I love this story its really good please add a new chapter as soon as u can i need to know whats going to happen next!

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Poor scorpius!!! Update soon! 10/10

will rose/scorpius ever get together?? I hope!!! Cuz i LOVE Scorpius!!!

-Sarah

Author's Response: Thanks(:
Of course! It wouldn't be good fanfic without a sigh-worthy ending.
Thanks for the review!

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OMG YOU NEED TO HURRY!! This is so good. but you deffidently need to get Scorp and Rose together soon, it makes me sad that hes so depressed about it.

Author's Response: Thanks so much. :)
They won't get together until the end, BUT he won't be depressed forever...
Thanks for reviewing!

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Very good, I love how they are behaving exactly the way you would think. This is a very good story. One thing I would like to see though, as a background reference maybe, is what Draco thinks about Scorpius in Gryffindor, or what he, harry, and ron feel about their kid's friendships.

Author's Response: Thank you thank you thank you!
Great idea, I might incorporate that later, I just didn't want to do the cliched thing where they start a fist fight. It'll come in flashback form probably...

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O O O O OH! I am so o o glad she got gryffindor! it was worrying, you did the suspense really well! and i wish i could make myself a cookie but i'm going to the airport soon. good job!

Author's Response: Thank you so much!
I reread the beginning of SS/PS before writing that chapter, so that I could tap into Harry's emotions, and kind of interpret that into my version of Rose.
OHHH Airport fun!!! Sorry for the lack of cookie... OH! Buy one!

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Pretty good, I like it. gonna keep reading!

Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad that people like it. Reviews are good :DDD

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I like your style of writing (: it's so. like a 13/14 year old would think! Can't wait for the rest of the story and for the moment I'm actually Team Cody (yes Scorpius seems like such a wonderful gut for Rose, but he's not willing to tell her or actually make an attempt to get her so why should he have her if he's not willing to get off his a*** and do something about it?)

Mel

Author's Response: Thank you!!! I went back a couple years and tried to think in that style. :D
Oh my gosh, someone likes Cody! YAYAYAY!
Scorpius is just really shy, and kind of young, he's not as lazy, etc. as he seems, I swear.
:D

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Just felt like a HP fix . I like your story . fresh.

Author's Response: Why thanks, it should be, I hope :D Seeing as it's not browning and whatnot...

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:) good start to a story, I am going to read more :)

Author's Response: Thanks, its great to hear that people read my crazy brain children!

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Gingersnape here with your review!

Okay, before I begin, I should probably explain how much of an idiot I am. See, I read these out of order (my computer is out to get me, so maybe that's why I read chapter 5 first...) Anyway, if some of my comments are a little off or wrong, please forgive me for completely screwing that up. And now to the actual review for Chapter 4!

Hehe, I liked the pay back! That was funny, and I liked how Emily was up before anyone else. That was nice to know and I felt like I could tell a bit more about her from that. Having read Chapter 5, I would say that I really have to know what's going on because it keeps getting mentioned, but there really isn't any dirt on them so far, so I would add that in before it comes up too often.

“Oh. Well, do you have an estimate?” I love that kid! I mean, I say stuff like that all the time... do you mind if I use that line? Oh, plot, right! I am also getting antsy for when we get some Al/Liz conversation, since they really haven't done much talking yet, but they too keep getting mentioned.

Note on coffee: I suppose I can see it, as I've been reflecting on how long I've loved green tea.. and ginger tea. I try to make sure it's decaf though, but I'm starting to like this coffee thing, even though I still don't understand why someone would pick coffee over green tea... :P

Quick question, who is Aggie Sprout? I'm pretty sure that Harry, Hermione, and Ron's Herbology professor was Pomona Sprout, but I don't know any of her other relatives names.

Another note, I thought Scorp was acting a little strange when Rose was on top of him. I can see tat it wasn't something that normally happened, but it just felt very very different from, “I suppose if she's so happy, I can just let her be happy for now” Scorp.

And on that, I shall end this review, with my usual good spelling, grammar, and flow stuff. It's fairly consistent with you, but I still like pointing it out. :)

Loved reading this, and when you have Chapter 6 up, I'd love it if you rerequested! (You don't have to, but it would certainly make me happy!) And I apologize for having all of the last requested review of a set thign don not at the end, but this is the last review I have to give it to you in, so this will have to do. =]
-ginger

Author's Response: No worries about the chapter order thing :D

Yeah, Emily and Matt... I kind of have to progress further into this plot for them to be revealed, because I'm writing a whole separate piece from her perspective, and so I kind of want to fast forward a bit...

