I'm so glad Naomi got that friendly and that she finally said something about her feelings for Sirius.I'm sooo happy he actually never gave up on her...he should have guessed.I hope you'll update soon :)

Author's Response: Thank you for your lovely review!
Update coming soon!
Lots of love,
Kate

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Awesome, awesome chapter! I loved it! This now adds a bunch of layers to her relationship with Sirius. I wonder what people's reactions to her breakdown are going to be. Update again ASAP! 10/10! =]

Author's Response: Thank you so much for the lovely review!!
I am glad you liked it! Sirius and Naomi's relationship is a very complicated one; I am happy you like the way it is building up! =)
I'll update soon =)

Lots of love,
Kate

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Yay! James and Lily are together!! And Sirius and Naomi are friendly again! Awesome chapter, I can't wait for the party, update again soon please!! =]

Author's Response: Thank you for the lovely review!!! I will update soon!
Lots of love,
Kate

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I literally just sat down and read this entire story all the way through without stopping...I love it. I love Naomi and Sirius and I can't wait for them to finally actually fall in love and realize it. To be honest I am actually having difficulty verbalizing how much I love this story, so I'm just going to have to settle for saying I love it. Again. I will eagerly be waiting for the next chapter!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for your lovely review!
It has made my day!!!
I was planning on updating in two weeks but you have inspired me; a new chapter will be up this week!!
Lots of love,
Kate

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great chapter! Now that Sirius realizes it, they just have to communicate to each other! Of course that is gonna be hard cause theyre both rather proud. update again soon! =]

Author's Response: Thank you so much!!
I hope you enjoy what's coming next ;)
Lots of love,
Kate

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hey! I love this story partly because i can relate to Naomi. Please update soon??? an could you email me when you update so i can get on hpff? The address is lsmidt3@gmail
and please tell me that Naomi walks in and keeps hum from giving up.

Author's Response: I am so glad you like my story!
I will email you when the next update is, but just so you know, it will be around next week!!
Lots of love,
Kate

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I know it's been quite a while since I've been around, but I'm back, and thought I'd catch up with your story (:


After re-reading some of the older chapters, and then ending with this one, I can definately say that your writing has vastly improved. And I love this story!!

I'm not sure if it's just me, but I find that in the dialouge when you begin with the dash mark
- "_"
it sort of messes up the flow for me reading things. It's not super distracting, but I think you could do without that.

I rather love how Sirius and Naomi's relationship has progressed. I daresau I wasn't sure at first how I felt about her and James, but after reading this chapter, I'm a fan! I like how torn up they both seem to feel for betraying Lily and Sirius, even though Naomi is in denial about it. The sheer fact that she felt badly for James' guilt shows her depth as a character, as well as her change and growth. Her erasing his memory was truly a "nice girl" act, despite the fact that there wouldn't have been need for it if she wasn't such an ice queen.

I really, truly do love where this is going. I think I've said it before, and I'll say it again, but sometimes it does seem that Naomi is a little too perfect...Sure, she is an ice queen, vicious, and unable to anazlyze her own emotions and feelings, vehemently denying that she has any. In the emotional/mental aspect, I think she is spot on in character. Howeer, it seems to me like she has virtually no physical flaws. We all know she is beautiful and sexy, and can have any guy she wants. She is also smart, talented with a wand, and incredibly quick witted. She has money and dresses fashionably, and always manages to look amazing while doing everything. While her character is incredibly well developed, I would like to see her with some inherent physical "disability." I know part of her persona is to not do anything she isn't the best at, but often in life we can't avoid doing certain things, just because we don't want to. Even her tripping and stumbling over some equiptment after hearing what Sirius said about her would bring some much needed character rounding to her.

On the otherhand, that's really the only negative that comes to mind after catching up to the most recent chapters. I still love Naomi very much, and can't wait for an update!!

Author's Response: Oooh thank you so much for the review. It really makes my day!!
I am working very hard to try to improve my writing, I am so glad you think it is getting better =)

Aaah Naomi... what can I say? Yes, there are things she isn't good at but she is not about to show you easily! We will see some, because no one is perfect and I know it very well. I admit maybe I should have introduced a flaw or two before, but I thought it more important to show the emotional rather than the physical flaws. I do think there is some in the next chapter, or maybe in two.

I hope you keep enjoying and reading and reviewing! Thank you so much again!
Lots of love,
Kate

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Hello there, I'm back. At least for a bit. Anyways, I'm catching up on all my old favorites, so I promise there will be some long juicy reviews awaiting you as soon as I get my groove back. Hope all is well.

