I love how Scorpius is the "anti-partner." He's so dramatic and perfect. I think your Al/Scorpius non-friendship is the best I've read. Though I am secretly hoping that they will eventually become friends, or you know, go against the Beaver together to still work on this case somehow. And Scorpius is such a little brown-noser! But I love how he doesn't get any recognition for it all.
Of course Phyllis escaped, she's like a mastermind criminal or you know, a mobster girlfriend. Poor Al and Scorp can't catch a break, can they?
Now, why aren't there any more chapters? I hope you're writing more!! And sorry these aren't very long. I'm not really sure what else to say. :(Author's Response: For this chapter, I gave Scorpius a lot more freedom - I wasn't sure what to do with him before, hence the silence. The focus on Albus as narrator meant that Scorpius was more difficult to "know". It's wonderful that you like how he has turned out in this chapter because I was uncertain and uncomfortable... and yes, it means a lot to have you call him "perfect" and that the relationship between the two of them is that good. Total fangirl moment going on right now, that's all I can say. ^_^
I'm also not saying anything that may reveal the plot I have in mind. :P It will be fun, but it will be strange and complicated.
The plan is to write more. hopefully soon! Thank you very much for reading and reviewing this story - your reviews have helped inspire me to keep going, and I really appreciate that. :D Report Review
So I definitely read this yesterday but didn't get around to reviewing, it seems.
Finally! Scorpius is released from the spell. Now we can hear his whining again. ;) I love how Albus is so in control, and all about the action. I'm glad you brought up the terrorist attacks and reminding the Muggles of them; it kind of makes it more real, you know? I felt so bad when that boy told Al his mom was in the building, so I'm really glad that she's okay.
Poor Al is just setting up for failure, isn't he? I'm kind of amused by his use of a mobile for taking photos though. Comes in handy for quick things like that.
And then comparing Scorpius to his grandmother! God, the two of them are great together. And Phyllis is fantastic, she thinks she's so superior to the boys and I love it. And Bogey-Wogey? I mean, really? Bahaha, that's great.
I love how Al doesn't want Scorpius to have the last word but then HE DOES! Oh, Al...this is just beginning and I'm already loving their interactions. So, so good.Author's Response: Oh god, you like Scorpius's whining? :P Don't let Albus hear you, or else he'll do a bunk and leave you to solve the case with Scorpius instead. not that he could leave this case, not with the way that it has captured his interest, not to mention his sympathies. It was important to have him see the aftermath of the bomb first-hand to bring home how serious it was - for all that this is a humourous story, I don't want it to lose sight of how serious these things are (it was something lacking from "Murder on the Hogwarts Express" that I want to fix in this story).
Albus has very little self-confidence, poor guy. It's like he sets himself up so as to avoid being disappointed, which doesn't say much about his successes this far. The use of the mobile is a bit of a cheat, but I'm glad it worked (no one else has mentioned it so far, strangely enough!) - my assumption is that, by this time in the wizarding world, young wizards are making use of the "muggle magic" available to them and perhaps acting more kindly to muggles in general. :P Harry's influence and that sort of thing.
It's fantastic that you're enjoying the humour and the characters - it is a lot of fun to write this story, even if it takes forever to get into the right mood for it, and it means a lot that you're having fun reading it. Thank you! ^_^ Report Review
This new girl has certainly got me intrigued with her whole femme fatale looking going on, and yet her casual mention of seeing Scorpius on the cover of Witch Weekly. I love Al's narrative in this story, how he just goes off for like a paragraph and then he's just like, "I digress." He's such a solidly funny character, very self-entitled sometimes, I think, and it's fantastic.
The bit about how she could possibly assume that him and Scorpius were at the hotel for a hook-up had me in stitches. I love the pairing, but it's kind of hilarious to see a version where it could be implied they are in a relationship and Al is completely against the idea. He's certainly made Scorpius look like lady's man, though, that's for sure. Too bad he couldn't unleash that charming personality of his on this girl.
I kind of miss Scorpius, though I was really amused when the girl re-silenced him after listening to him go off. I love Al, don't get me wrong, but I really adore their banter the most, and I kind of miss it.
Al jinxed himself when he said bad things come in threes! I can only assume the whole bomb thing is the third bad thing. I'm glad there's still a couple more chapters so I don't have to wait in anticipation to find out what happens next.