Go ahead! I'm honored that you want to use my line :D I have Al/Liz all planned out. I'm going to write it into this soonish, plus post a one-shot comparing them to James and Lily. (They're the only ones I have a definate plan for...)

I like green tea, it just isn't as caffeinated... Besides, I wanted to add a hint of me to the characters. And yes, while they do live in England, where everyone drinks tea 24/7, my cousins all drink coffee too! :D

Aggie Sprout, I think she's going to be Pomona's niece.

The differences in Scorps are more to do with the timeline, but I'll check it out, thanks.

Thank you, I'm a bit of a grammar/spelling freak :D

I will rerequest, of course :D I love your reviews, they make my day. I'll be requesting soon for what I have going through the queue right now, it's pretty rough.
Olwyn

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Gingersnape again with reviews for you!

Before I begin my ego boosting, nit picking, and all of the stuff in between, I'm going to admit that I'm Team Scorpius all the way. He just gets Rose so much, and I'm worried Cody will just get bored and break her heart... or worse... be the perfect gentleman and Rose will want to be with Scorp, but Scorp will be gone and have given up on Rose... so I'm Team Scorp! So warning, I might be a wee bit biased in my review.

Okay, on to the actual review of this chapter, which I again, have a few things to whine about, but despite that, I really do enjoy reading this story. And as a warning, this could be another long review. I'm not very god at keeping reviews short, but somehow you managed to make it out of the last one alive =]

I loved loved loved that her first kiss was with Scorpius! That is so adorable, and it made me think about how Scorp must feel, knowing that he had kissed her and she was still oblivious to his affections! Gah! It really added to how oblivious Rose can be and strengthened that flaw, which are just as important as her strengths, but much more difficult to write.

The note passing was cute, and exactly how things are done when you are thirteen, but it felt like it rambled too much to be entirely realistic, from my memory of note passing. I remember them being short and all of those points would have been brought up after a reply. Not sure if that's how notes normally are, but that one felt a little off.

The fight between Matt and Emily felt very in character for thirteen year olds like them, so points for doing that well, and I really wonder what twist their relationship took. However, the transiton from talking about their fight and Hogwarts gossip to Rose getting ready seemed a bit rough, but once it got into the actual makeover, it seemed nice and smooth again.

Poor Scorp! Oh Rose, why don't you get that your being with Cody has something to do with his being unhappy! And Scorp is juts so sweet for accepting that Rose is happy and he will accept Cody ish, if it means Rose will be happy! Speaking of Cody, the kiss felt a little forced and early, but I suppose if it makes Rose happy, she won't mind..

I didn't really like the new mood Rose seemed to have, when she picked up on the whole Scorp-Cody thing. It felt unexpected that she would have such an epiphany without any explanation. And I doubt Cody would go complaining to Rose, because that might feel like tattle taleing and especially at his age, Cody would want to prove that he could handle his own fights on his own. In fact, I think he would try an hide that eh had even had a little disagreement with Scorp, unless his head was really big.

Anyway, apart from the spots I've mentioned, the chapter flows pretty well, and I didn't catch too many spelling or grammar mistakes. The spacing took a while to get used to, but HPFF has been having some spacing problems, so I wouldn't worry about them if it would be difficult to fix.

I really enjoyed reading the latest on Rose and the happenings at Hogwarts, and I'm excited to read on!
-ginger

Author's Response: Thanks! A lot of people have reviewed saying that they are Team Scorp. No one likes Cody... oh well. I kind of hate him too...

The fact that Rose's first kiss was with Scorpius kind of leads into their relationship, I'll probably have a flashback at some point soon.

The note passing thing is kind of weird. I added the rambling to show that Cody was kind of nervous talking to Rose, but now that you mention it, I see it. Thank you!

Matt and Emily, I'll probably be posting the little one/two shot soonish. They eventually get back together.

Yeah, I know the kiss was weird, but its kind of to show that with Cody things are a bit weird, and also as a catalyst for Scorpius to talk about his feelings.

Thank you so much for the whole comment on the fight-let, that was a hard part to write. I really wanted something to happen, but yeah, I'll change it.

Thank you, this chapter was pretty rough, I typed it up one morning when I woke up super early, so it's a bit spazzy.

Thank you so much, I love your reviews!
Olwyn

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I so prefer Scorpius to Cody.

Author's Response: Ha, everyone does. (I do too. But Cody is a nice guy. He really is... I swear... until chapter 10-ish!)

