LoL. It does happen to be very weird. I like it, good idea. Cool dream.

Author's Response: it is very weird, but it has helped me with my dream sequences

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WOW ! I like this a lot its really good , your use of the visions was really engaging . I just stared a new story called whispers in the night and the next chapter of watching you fade is in validation ! Love always Serena x

Author's Response: nice, thanks for your thoughts

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as I read I know you had bad punctuation and spelling.
it seems as if your English is not very well, and so I recommend a beta.
and you were bad with sexuality. for instance, you used he and she for the same person, which isn't really possible..
I believe to be a good author and earn respect, at least in your writing, you need to write your best, especially here.
I actually liked the plot, but it was a bit pointless, yet the point was really clear?
I liked it.

7/10

-htt.

Author's Response: thanks i have some bad habits that i need to resolve, i often type she instead of she. really the plot was pointless, i just had the erg to do something pointless. over the past six months i have been improving vastly, i can tell when i read some of my first stuff i'm like oh dear. thanks for your suggestions, i will endeavour to get a beta.

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