He was an conceited - 'an' = 'a'
but as the preferred to conquer the female sex, - 'the' = 'he'
Great update! I'm really enjoying this story, a lot. You should write humor/parody more often. :)Author's Response: I'm so glad that you like both the girl and Al's narrative. There were a lot more of his digressions initially, but people said that it was overdoing things, so I've limited myself to one per chapter. He's a wordy guy, this Albus, and keeps going off on tangents - makes me wonder why he didn't become a professor rather than an auror. :P It makes these chapters easier to write, though, because he does have such a strong narrative voice.
There is a bromantic element to this story, and Albus will change his views... if only a little. I couldn't resist including that assumption because it comes up way too often, both in fiction and real life, as though two people of the same sex couldn't possibly spend time in the same room without it being scandalous - Al sees it as ridiculous. Yet at the same time, he does feminize Scorpius to alarming extent, and I'm still not quite sure where I want to take that - is it just jealousy that Scorpius is having an easier time in the department? does he feel threatened by Scorpius? It may add some interesting angle to Al's character. ;)
You're not the first person to miss Scorpius in this chapter. XD I'm amazed at how much readers enjoyed his banter with Albus, not to mention the effect of silencing a character in a humour story - perhaps I should have made Scorpius pull a Charlie Chaplin and do all sorts of clever miming acts, that would have been funny. :P But a lot of this story relies on the two characters working in tandem, so I agree that it caused an imbalance.
Thank you so much for reading and reviewing this story, Missy! I've fixed those typos you pointed out, too - thank you for mentioning them. ^_^ Report Review
An indignant Malfoy is so ridiculously amusing. I was laughing out loud throughout this chapter, especially the bit when Al said he went out to get a mocha and then was all, "Oh, did you want one too?" When Al's stomach growled and Scorpius flipped out, thinking someone was trying to get into the room...I almost died.
I think my favorite part of this chapter was Al constantly comparing Scorpius to his sister. He stamped in just like my sister does when she’s in one of her tempers, which is pretty much all the time. Bahaha, that is just such a perfect description of Scorpius.
Then Al silencing him for chewing too loudly! That was great. I felt kind of bad when Al basically said they only took Scorpius because they needed more man-power and that he really kind of sucks as an Auror.
The Bulgarian mobster isn't Krum, is it?! That's all I could think about when you said Durmstrang and Quidditch player...
I can't believe that girl knew they were spying on her! She must be more observant than they are, that's for sure. I wonder how they'll explain themselves...
One minor correction: contended silence. - I believe that should be contented instead.
I'm also really enjoying the length of these chapters. I don't mind long chapters but sometimes I just want to sit down and just read some nice, short chapters and the fact that this story is hilarious just helps me gobble it up. Love it! :)Author's Response: Haha, it's so true! Putting Malfoys in situations that make them indignant are a staple of Potterverse humour, and Albus is really, really mean to him at all possible moments. It doesn't help that Albus has some access and understanding of the Muggle world, whereas Scorpius is still too much of a pureblood to be able to navigate that world with success. Poor fellow - I really have to give him the long end of the stick in one of these chapters. XD
Oh dear, your review is reminding me how much eating takes place in this chapter. It's all about food! I've never done that before, and now it's striking me as entirely odd, but also very funny.
Anyway, I'm not sure whether to make the mobster Kum - I was going to initially, but that might be too easy. For now, I'm going to leave him faceless in a sort of "star part" role as the person everyone talks about, but whom never appears until either the very end, if at all. I might have something else in mind for dear Bogey. ;)
I'm now wondering what a "contended silence" would sound like. Is it an argumentative silence? :P I've fixed that now - thank you for mentioning it!
It's nice to write short chapters once in a while, too. For a humour or action/adventure story, it works in the plot's benefit to write short, snappy chapters with lots of cliff-hangers - chapters that, predominately, end with each scene rather than combining scenes as I tend to do with my other stories. I'm really glad to hear that the short chapters are working for you - after all the long chapters around, I'm sure it's a nice break!
Thank you so much again for reading and reviewing this story, Missy. It means a lot to hear from you! ^_^ Report Review
Gah, Susan, this is fabulous. Al and Scorpius are my favorite Next Gens and to see you + them + humor, I was scrambling to read the first chapter.
I'm already giggling at Al's narrative. His descriptions of Scorpius, of course, are my favorite. Scorpius kind of reminds me of a preening peacock with all this delicately pretty features.
