This is great! I love the idea, and I love how Regulus thinks about Sirius. The only thing I could critique is the pain Regulus feels is sort of lost. Report Review
oh my this is very interesting!:) can't wait for more! Report Review
Yes. Yes! YES! Regulus has come back for me, my loooveee~~~ I knew you would return :D Oh gosh, I love him. And I love stories out there that keep him alive (so I can drag him back to my bat cave and... ehem. Never mind.) Actually, now that I think about it, I love EVERY Regulus story (unless it's horribly written... but that's another issue all in itself)
Sirius... oh Sirius. Stop being a jerk and just love him. LOVE HIM. Love him like you've never loved someone before! He's your brother for Pete's sake, help himmm! D: I know I'd help and love and cherish my little sisters if they ever got in a situation like Regulus. Not like I'd ever let them get in that situation in the first place. I'd kick me some buttockkks. Go to the future, bring Harry back and let him TAKE the Dark Lord OUT.
Cliffhanger~ oh cliffhanger, how you make me hang off this cliff. I am dying of anticipation. I want--nay NEED--to know what happens next D: How will they all react to the fact that a nineteen year old (AMAZING) boy is so well-informed. Even more well-informed then freakin' Dumbledore, one of the most amazing wizards (behind Regulus, of course) of all time. At least, I assume he knows more than Dumbledore. He can be a bit ditzy at times.
OH SNAP. I WENT THERE.
Love the story so far(: Only thing I'm bothered about is the boldness of the (WHAT'S THE WORD, WHAT'S THE WORD?) dialogue. (YES.) it's not a big deal, just me complaining because my freakin' eyesight sucks. I'll stop now(:
ADORE the story(: Can't wait for the update! :D Chow~(or however you spell it) Report Review
Overall I enjoyed this.
I like that you have Regulus looking for Sirius. I always think it was sad that the two were so close in age yet so far apart. Maybe your story will be a chance for them to find some respect for one another.
I think your Dumbledore is very well done. I always tend to like a good Dumbledore. I defiantly think the conversation between Regulus and Dumbledore is the strongest part of this chapter. Maybe it is because by the end you had found your flow.
I am not sure about the bolding I think the dialogue was in bold. This was a bit weird for me I don't think it was needed.
A good set up chapter and I'll be keeping track to see when you update. Report Review
Oh Come On! You just had to finish here? Update soon, I really want to know the rest of this conversation and if Sirius is going to stop being suck a smartass. Loved Dumbledore putting Sirius in his placeAuthor's Response: thank you xD unfortunatly I have looming essay deadlines which are putting the breaks on things D: - hold on though, it is coming. Report Review
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