Not bad, not bad at all. I actually love this song, though it reminds me more of Snape's feelings (for a lack of a better word) after Lily died/picked James over him. But this wasn't bad. You're a really good writer. Can't wait to read more of your stories!Author's Response: Ah! I'm sorry this response is so late, but thank you so much!
I had SUCH a hard time choosing who would be the male character in this and debated it with a couple others before deciding, but he totally would have fit this well also!
I'm so pleased you took the time to review and that you liked the writing. Thank you again!!! :) Report Review
Oi! Jill! I should not have to find out that you have a new songfic by stalking your author's page! *glares* (:
I rather enjoyed this one-shot; I'm not usually a Sirius/Lily shipper either, but I think in this writing it feels natural. Sirius' internal monologue- I mean, wow!- and his thoughts and feelings are so real that the writing is brilliant. :)
It's the tiny little details that you choose to include that make it a really wonderful one shot, and I feel that by the end I can understand Sirius. My favorite line by far was:
"A call echoed behind him, but the voice wasn't hers, so he didn't look back."
That encompasses so much emotion and tells the reader such a history of thought simply through a few words- congratulations. :) You should be proud ^ 293232 for such an epic line. *hug tackles*
Yay! So a totally useless review I suppose, but it was amazing and I wanted you to know. :)
Cheers-Author's Response: Oi! Laura! I haven't talked to you on chat since this got posted, so I couldn't tell you! :P But I'm glad to know you stalk my author page, rofl :P
I'm glad you enjoyed it! I love this song and after some consultation changed the ship from James/Lily to Sirius, which I'm quite pleased with. I feel like the tiny details I include are important, and it seems to me that a lot of authors skip that, believing that we just know what they're seeing.
And I guess emotional detail is my thing :P
Definitely not a useless review! You made my day!! I'm so so so glad you enjoyed this! :D Thanks so much! Report Review
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