I think this is my favorite part of the chapter: Coy as ever, Malfoy sidled over; his grandfather must be glaring up at him from hell in horror at this ghastly result of careful breeding and failed reputation. Scorpius Malfoy was an Auror, which immediately placed him in the failure column for his parents, and, to boot, he was a delicate flower of manhood from his pretty golden locks to his lilywhite skin, which made him a failure among the Aurors.
I love how he's so different from Albus - yes, he became an Auror (probably for the sake of having a job and he seems like the type of character who would do something just to spite his family), but he's all about being safe and taking the easy way out, whereas Albus just wants to go somewhere with his career, eager to get those difficult cases and prove himself worthy of being Harry Potter's son. The little bit about how he wished there was a Dark Wizard running around to help boost his career was amusing, too.
Eager Beaver is great too - from his cologne to his desperate desire to take over Harry's job and being all condescending to Albus all the while. Sticking Albus with Malfoy certainly doesn't win him any points (except perhaps with me, because I seriously think that Albus and Scorpius's interactions are hilarious and I'm going to really enjoy this story a lot).
I'm not sure if anyone pointed these out, but some corrections:
He must have borrowed out the Beaver's in his quest - the 'out' makes this sentence read awkwardly
I turned his back and bent over some parchment or another. - I'm not quite sure what you're trying to say here...maybe take out the 'his.'
I let out a painful sigh I could muster - this sounds awkward, maybe 'let out the most painful sigh I could muster' would work better
bottom rung of the latter - ladder
Only the witch puzzled many, her face a cross between Dad's and Teddy's mothers - unless Teddy has more than one mother, that should read mother's
I really enjoyed this first chapter, and I look forward to reading the rest. I'm always up for some good humor stories to break up the monotony of all the angst. ;)Author's Response: You are fabulous, Missy! I never expected you to read this story, though now that I think about it, you have mentioned an interest in Albus and Scorpius, so it's fantastic that you've chosen this silly story to read. They're fun characters to write, not only because I've exaggerated them a bit here, but also because they're got a lot of potential for a combination of humour and depth that should make for some very exciting developments.
Albus in his turn exaggerates his descriptions of Scorpius. He derides Malfoy for taking care with his appearance and possessing a very nice set of facial features - he makes the incorrect assumption that, because Malfoy's pretty, he can't be smart. I'm looking forward to writing the moment when Albus's assumptions about Scorpius are proven wrong - it will blow poor Albus's mind. XD
Scorpius is going to be the ultimate contrarian, doing things because other people won't, or better yet, tell him not to. It makes him more of a radical than Albus, who is the sort that is good at talking, but is sometimes too timid to actually follow through - he cares too much about his reputation and that of his family to take too much of a risk. Albus is also driven to succeed at his job, which puts him at odds, his ambition against his reputation, and this case will end up pushing him to his furthest limits.
I've made those changes, thank you for pointing them out. I'm embarrassed that I've missed so many, and such dreadful ones, too!
Also thank you for reading and reviewing this story! It's wonderful to have you reading and enjoying it, and I hope that I'm able to write more of it soon! :D Report Review
I sense some rebellious resistance brewing with Albus and Scorpius. And I'm just going to reiterate what I said already in the previous chapter now, these two remind me so much of a modern-day Sherlock and Watson. They work well together, though they aren't exactly friends but definitely seem to be heading toward friendship the longer they're in each others presence. And now that they've been assigned desk work, officially kicked off the case, I can see Albus going against Beaver's orders and bring Scorpius along with him, thus working according to his own rules as Sherlock does. Over all, great chapter and I can't wait to read more. :) 10/10
Inter-house review-a-thonAuthor's Response: Oh yes, rebellious resistance is on the way! It may be just the thing to unite them. ;)
It's sad how influenced I am by the Sherlock series - the whole time it was on hiatus, I couldn't write this story, but as soon as it came back, I felt the need to return to this once more. It's not a healthy way to write, but my excuse is that male-centered stories are very different to write - Phyllis is a peripheral character, the focus being on the male relationship, something I've never written in such detail before.
I hope to make it a bit of a twist when they finally decide to ignore orders and take on the case anyway. ;) Albus thinks he's the one in charge, but his position with the Aurors is his sensitive spot, and he won't want to endanger it.
Thank you so much for reading and reviewing this story! It's wonderful to hear that you're enjoying it! ^_^ Report Review
Hahah, I like how Albus's last thought was how he had to have the last word, yet you give the last word to Scorpius to say in this chapter in "We'll see", it made me laugh. These two are so amusing and you write their bickering and over all macho-ness over each other so well. It kind of has a Sherlock-esque feel to it (the BBC show written by Steven Moffat, of course) with the way these two interact toward each other (like Sherlock and Watson). I love it.