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Gingersnape here again for your review!

Oh, and I'd love to review more of your story if you'd like me to, so if you're interested in having me review the next few chapters, you'll need to rerequest in the thread. I promise the next ones will come faster than the first ones if you do rerequest.

On to the story! I have a few nit pickey things in the majority of my comments, so I think this review could be long, but I do promise that apart from all of my grumbles on insignificant points, I really did enjoy this chapter!

I have to say, I find it unbelievable that four first years could make the Quidditch team, and that the team is all in the Weasley and acquaintances clan. Harry made the team because he was phenomenal, and that was a once in a century thing. The rule may have changed, especially since the Weasleys would have been captain and known their cousins were on the team, but having all four first years make it seemed unrealistic.

I have mixed feelings about Dom and coffee, as it seems unrealistic that she would be that addicted at that age. It's certainly possible, and also very funny, but I did raise my eyebrow at just how nuts for coffee she was.

Scorp is so sweet! I wish he would just tell her, and I also raised my eyebrow at how every other guy liked Rose. Is it Trio love or is she really that pretty? (Okay, I always think that in next gens, but it is still a good question.)

I want to know the food spell, but I was wondering if that was affected by Gamp's Law of Elemental Transfiguration (5 things you can't transfigure, food, money, internal body organs like George's ear, human bodies, and some other unmentioned thing) because that might be transfiguration... I have no clue what it is, but I was a bit unsure of whether that could be a realistic spell.

Itty bitty grumble, Loran and Lysander are twins, well at least I'm pretty sure they are. Not sure where Jo said that, but I am fairly sure she did say that they are twins. Speaking of Lysander, I laughed so hard when Rose was amused by his name. it is a fairly amusing name come to think of it!

I loved loved loved how Scorp noticed the color of her eyes too! Oh they are just so sweet... and I love how you have Scorp being the one who is waiting for Rose to realize he likes her. They are both adorable, and I'm really starting to like them a lot.

Grammar was good, few typos, but nothing to worry about, and I was very fond of this chapter. This was a little bumpier than the first two chapters, but I still think it was an enjoyable read without any real flow issues.

I've really enjoyed reading this and I hope you have a wonderful day,
-ginger =]

Author's Response: Hi! Thanks for the wonderful reviews!
The Quidditch thing... I was planning on changing that when I had a minute. In my original plan, it was going to factor in, but I've decided to change it.
Coffee... I was addicted at 13... oh well.
I know, I love Scorp. Everyone doesn't really like Rose, Scorpius is just really paranoid, and sees her in the best light. A lot of people like her because she is pretty, and because of the Trio, but her true friends like her for who she is.
Lorcan and Lysander, yeah, I read somewhere that they were, I will probably change that too, thanks!
They're such cuties. However, they really need to get out of my brain during school. I'll be taking notes about sentence structure, and then I'm writing about Al and Liz :D
Thank you so much! I'll be sure to re-request.
-Olwyn

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Hello again, gingersnape here with your review!

I liked how Rose and Scorpius turned out to be friends even though their parents were only slightly against each other. I also liked how Al and Dom didn't seem to have the attention span to hear about Hogwarts, since they have heard all about the houses from their older siblings. Exploding snap was a nice touch. :)

As for CC, I don't have much other than a slightly nit pickey comment on POVs. Just having "Rose," and "Scorpius," felt a little confusing, so in the future, I would add a line break or say, "Rose POV," or anything really. Just a little something to watch. :)

Again, I really didn't spot many problems with spelling or grammar; I think this was a nice pace and it felt like a fluid chapter, and I liked how Scorp went to Gryffindor. It's different, and certainly not boring.

Can't wait to see what you have in store next,
-ginger

Author's Response: Hi again :D
Thanks! I'm glad you picked up on that, Rose and Scorpius kind of have the bond of being the oldest/only child, as opposed to Dom and Al, who are the middle children.
Got it, thanks! I'll add that.
Thanks, I love firstie Rose, she's so cute. She kinda hangs out in my brain. I'll probably write another chapter in first year at some point.
Thank you for reading/reviewing! :D

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LOVE LOVE LOVE BRAIN TWIN. especially when he was all like sad about them fancying each other and rose's first real kiss.
Rose hates roses. Haha. that made me laughed.
keep up the amazing work, Olwyn!
-your lime green brain twin:D

Author's Response: Ha, thanks :D
Aww, Scorpius is a sweetie. Just wait until you hear what happens with Al and Liz! You will spaz a spazzy :D I got the idea during AP US history today, and I almost jumped out of my seat, I was so happy.

