Ookk, my dear.i feeel as if your chapters are tooo short...and quite bland i might add.there's nothing to captivate my hungry mind.i will say that you're not that bad of a writer i've seen worse...but liven your chapters up...make them longer.read some completed works that may help you give some ideas for writing...God knows that always helps me.also..i feel as if your original characters dont have enough emotions...AND draco and lin were going at it WAY to fast.thats just not typically realistic!Author's Response: Oke, thanks, I know. It is only me first story and I had thought already about Draco/Lin... But it is written and read over a 1000 times, so it is hard to change. I do read a lot of other people's stuff. Report Review
Heeheehee, love the story. :)
(But it's romance, & you know I'm not a big fan of romance. :3).
But, anyways, great job on your English, H. :)Author's Response: Thank you...
I like your stories as well, I think... Report Review
well the story fints the title perfetly.
it is indeed a complicated love story.
lin with draco
lin with david
lin with blaise
david with ginny
harry with ginny
ron with hermione
i can wait to see how you make
the love between draco and hermione happen
keep on writing,
leilaAuthor's Response: Thank you, I will keep writing! Report Review
it was a good chapter, but I dont see yet any connection between Draco and Hermione, and Draco id really mean to her, would she still like him if he treats her bad and call her names?
but still I like the characters that you brought
and keep on writing.Author's Response: Yeah, well the story isn't finished yet, is it...? ;)
Thank you! Report Review
Yesh. It's me again. ;D
Heehee. (X, in case you still haven't figured it out. o_O).
Heh heh. ^^Author's Response: Oke, thanks for reviewing! Report Review
PWNsome story, XP.
Awesome. ;DAuthor's Response: Hello Xue/Bloop,
thanks for your...weird... review!
Hope you'll join us.
-Xxx- SLG Report Review
Interesting...very interesting...Can we have more description of Lin? I'd like to know what she looks like.
Great job so far,
LunaGirlAuthor's Response: Thanks! I will tell some more about Lin in the next chapter.
This is my first story for HPFF.
I hope it will be very succesfull!
sweet_lovely_girl Report Review
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