Also, I just over all enjoyed the after math of watching that bomb explode, destroying that building, as you describe a lot of what they are seeing as Albus tries to figure out what they can do to succeed in this case. He really doesn't want to fail and you make that point so clear and valid that I'm curious what he's going to come up with. He's very much like Sherlock in this respect, not giving up and continuing to think his way around the whole situation. Over all, excellent chapter and I'm looking forward to reading more. :) 10/10Author's Response: The last word joke is always relevant! It happens to me way too much in real life, so I thought it would be perfect to include with these two because they're such rivals and egotists (yes, even Albus :P). I'm very glad that you liked it! :D
The Sherlock series has been the main inspiration for this story - the atmosphere and camaraderie within it especially, even if Albus and Scorpius squabble like a married couple. There's a bigger gap between them (than with Holmes and Watson) because of their prejudices, but eventually, that should change (hopefully). ;)
For all his bravado, Albus is terrified of failure, especially with his family being so prominent - he probably feels a lot of pressure, even if it's unintentional for the most part, to succeed and be like his father. It makes him very driven, though, and helps far more than it hinders.
Thank you so much for reading and reviewing this chapter! It means so much to hear from you about it! ^_^ Report Review
"So Malfoy was capable of contribution after all" -lol :D Best line. Albus has such a fantastic personallity in this! His general dislike of Scorpius is so brilliant in this. Malfoy not getting praised for his little controbution, and becoming so upset over it, was very humorus as well (:
Phyllis (very intersting name choice, btw) is just one step ahead of the boys at all times; I love her character. I can't wait to read more of this... this story is wonderful. Very brilliant work here! This is going on my favorites, and I'll be watching for updates, great work! loved it.Author's Response: I'm very pleased to hear that Albus's personality is fantastic! It's a great compliment! I don't know why his voice is so strong in my head, but once I push myself into that track, a whole chapter just rolls out - it makes it a little more difficult to get Scorpius in fairly, but I'm glad for the little moments when he does... contribute. :P He'll take on a larger role once they both go rogue. ;)
Thank you again for reading, reviewing, and best of all, enjoying this story! I'd forgotten how much fun I had writing it, so it's been great to return to something light and very different from my other stories. It means a lot that you like it! Report Review
I really loved your descriptive writing of the explosion, I had a brilliant picture in my head with every sentance I read. I loved how, even in the midst of the explosion, Albus and Scorpius couldn't put their bickering aside (:
I think the end part, where both of them just had to try to get the last word in, was my favorite part of this chapter. They both just had to get the last word in, didn't they? (: I really love Albus, his wit is fantastic through every chapter, even in the middle of a bomb going off. The little part about not wanting to listen to the "mushy romance" of the phone call was really funny! Brilliant work, I'm really enjoying this story!Author's Response: Oh wow, thank you! It's great that the explosion scene worked out so well - I wasn't sure how to work such a serious moment into a humourous story, so it means a lot to hear that Albus's description was appropriately vivid. ^_^
Haha, they're ridiculously immature, which is what makes writing them together this much fun. Though it's sad that I've been in verbal battles like that before, each person trying to slip in that final statement. XD
Thank you again for your wonderful review! It means a lot that you're enjoying the story so far! Report Review
God.. I loved how the girl acted towards Malfoy, I could cry from laughing (: Her personallity was very neatly written, and I loved how she re-silenced Scorpius; I think that was my favorite part of the chapter.
I liked the Hamlet refrences, and again, all the witty humor was just fantastic. Brilliant work once again, this story is amazing!Author's Response: Those two silly wizards have definitely met their match in Phyllis. XD She's a great character to write because she just says and does whatever - it's certainly fun to sit back and let loose the filter of politeness. I'm glad that you like her. :D
Thank you again for your compliments! It's awesome that you've enjoyed the story so much! Report Review
I just loved every bit of this (: Malfoy's sarcasm with Albus' wit, the dilogue in this is just so brilliant. I love how Scorpius tries so hard to act all high and mighty, but Albus just brings him back down to the second-in-command he is every time.
