Aw. I thought this was really cute. I liked your OC, you really were able to get into the mind of an 11 year old and his need/desires to go to Hogwarts and not really understanding why he can't go but wanting to anyway.
I know this is kind of an older work of yours but there were mistakes here and there throughout the piece, I think editing it would be great because it's really not something that people write about, they normally write about the kids that are already in Hogwarts during the war and not the ones that are going to go to Hogwarts for the first time as the war is taking place.Author's Response: Well, it really is an older piece and I honestly never really looked back on it after writting it so I can imagine there must be quite a few errors here and there (I'm very talented at doing that!).
It was a strange thing to write about, wasn't it? and that is what really appealed to me; I like writing about those things people don't even think about a lot more than the classic novel type stories (which I also like, by the way).
I'm glad you liked my OC, he was fun to create and I will look at those errors; thanks for reviewing (it's been months since anyone even looked at this piece!) Report Review
So...here's the first out out of the reviews I owe you. I am so sorry it's taken so long...but on with the review.
I thought it was a great story. He was so excited, staying up all night, and I thought it was brilliant, definatly something I'm sure many children expecting letters did. I loved the nickname too :D I think you did great with what the challenge set forth-I hope you won/win :) It's a great story. I'm guessing this is Harry's sixth year? So he won't get to go back for his second year the next, which is sorta sad :( Anyway, it's a really good story.
~LilyAuthor's Response: Hi!
Yes, you are right, it is set during Harry's sixth year and no, he probably won't be going for his second year, considering his parents' views and fears.
I'm glad you liked it; it's not my favorite story. I wrote it really fast and just sent it in for the challenge. It could have been a lot better but I like the idea; I will probably go back on it at some point and make it longer.
Thanks for such a nice review, I really appreciate it! Report Review
First off, this was really insightful, what must have gone on in a wizarding family, and how they handled the news of You-Know-Who's return when the Ministry finally acknowledged his return.
You described Wulfric's feelings really well, how he wished for something so much and had waited for his acceptance letter so long, only to have it (almost) taken away. I liked that he got to go in the end, although it might only be until Dumbledore's death.
Grammar and spelling are good, nothing really stood out, making it easy to follow the plot.
Great story! Really liked it :D
xxx LeoAuthor's Response: Thank you very much for such a kind review!
It's a period of time that isn't really explored by a lot of writters so I thought I would give it a shot. My challenge was to write a story about a kid turning eleven and his parents don't really want him to go to Hogwarts. It would have been much easier to go with the muggle-born point of view but I wanted to do things differently.
And yeah, Wulfric will probably only go until the end of the year but at least he went!
Thanks again for this, I really appreciate it!! Report Review
First off, thank you so much for enterin my challenge!
I really liked the way you did the parents worry, and with Voldemort coming back, this would be Harry's first year and Wulfric's first? I think its really nice the way you did the importance of the eleventh birthday too(: Nice job!
~ReneeAuthor's Response: Thanks for creating the challenge my dear!
Just a correction though, it is meant to be Harry's sixth year (considering the ministry acknowledge Voldemort's return only at the end of his fifth).
I'm glad you apreciated my view of the boy's eleventh birthday and how it has its own importance for wizard!!
Thanks again, Akussa Report Review
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