Garfield's a great Al. :) Report Review
Ah, I loved this chapter! I can't believe I didn't see this story before.
Anyway, Sarina's voice is humorous and refreshing to read. It's funny and well I usually don't mention things like this, but Shah's my last name! So I totally get the whole name-butchering thing - one of my friends used to call me Shaw high-speed internet! (a company in Canada)
Anyway, it's great. There is tons of backstory in the chapter, yet it is still entertaining and definitely makes me want to read on :) Great job! Report Review
I must say I feel like Al and Sarina's relationship moved a bit to fast, but I still love the chapter and the story. I am very happy you posted again, I was thinking you abandoned this story!Author's Response: It is moving a bit fast, but if you think about it, it's been more than six months since they first met. In my personal opinion, out of sight doesn't necessarily mean out of mind, and I feel like the attractions been there for a while. They are old enough to act on it.
Either way, I'm glad you loved it, and I'm glad you reviewed! I don't like abandoning stories, I was just waiting for some inspiration. And here it was!
Loved this chapter!!
THEY KISSED!! Yes!! :D
I love everyone's reactions to them.
I can't wait to see what's going to happen next, please update as soon as you can.Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it! (:
Haha, yes they did. I'm trying to make it as realistic as possible. Look out for an update within the next ten days! Report Review
I was so excited to see that you updated, I thought this story was abandonned, but I still favourited it.
I like how Sarina is so logical, analytical (because she is scared), and how Al seems her counterpart, flirty, smart, funny and laidback.
I'm glad to see that Al knew who she was, since I think only an idiot wouldn't have known ;)
I love how they had their first kiss, like after Sarina confessed that she wanted to kiss him, I squealed! :D
They both are 25 and now looking for serious life partners, not just a fling. That's why Sarina is so careful about her name :')
I hope the next update doesn't take as long as before ;)Author's Response: I'm glad! And for a while, I was going to just leave it, but I was suddenly inspired, and now I'm glad I didn't abandon it.
I'm glad you caught that! I want to show the different aspects of their relationship, and that should be seen soon.
And I figured, hey, they're 25 and the story is about them falling in love. I don't really want to drag it out.
Thanks for your review! And no, I don't think the next update will take as long. Report Review
loving it! please update soon!Author's Response: Yay, thanks. I am going to try my best. Next chapter should be in the queue before the 23rd! Report Review
love this! please update soon!Author's Response: I have the next chapter planned, so hopefully it won't take me another nine months to update.
Sorry for the long wait; I'm glad you liked it. Report Review
First off, my last name is Shah. (coincidental, much?)
Second, I speak Gujarati.(creepy. I think.)
Third, I seriously love this. It's really a great storyline. And your Indian reference for the whole "we can our own music" was funny. And I love Al. A lot.Author's Response: Hahah, that is weird. Then again, it's a pretty common last name. I speak Gujurati, too. That's why it's so easy to write.
Aw, thank you, that makes me glad! (: Yeah, KKHH is, obviously, one of my favorite movies, as cliche as it may be.
(: Al is based off of someone I know, so I'm trying to make him flawed and real, as opposed to someone who is Mr. Perfect. I hope that you continue to like him. Report Review
Great chapter. Update soon please 9/10 : )Author's Response: updating now (: Report Review
This chapter made me laugh 9/10 : )Author's Response: thank you Report Review
Great chapter!! 9/10 : )Author's Response: thank you! Report Review
Interesting. I liked it 9/10 : )Author's Response: thank you (: Report Review
Yeh story bahut hi cute hai :)Author's Response: ahah mujhe yeh dekh ke bahut achcha laga. Report Review
The thing about this fanfiction is that i can read it again and again, because it's so amazing. But it's wayyy to short :/ so, if you would like to make a girl really happy, I do belive that another chapter of this story would be a wonderful present ;)Author's Response: Oh, wow, that is quite the compliment!
Another chapter is on it's way!
I love this story so much!!!
It's so awesome :) And so good for your first fan fiction (Well, it's the first one on your page. So, if it is your first one, it's amazing, and if it's not, it's STILL amazing!)
Why won't you update? I'm desperate!!Author's Response: Aw thank you! It's not my first fanfiction, but it is my first in this fandom. I'm glad you like it.
Sorry, school got in the way! But the next chapter is in the queue. Report Review
Yes! This is amazing! An Indian people based Harry Potter fanfic written by a person who actually knows what it is like to be Indian! I never thought I'd see the day!
56757653281749832749839847329748764783/10Author's Response: I KNOW RIGHT. Very few of these floating around.
Please do update this soon, I'm just in love with it! XOAuthor's Response: ahahah thank youu!
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OMG! I love your story! Please update soon!
10/10Author's Response: thanks for reviewing! [: Report Review
update soon!! can't wait to see what happens in the next chapter! really good and i love how the main character is a different race, compared to other stories where the lead is always some one white!Author's Response: yeup! i'm glad you like it.
thanks for reviewing! (: Report Review
haha. indian people do know each other.
i do something, the next time i go to an indian party, "oh, i heard about you doing suchandsuch. good job! I hear your taking 6 AP classes... etc, etc"
my parents: "why did you get a 95 on this assignment? when i was your age i used to get 110% on every assignment and wake up at 4 am to study. that's how i got into IIT, and the other kids who spent their time playing cricket and sleeping didnt"
ahhh... indian people...
I love your story! very accurate, one thing tho... me, and most other indian people i know call older sisters didi, not di.
maybe you, or your friends/family do though.
AlexAuthor's Response: ...the amount of times that I've heard IIT stories. Honestly. Ugh. But yeah, I've only taken 8 AP classes in high school, so I fail at life. ]:
ahahah, I personally don't call my older cousin sisters anything but their name, but a lot of my 'white-washed' friends say, 'di' instead of 'didi', so that's what I went with. In essence, Sarina is white-washed, so yeah.
i really liked this chapter. heck, i like this whole story. i just think the idea of a vastly complex romance has been done to pieces, so i'm really glad your writing something so straightforward. it's also really good, soo...anyways, please update soon! that was a bit of a cliffy.Author's Response: thanks! yeah, I wanted to go against the gradient. (:
I'm glad you like it& thanks for reviewing. Report Review
I like your story - it's cute! Sarina is a bit prickly and very protective of her identity. I like her family and their relationships to each other. Mothers are mothers across most cultures. I am WAY old and my mother still comments on my clothes! I love the glimpse of Louis that we got - he's a favorite character of mine in Next Gen fictions. My family has a Chrome that has given us repeated problems lately, too. Thank you for the update and I look forward to reading more!Author's Response: Thanks! Yeah, she is. I think I'm trying to make it as realistic as possible, while trying to keep it humorous?
Yeah, my mom too. "You're wearing that? Really? Do I not buy you clothes?" kind of annoying, but at least I know she cares!
and yes, Louis is extremely pliable, so you know, lots of fun there! Report Review
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