I liked the reason they're watching (Viktor Krum, correct?) his girlfriend, It'll be really intersting to see what turns out from that; I love a good mystery story, and combined with the sarcastic humor, this is just too brilliant of a story. Keep it up, I loved this (:Author's Response: Wow, thank you! It's wonderful that you enjoyed the dialogue - I've always wanted to work with that kind of fast-paced witty dialogue, but since dialogue used to be a big weakness of mine, I've tended to balk at it. It's a key part of this story, though, and I'm really glad that you like it! ^_^
It could be Krum - I certainly had him in mind at the time, though I'm not 100% certain I want to use him in this kind of role. Once he actually appears in the story, I'll be able to figure out how I want to depict that character.
Gosh, your compliments are really uplifting! :O I don't know what else to say but thank you, thank you! *glomps* These reviews have made my day! Report Review
I really loved this (: Sort of off topic to begin with, but the banner for this story is really amazing, great work!
I loved Albus' personallity, and his general feelings toward Scorpius were very funny to read. This is such a neat idea, and I got a really great sense of the plot, characters and tensions between the pair right off the bat. I really enjoyed your descriptive writing, as well as the witty dialogue from both Albus and Scorpius. It was very funny!
I suppose Scorpiuc becoming an Auror would be the ultimate insult to Draco or Lucuis, wouldn't it? (: The way you wrote this just instantly hooked me into the story, and the 'mystery' part of it makes me want to know more right away. Great job, very wonderful start.Author's Response: Thank you! Wow, you reviewed every chapter! :O That's awesome to see, and I'm very thankful that you took the time to do so - it'll be great to read through your reactions to each part.
The banner is thanks to Gina, the graphics wiz - her ability to do that style is way beyond me, and she's as happy to populate my author page with her banners as I am to receive them. :D
It's great that you've enjoyed this first chapter, especially the two characters. It's very different to write them in this way, not only from Albus's point of view, but also in this atmosphere and genre - keeping up with the humour and witty dialogue is quite a challenge! The two of them are fun to write, though, because they play off another so easily - they've got enough in common (not that they'd ever admit it!) and enough tension between them to make for a prefect combination.
Scorpius becoming an Auror would be a blow, especially for Lucius - I'm not as sure about Draco, though, as he might see it as a way for the family name to rise again in society's regard. But I haven't quite explored Scorpius's reasons in detail yet, and I'd like to make them more complicated than simple adolescent rebellion - something that gives him as a character more depth, because right now, I'm still not understanding him as well as I'd like.
Anyway, thank you again for reading and reviewing this story! :D Report Review
Yey thanks for updating! Loved the chapter :DAuthor's Response: And thank you for coming back to read the new chapter! I really appreciate it and am glad that you enjoyed it! :D Report Review
It's a shame this story doesn't get more press. It's so very clever and fun, and I love it to pieces.
THIS line, especially, had me in stitches: "My report would end up in a large red file labelled 'fail'." I don't know how you come up with these things, but they definitely make me laugh. :)
As far as pacing goes, it was fast, but that certainly doesn't have to be a bad thing! I loved it. And have no criticism as far as "missing" elements go.
Still sticking with my earlier statement: YOU are a legend.
- RinAuthor's Response: Rin! Thank you! Gah, your support for this story makes me so happy, and also guilty that my muse has clammed up when it comes to the plot. Then again, I could just make it the adventures of Albus and Scorpius... that would be fun, actually. It's the characters who get the most love - the plot is all secondary. ;)
lol, I wish I knew where those lines come from! Some of it is a pure love of sarcasm, well-bred from too much Sherlock Holmes and Blackadder. I'm very glad that it made you laugh, as I love to make people laugh. ^_^
Me, legend? That's scary! *hides* I seem to have this reputation that looms overhead at all times and it's frightening. Lovely in its way, but still frightening.
Thank you so much! It means a lot to hear all these lovely compliments from you! ^_^ Report Review
Ahh, Susan. I have officially dubbed thee a legend. A gilded, gold-ed legend. AND IT IS SO.
Anyway, this was the funniest chapter yet, I think. You rant (in a hilarious, awesome way) for about a paragraph and then you'll stop with a one-liner that has be in stitches. Everything is very clever, and you've masterfully crafted this so that it flows so well the reader is surprised they've finished.
And everything in it is chock-full of wit. I mean, everything. All the dialogue your characters say, everything you ever describe, is amazingly clever.