After re-reading this story again, I have to ask...is English your second language? Your writing is so beautiful, but I notice occasionally a few words get mixed up..mostly verbs and nouns, like you write sit instead of seat. Nothing major, and definately something a good beta could help you work on either way :)

Secondly, I'm not sure if anyone else has pointed it out yet, but it's Whomping Willow, not whooping.

Onto the story thus far..My next review will be one of my usuals, I promise, but for now I just want to say this was overall a great chapter, and I can really see you coming into your own with both your writing and this story. However, I really dislike the fact that Naomi uses the Imperis curse on Charlie..I mean sure, she had to do something to help LuLu out, but she could have clobbered her over the head, locked her in a room, or simply ordered the minion to leave the party, etc. I feel that Naomi using the Imperius curse, especially for something that is not incredibly serious or life threatening, is rather out of character for her, and kind of goes against everything we, as the readers, have been brought to believe about Naomi and her beliefs and values. Hate is a strong word, but I definately think with your skills that particular situation could've been handled differently, and much more effectively.

With that being said, I love all the sexual tension between her and Sirius. I kind of like the James backstory as well, alrthough I'm not soo sure how I feel about them sleeping together yet.

Author's Response: Hello!!
Thank you so much for your lovely review!
Yes, English is my second, or even third language, so I do apologise for the mistakes. I know I should get a beta but my life is so hectic it is always incredibly difficult to coordinate with someone to do it for me.
The Willow's name... always found it difficult to remember haha thanks for telling me, I'll edit the chapter to make sure it is right!!

Naomi is a very complicated character. I appreciate you realising that this Imperius curse is "out of character" for her but it is there for a reason, believe me. This story is about a power struggle, we are only seeing Narcissa vs Naomi now, but a lot more is coming and there is always a dark side to it which I need to introduce little by little. I guess even though the situation wasn't "serious" Naomi can sometimes chose the easy way out, instead of the right and hardest one... hence her using such a horrible curse on poor Charlie.
Again, thanks for the amazing review!!
Lots of love,
Kate

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Really enjoying I find Naomi's character so interesting and I can't wait to read more!

Author's Response: Thank you so much =)

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Gahh!! Great chapter! I love the interactions between her and James. And Sirius can't have actually given up! Update again soon please, I can't wait to see what she is gonna do now! =]

Author's Response: Thank you so much for your lovely review!!
I am glad you like Naomi/James moments, they take me forever cus I never think they're good enough! Haha you're comment makes me feel a lot better!
I'll update soon, promise!
Lots of love,
Kate

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Hello,I really liked the last chapter and I am really sorry 'cause I didn't write more reviews.I haven't much time :).
So,Kate,is everything alright?I've seen,that you didn't answered the other reviews.We are waiting about 4 months and I REALLY miss our little panther.Please,let her come back.
I hope on quick update.:)

~LovingMarauder
x

Author's Response: Hello!!
Don't worry, I'm happy you read even if you don't have time to review!!
I am so sorry I've been missing for some time but I have had some family issues that kept me away from my pc.
I am glad to announce I am back and updating as soon as I finish writing this reply to your lovely comment!!
Thank you very much for your patience!
Lots of love,
Kate

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omg update. PLEASE. PLEASE. PLEASE.

Author's Response: Updating very soon! Thanks for your review!
Lots of love,
Kate

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Is there a reason chapter 18 hasn't been approved?

Author's Response: Chapter 18 should be approved now any minute!! Thanks for your patience!
Hope you enjoy!
Please keep reviewing!
Lots of love,
Kate

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Please for the love of god update I have to read chapter 18 I've been waiting for like months you have such Awesome talent at writing

Author's Response: Hi!!
Thank you so much for your review!
I am so sorry about chapter 18 but they will not approve it and I've been trying my best to re write in a way that doesn't destroy the whole story. It'll be up soon!
Lots of love,
Kate

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UPDATE. PLEASE UPDATE. PLEASE!

Author's Response: Chapter up in 3, 2, 1... =)
Hope you enjoy!

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UPDATE. PLEASE. please?

Author's Response: Very soon! I promise!
Lots of love,
Kate

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Another great chapter! Aw, it's so sweet to see how much Sirius cares for Naomi when she was hurt! And I'm happy that she is slowly becoming a more softer, caring person, though she is trying to hold it back as I could see when she was with Remus. I absolutely loved the fighing scene, you did so well with the description. That was one of my fave parts :)

Hanging out for the next chapter, keep it up Kate!

