I enjoyed this story :-)
I really belive that your writing dramatically improved as the story went on. At the start the story was all about how physical they were, one aspect of them and its as if ur writing mirrored that, but as it went on nd their relationship developed, grew and deepened.. So did your writing and i think you described things much better too :-)
I do think you described their more intimate moments very well and got the passion and urgency accross acuratly though:-)
I loved the ending, how they got together, the last chapter before the epilogue was deffinatly my favourite!
Well done :-) Report Review
The end was amazing, brought a tear to my eye! Report Review
AAAH! Because, damn the worlds formalities to hell, *tackles with a big bear hug* The speech during his birthday got to me so I started smiling and crying at the same time.
THEN, when he held her hand I started grinning like a dolt. Now, I'm grinning wider then the Cheshire Cat(from Alice in Wonderland) and I have an urge to tell you I love you.
I think you should definitely keep writing more stuff, you are a brilliant writer and you know how to capture readers. This was spectacular. Really, hats off. Report Review
This chapter has been my favourite so far, definitely. You deserve more viewers and though I usually just read a story and review the last chapter, your story is too good not to review every sensational chapter. Report Review
Happy and sad. I feel like a contradiction at this moment, you're still brilliant though. :D Report Review
Yeah, you do that. Go ahead. You already ripped my heart out, start stomping on it. *sigh* Report Review
Just...tears. You are, I say this every chapter, but BRILLIANT. Report Review
OOH. She's preggers! You are bloody fabulous. Just, ah! Report Review
You, my dearest, play with my feelings! Your story makes me laugh and frown and then just scream 'NO' when James falls. And lets just not mention the...colourful...swearing at Slytherin winning. As always, amazing. Report Review
You can already tell she's falling for him. You are truly such a talented writer...I love how you let the feelings linger and then just give such expressive detail to the emotions. Especially Lily's! Amazing job. Report Review
SHEER BRILLIANCE. Strange thing about it is, as you go on reading, you can actually imagine all of it happening! Report Review
I love this. I am reading this for the second time except this time I actually have an account here.
This is intriguing, feisty, sexy and just brilliant. Report Review
Brilliant ending. You write beautifully.Author's Response: Thank you! Report Review
i like the way you write the intimate scenes, they aren't raunchy or uncomfortably explicit..it's the right amount of detail that doesn't make one cringe at james and lily's..activities lol great job (:Author's Response: Thanks! I definitely aimed for that medium, I'm glad I succeeded! Report Review
pretty intense so far, i like it! i'm very glad i stumbled upon your story, only the second chapter and i'm already hooked! :DAuthor's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it! Report Review
Very good story i enjoyed it immensly , loved detail very good writerAuthor's Response: Thank you! Report Review
OMG! i'm so glad i didn't sleep and read this instead!
this is amazing, spectacular, awesome, fantastic and fabulous(any other adjective? do add) its sweet and romantic and even almost completely realistic. You truly are a wonderful writer. Amazing work, love. :D keep writing.Author's Response: AH! Thank you! I'm sorry you lost sleep, but I'm glad you enjoyed it! Report Review
I hope you read this and know how beautiful your writing is. Convincing and lovable and awesome.
The ending! Ah! So touching. :)
thank youAuthor's Response: No, thank YOU for taking the time out to review! It really makes my day! Report Review
This was a wonderful story! I loved how it was only about them and there love and not any side things. I think the last chapter was the most beautiful of all the chapters and I think it really captured there love. It was brilliant story with a brilliantly well written end and probably one of my favorite James/Lily stories because of how romantic it was. Thank you so much for the story! You are an excellent writer and storyteller. Though this story was not what I expected it to be, it was perect and much better.Author's Response: Thank you so, so much for this sweet review! :) Report Review
omg I just finished the story and I'm crying. The story is so good, but I keep on remembering what's going to happen to them and it's just soo sad :'(
But you wrote it really well. I LOVED it! :')Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it! Report Review
Wow, loved it! This is simply amazing! Really!Author's Response: Thank you! Report Review
This story was absolutely incredible!!! You are a fabulous and I hope my stories can half a quarter of your talent. I cannot wait to read more.Author's Response: Thank you! Report Review
DEFINITELY THE MOST AMAZING L/J FIC I HAVE EVER READ!
I just wish there was more!Author's Response: Thank you! Report Review
There's a few undeniable facts. It was unique. It was well-written. It was both harsh and tender.
But there's a few undeniable opinions. I don't know how you did it, but underneath everything that was happening at any time, a bit of wisdom flew down and it was eye-opening in the midst of the story. If you don't believe me, reread it objectively. I promise, it's there. It astounded me.
It wasn't what I thought it would be, although it did follow the typical pattern with James and Lily (not that I'm complaining).
Bravo to you. Report Review
It took so long for her to say it because she had to find it in herself, and that was one thing she couldn't bear to do.
Bravo to you. Report Review
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