That was sweet :) That was Harry's mother, wasn't it?
10/10 :) ~FloraAuthor's Response: Yes, it was Lily! I never directly said that it was her but I'm glad that you worked it all out. Thanks for the review! Report Review
This was mind-blowingly unique. And not only that, but you've also managed to have such a lovely style in such a shortened word count. I mean... wow. Can I say that again? Wow. How but once more... Wow. WOW. WOW.
OK, so, letting me move on from single syllable words, I really loved this. Like, really. Because your style is so flawless throughout, the words just seem to ebb and flow and melt into each other. It really is quite stunning. I'm especially impressed that you managed to do all this in such a short word count. Again, very impressed.
And the originality! This was... um... wow. And I don't have any original words to use for your original story, but it really was gorgeous.
And this LINE! It made me melt a little: "Death is a beautiful place."
I believe this is when I should go back into my kitchen to fetch a towel for all the drool over my keyboard. Excuse me.
xx RinAuthor's Response: This review totally made my morning.
I'm really glad that you liked this, because it was something different and not like most of my other things, and I wasn't really sure if it was a hit or a miss. It was something that really stuck with me though, so I ended up throwing it up anyways. But I worked really hard to use the right 500 words, so I'm glad that it came together well.
Thanks soo much!
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Wow. I thought this was really beautiful, especially since it was only 500 words long. Sometimes I think that the shorter the story is, the more beutiful and touching it can be made.
I could really feek what Lily was feeling through out this whole thing. I loved hwo she kept mentioning that in death, people are free andhave no fears at all. It just gives me a wonderful image of it.
Overall, I thougt this was perfect. I love hearing stories about people watchign and thinking about their loved ones from heavan. :)Author's Response: I really struggled to make this 500 words, I had to keep cutting things out and finding simpler ways to say things! The less words the more important each one of them are! I'm glad that you liked the feelings and the ideas, I tried to capture the fact that when people leave us they go to a better place.
Thanks for the review! Report Review
Seeing as I could not see about who the story was about I had just to read this so I could satisfy my curiosity. This story almost made me cry which is a huge thing because Iíve only really cried once by a story and nothing else made me almost cry before. You wrote this so beautifull and I could feel the fact you poured so much emotion in this. So well done !Author's Response: I'm really glad that you liked it! I tried to make the summary and such a little ambiguous because it was hard to put it in a way that sounded good and made sense. Thank you for the review! Report Review
I have to say, this was really wonderful, and rather touching. You used the picture perfectly, and it made me want to cry. I like thinking of the afterlife as a place like that, where you can just be at peace. It sounds nice.
Just amazing imagery and use of words. I loved this. Thanks so much for entering it in my challenge. :D
10/10Author's Response: I saw that picture and I was instantly inspired, and I'm glad that you liked it. It took me ages to get the words right, so I'm glad that it seemed to work out well! Report Review
I commend you, not many stories make me cry, so well done. it was so beautiful, not drawn out and there was some heart felt emotion in there. well done. its such a lovely image, sitting on the end of the universe, i hope the after life is like that, waiting for the others.
from a very tear full
P.S so okay maybe HPHPP and HPHD made me cry and The Constant Princess. but well done all the sameAuthor's Response: I'm glad that it managed to make you cry, I was trying to get as much emotion in as possible in a short story. But I hope that afterlife is like that as well, it'd be wonderful. Thanks for the review! Report Review
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