XOXO WildFlower!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for your review!!
I am so glad you liked it, it is hard to describe a battle, at least for me it is :)
Next chapter will be up soon! I'm already working on it!
Lots of love,
Kate

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Great chapters!! I love this! So Remus knows about her mom? I bet Sirius will be mad when he finds out that Remus knew before him. Update again soon, I can't wait to see what happens next! =]

Author's Response: Thank you so much for the reviews!!
Oh what a coincidence! I love Meg haha I should go as her sometime too haha I'm sure it's fun!
I will update as soon as I can, promise!
Lots of love,
Kate

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Great couple of chapters! It's so funny cause I was Meg for Halloween this past year! And I can't believe she used the Imperious curse on Charlie!!! I'm off to read the rest of the chapters! =]

Author's Response: Thank you so much for your review!!!
Hope you keep reading and enjoying!
Lots of love,
Kate

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I can't believe I didn't read this earlier! I had been reading this story nonstop and pull an all-nighter XD
10/10
Now, I need to go to bed ;)

Author's Response: Thank you so much!
I am so happy and grateful you find my story interesting enough to pull an all-nighter to read it. I feel honored.
Hope you like what's coming next too!
Lots of love,
Kate

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I LOVED THIS CHAPTER!!!I waited so long for it.I'm really happy,because Sirius told others,that he likes her.^^ Naomi is starting to be a real human and to have that little thing called heart.I really liked the part with battle and with Sirius in Hospital Wing.
I hate Narcissa with passion in your story,I'm really sorry about that.

Don't wait so long for next update,please. :)

~LovingMarauder

Author's Response: Thank you so much for the lovely review!
Well, no one can make it on their own forever! Naomi needed to open up a little bit; though don't get your hopes up too much, she is still Naomi! Haha
Next chapter will be up soon, I promise to try me best!
Lots of love,
Kate

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I'm glad that you wrote ''cold as Antarctic''' somewhere.^^ I know,I know,I'm boring,but I can't understand,that story like your has just 54 reviews:( and I just have to make 55 review.xD

I saw,that First Chapter has birthaday tomorrow,so...I thougt,that it would be nice if you write one extremly long chapter and update it tomorrow.*puppy eyes* xD
x

Author's Response: Hello!!
I will try to update soon but right now I am doing my dissertation which is due soon so I am extremely busy!
Thank you so much for reviewing haha it really makes me happy =)
Lots of love,
Kate

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I forgot,are Sirius and Rhea in Order or not?o.O
You know,something is bothering me...we all know,that everybody near to Marauders (Sirius,Remus,James) will die.I'll be so sad when that moment comes,where Naomi dies...BUT,you still can put her in Hogwarts era.She can still be showed in Harry Potter and Order of Phoenix?Don't kill her,please.='(

So,I'm wondering,what will happen with Naomi?=D
I know that you can't say me this,but,do YOU know,how it ends?xD

Update soon.;)
x

Author's Response: Hahah hello again! =)
Sirius and Rhea are taking the especial training for the Order, yes same as Remus, Peter, James, Lily and Naomi.
Well, I have an idea of how it ends but the details I have to think about yet ;)
Lots of love!!
Kate

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I love your writing so much!
if i could start a fan base for you i totally would!!!
your stories are amazing and you have actually decently long chapters!! i wish they wouldn't end!!!
thank you for being awesome!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for your review!
Makes my day to read some people actually enjoy what I write! =)
I do try to make ever chapter 6000 words at the very least, it usually annoys me when I want to read a new update and it's really short, so I try my best not to upset my readers!
Lots of love,
Kate

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Another awesomely brilliant chapter! I love how you write everyone's P.O.V's and perfectly distinguish the characters. You never cease to amaze me with that, it makes a lovely thrilling read! AND OMG loving the softer sides of Naomi! Aw and poor Sirius, being so in love and not knowing if there will be a chance between him and Naomi, but I can see she is lightening up to Sirius, which is great because I can't wait to for them to be together! ... Well I can because I love the chase, but still haha!

Awesome job once again Kate! Bring on the next chapter 10/10

XOXO WildFlower!

Author's Response: Hello, hello!!
Again, so happy to see you like my work! =)
Naomi's soft parts are a lot harder to write than the mean ones haha but yes, everyone has a heart although some people have it smaller than others! =)

Oh, the chase... I just love it with all my heart! I hope you like what I have prepared for Naomi and Sirius, they're on for some bumpy ride haha

Lots of love,
Kate

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