oooh, a Slytherin treasure. Wonder what it could be... (:
~KhanhAuthor's Response: You'll have to wait and see! I think this is the first review for this chapter, so thanks! :) Report Review
Nice chapter, but there are a few flaws. It's just very unlikely that James would leave his precious invisibility cloak lying around and that Lily would use it twice. Also I'm not sure the Mirror of Erised was at Hogwarts for twenty years... since Harry also found it in his first year.
Aside from all that, it was a pretty enjoyable chapter... Good job! (:
~KhanhAuthor's Response: Thanks for reviewing!
Well, for flaw 1, James might've been accidentally caught by Filch and left it there by accident (or he could just be incredibly forgetful) and for flaw 2 Harry found the mirror in his first year, and it may have been there before, but even if it wasn't it was just a plot device anyway :)
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Interesting but rather short. I think there's something you should correct, though... Hogwarts starts on September 1st, so Remus can't possibly turn into a werewolf without a full moon! (:
~KhanhAuthor's Response: Thanks for the help - I'll change the full moon thing when the next chapter's validated :) Report Review
Great idea for a story... Are you going to tell it all the way from Lily’s first to seventh years?
~KhanhAuthor's Response: That's the plan! I'm writing the second year at the moment :)
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Some fanfiction creeps me out but yours is actually good, congrats :)Author's Response: Thanks! I really appreciate your review! It's nice to know people like my writing. :D Report Review
Very well written! Few grammar mistakes and it was pretty true to the books yet, original. I like it so far and thanks for reviewing my book, please read more!Author's Response: Ahh, thank you! I try to stay close to the canon. I'll read more of your writing! Report Review
Ooo! I love it! please make more! :) It's too good to ignore!Author's Response: Glad you like it. Report Review
I'm a little confused because it seems to me that Chapter 2 and Chapter 3 are the wrong way around. Chapter 2 says that Lily has been sorted into Gryffindor but Chapter 3 is about the sorting :S I'm not sure if I'm reading it wrongly but I thought I should let you know.
Anyway, I really like this story and am waiting for the next chapters! x xAuthor's Response: Oops! Yeah, somehow they got validated the wrong way round but it's fine, just remember to read them the right way. In the meantime could you maybe tell me how to fix it? Thanks. Report Review
Good!, I like it. Bellatrix is very much in character. Though it got a little confusing with them being in Gryffindor common room and then being sorted the next day. Your off to a strong start though, can't wait to see where you end up soon.
My next chapter sound be validated soon! I can't wait. :)Author's Response: Thanks! Obviously they ended up the wrong way round but it's fine. Remember to read it the right way. Thank you! :) Report Review
Ooh! I'm very interested now, especially since no-one supposedly found out about Remus being a werewolf until third year. :)Author's Response: Thanks! I really glad you like it. Report Review
Awesome! The sorting hat song was perfectly wonderful, and so was the sorting. I loved that part when the Muggle-born scoffed, "What’s it gonna do, sing?" and then it did. Please, please, write more!Author's Response: Yippee doo! Thankyou so much! I'm very glad you liked it, and believe me, I WILL write more chapters!
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Ehmagawd I love it! Bellatrix is so in character! Also love the 'Lofty Lily' part. Puh-lease write more, can't wait for the next chapter. And is Alice the future Alice Longbottom? Just wondering. But great piece of work, keep writing!Author's Response: Thankyou so much for leaving a review! It was really nice of you, and it made me so happy that you liked it!
My second chapter has literally just been validated, so if you like that too, then please leave another comment.
Thanks SO much,
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