Though art un LEGEND. -bows-
- RinAuthor's Response: O_O
How does a person respond to a review like this?! Really, Becca, I don't know what to say! *runs and hides*
It was such a worrying chapter to write, I guess because I had to make up for Scorpius's silence with Albus's wit, and he can't always manage it well on his own. I'm really glad that you found his rant and one-liners funny - it means a lot to hear from you that I can pull off humour. It's a hard genre to write, wow! It's shocking to keep up a humourous tone for this long - no wonder humour stories have shorter chapters. XD
Thank you THANK YOU for this review. Re-reading it makes me want to be worthy of it and I think you may just inspire me to write another chapter of this story. It's been too long already. *huggles* Report Review
Hahahaha I really love this story! Please write more! :DAuthor's Response: Thank you! I hope to write more soon! :D Report Review
Haha I love it. So well written :)Author's Response: Thank you for the wonderful compliment! ^_^ Report Review
Ah, I really love them :)Author's Response: Thank you! They're hilarious to write together. :D Report Review
Oh. My. God. I absolutely love it. I used all of those full stops in the "oh my god" just to show that.
But seriously!!! I love the characters you've set up and the plot is just brilliant. Please, please, please! There better be more of this :)
10/10 of course!Author's Response: Wow! This is fantastic to hear, thank you so much! There is more of it coming, I promise. I'm just working out some kinks in my original plan. ;) Report Review
I liked this. I don't think I felt as if anything was glaringly missing, but it was a quick chapter to read. I did feel my self rushing through, but I still feel as if I am fully aware of what's going on. I really like the bit at the end between Scorp and Albus, I think this chapter was lacking a bit of that back-and-forth between the two of them, that was really what made this piece stand out to me in the past chapters. I'm still very interested in continuing to read the upcoming chapters!
:)BaletGirAuthor's Response: This helps quite bit, thank you! So while it moves quickly, it does not move confusingly and also flows well - that's just the kind of thing I wanted to know. :D You're not the first so have noticed the lack of Albus/Scorpius banter in this chapter, so it's definitely something I'm looking to rectify in future chapters. I missed writing them bantering, too. ;)
Thank you very much for reading and reviewing! I really appreciate it! ^_^ Report Review
I enjoyed this one like the others. As far as pacing goes, it did seem a bit faster than the others. I look forward to reading the next chapter!Author's Response: A bit faster is still okay, as it had more action going on than the previous chapters, which had more dialogue and description. I'll keep it in mind, though, and see if I can better regulate the pacing.
Thank you very much for reading and reviewing! I'm a little stale on this story at the moment, but I'm trying to working through possible plot developments, so hopefully it won't take too much longer to update. :D Report Review
I enjoyed the old movie references very much and adore Malfoy in this. Look forward to reading the next chapter.Author's Response: Thank you very much! It's fantastic to hear that you're enjoying those references and Malfoy too! It's strange writing him so differently than I have before - this version is more like the Draco I've done in other stories. :) Report Review
"When he sniffed so loud that I thought his brains were rearranging themselves, I couldn’t remain silent any longer..." Loved that line and I really like the way you write them interacting with each other. As well as the small details like Malfoy's slurping and tossing his wrappers.Author's Response: Thank you! :D They're hilarious to write together, and I have to get more into writing their banter, whether as dialogue or as silent comedy. Wish I could come up with that sort of thing everyday, lol.
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I decided to read fanfiction after about a year and your stories never do disappoint. Always admired your writing style and humor. Looking forward to the reading the next chapter.Author's Response: Oh wow, thank you so much! That's a wonderful compliment, both that you chose my stories to read and that they don't disappoint. ^_^ It's great that you've come back to fanfiction - I remember you from TDA - and a familiar name is always a pleasure to see. :D Report Review
I really liked this chapter. You really do have such a flair for writing Albus and humour. And I love that she immediately placed Malfoy back under the silence charm after taking it off when he started swearing like a sailor. This is just such a fun read and I can't wait to see what else you come up with. Not to mention that bomb going off at the end... now that was not something I was expecting to happen in this chapter. But anyway, great job! (: 10/10Author's Response: Thank you very much! I'm really glad to hear that you enjoyed this chapter and liked its humour. Albus is fun to write in this way, though I can get carried away with him sometimes - he is an opinionated narrator. XD
The bomb was a very last-minute decision to break the tension. I didn't know how else to write myself out of that scene, and it seemed, if not a tasteful, at least an exciting addition to the story. I've been watching way too much "Spooks" and this story is turning into something more of a spy story than a mystery. Oh well, whatever gives it a plot. ;) Report Review
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