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OHMYGOD THIS WAS INCREDIBLE! i just LOVE LOVE LOVE scorpius! my favorite part?

She’s all pressed up against me, Merlin I love this girl. Her hair is so soft, and the fact that her face is pressed into my chest is so natural, we fit so well. Hey, when did she get so… curvy? Ok, calm down Scorp. Let’s think of something other than Rose’s chest. How about her shirt?
I WANT TO RIP IT OFF!

I laughed out loud. Brilliant, girl, Brilliant. Im going to keep reading now!
-your brain twin :D

Author's Response: HAHAHAHA I loved writing that part. I had to call my best guy friend and have a long chat :D He's kind of the inspiration for this part...
Yeah, it kind of scares me who I'm friends with too.

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Gingersnape from the forums here with your review!

I have to say, this was a very well done prologue, They can be very difficult to pull off, especially considering how difficult next gens are to start, but I really thought this was overall very good.

I think having it set just after the epilogue was nice because it didn't require much explanation, but the amount of references to characters you had was nice. Having the slight introductions was a good way to start the story and keep it short and simple.

I have to say, this felt a little rushed, which is fine for prologues since they are short, simple, and don't always have much description, but I think it might flow better if it were slowed down.

I can't wait to see more about Scorp, and I don't know why you were wondering if it was boring; I can't wait to read on. By the way, for 2AM (I'm more of a midnight person, but if you're more 2am, that's cool!) I really didn't catch many spelling and grammar mistakes. Overall, it was well done and I'm interested to read on.
-ginger

Author's Response: Thanks! I really wanted to do that as a jumping off point, from Rose's perspective though.
Ok, thanks for the note!! I'll be sure to slow it down a little.
Ha, yeah, 2AM is my muse-time. Thank spellcheck for the lack of blabbering :D

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I liked this chapter especially the part about Switzerland that was cute. :)

Author's Response: Thanks!
That's Matt for you :D

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Love it! Love it! Love it! Here's one of my favorite quotes;

“For the last time, Al, I DON’T BLOODY KNOW when the GLORIOUS Liz is coming for breakfast!!”

“Oh. Well, do you have an estimate?”

Author's Response: I love Al :D thanks, i love favorite quotes :D

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This is really quite good and you wrote Scorpius really well. I like Rose and I like coffee. So this is great!

Author's Response: BAHA thanks :D

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I'm glad you made Rose and Albus in Gryffindor. I don't really like it when they try to place them in either Ravenclaw or Slytherien. So far I'm enjoying this story so I'm going to keep reading! :)

Author's Response: Aww, thanks! I don't really mind them as other Houses, but the way I have written them, they're not either of those... :D

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Hello it is me! *takes a bow so low that her nose touches the ground*.

I was interested in your story description and so I decided I would check it out. So far.Very good! I like it I'll keep reading.
:)

Author's Response: Hi! Fellow Stephen King lover... :D
Great, thank you! I'm glad, love those reviews :D

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hello brain twin :)
favorite part?

I will admit it. I love her. IloveherIloveherIloveher. I LOVE HER.
Happy?
Good. Now shut up.

that was amazing! poor scorpius though... he loves her and she does not notice :(
this story is so awesome! im going to keep keep reading :D
-your brain twin

Author's Response: hey there brain twin my brain twin :D
omygosh thank you! I LOVE THAT PART haha. if i do say so myself. which i do.
BAH. she'll come around. i hope. she should, i'm the puppet master... lol im sounding a little caffinated/creepy now. better stop.
-brain twin your brain twin.

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I love your story!!! However, I would have to say I'm rooting for Scorpius. Can't wait to read about what happens in Hogsmeade!! :) :)

Author's Response: Thanks! I think we all are, haha.
I tried writing it in only Rose's perspective, and then Cody seems like a much better person. It's only because Scorpius hates him so much that we all hate him :D IT'S ALL PART OF MY PLAN! MWAHAHA
Sorry. A pinch too much coffee...

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I'M CONFUSED SO ROSE FANCIES CODY, CODY FANCIES HER AND SCORPIUS FANCIES ROSE SO WHO SHE GONNA GO 4! I HOPE IT'S NOT CODY, DON'T HATE ME I'M JUST NOT A BIG FAN OF HIM

Author's Response: Yeah, you've got the right ships down.
They're only in third year, so some time for major drama to go down. :D

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