This was a really cute one-shot! Poor Lucy! I really felt bad for her by the end of the story. :(
I liked the idea you had for this. I hate it when my nose itches and I can't scratch it! I liked how oyu used that idea and made a story out of it! It was really interesting!
Your flow was good and the story didn't seem to go to fast or too slow. The sentences seemed to go together, and I especially enjoyed the last sentence! A crybaby AND a nosepicker would be horrible for oyur first week of school!
I thought that you captured the thoughts of an 11 year old really well! Lucy just seemed so young and innocent and full of dreams about becoming Head Girl, which I really liked! You did really well with her!
Overall, I thought this was a really great idea and an interesting story. Great job! :)Author's Response: I'm glad that you liked it, I was worried that it wouldn't go over well because it is a rather strange idea and all, but that doesn't seem to be the case. But anyways, I'm glad that the flow was on and that she seemed to be behaving right for an eleven year old, it was hard to write someone so immature!
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I can sort of relate to this as my nose is perpetually itchy, it drives me insane. And there really is no discreet way to itch it. Rubbing it from the outside does absolutely nothing.
Poor Lucy! You really captured her character beautifully in this. I love how the smallest of problems seem monumental to her. How she thinks that her parents will kill her and she will have to leave Hogwarts. That is so cute! I really got that childish innocence from her in this and I was laughing in some places, not because I was laughing at her or anything, I just thought that parts of this were so cute!
I don't know if you know any people around her age in this, but you must, because you got her character so right, it's insane.
I don't know what else to say! You took such a simply idea and made it something so cute and something really special. And, on such a small idea, you managed to really capture a character's feelings and emotions.
It was brilliant. And a wonderful entry for the challenge, hope you enjoyed it!
Joop :]Author's Response: I thought that this was a story that everyone could relate to, because I don't think there is a single person who hasn't been in that situation.
I'm glad that you liked Lucy's character, eleven year olds are still pretty immature, and seeing the way she was raised I could see her being worried about everything. And I worked with 11 year olds at camp, so I do know a bunch of kids her age.
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Hmm that was .. Special :) but in a good way!Author's Response: Thanks for the review. :) Report Review
Awh, poor first year Lucy!
The beginning made me giggle, because I think we've all been at that point, where our noise itches and everyone wishes and hopes the itch will just go away. I loved this line too '...but she knew if her father found out she’d been caught nose picking in the library she’d never be allowed back to Hogwarts. Lucy really liked Hogwarts.' It's such a funny first year worry.
Of course come the end I felt bad for her, I can assume no one wants to earn the name 'nosepicker' first week into classes. I'd also like to mention that Lucy seemed very first year, which is something you don't often see executed successfully.
This was a cute little read, darling! I enjoyed it.
xx.Author's Response: I thought that this was such a common situation that so many people get stuck in, and I was trying to look at it from an eleven year old's view point. I'm glad that I managed to make her come across as a believable first year, I was worried she'd seem too young but I was trying to remember myself at eleven! But of course, no one wants to be a nosepicker!
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