This is a really beautiful story, and so well laid out. The interaction and emotional tension you've embedded in the description is just fantastic.
Great job! :] Report Review
Hey, I'm here from the forums with your review. (:
Okay. So I'll start with my own things first, then I'll get to your specific questions and whatnot.
So firstly, I have to say... Wow. This almost moved me to tears, honestly. It's so beautifully written, and it's heartbreaking.
It's really sweet, their love for each other, but at the same time so sad. ): I could feel for both of them, even though they both made mistakes, both cheated... Gah. It's still depressing as anything.
I like the use of 'she' and 'he', rather then their names. It adds a different feeling to the whole thing, makes it more real.
The only thing I'd change would be the bits where you have all caps, make them italics. Maybe it's just me, but it got a bit confusing and took away from the story.
The part about the ring. Oh my word, it was so sad. I thought they were going to get together, even though I knew they weren't. And then they didn't. And... Gah. Just... You wrote that really well.
No, it's not really confusing, though I have to ask-why did she have the changes of heart? She was sorry, then mad, then sorry... And she wanted to be with him, then not, then she did. It was just a bit... Not exactly confusing, but hard to follow.
I really enjoyed this! Thanks for reviewing. (:
-Jasmine Report Review
Oh, I just love Daphne/Draco/Astoria fics! And there aren't that many around, either, so it's great to find such a brilliant one :) Seriously, I just loved it. Your characterisations seemed accurate, I loved the plot, and your writing was just beautiful. I especially loved that last line, it was a really powerful way to finish it. 9/10. Report Review
AMAZING! I never thought I'd sympathize with Malfoy... though in the new movie he is incredibly hot... lol! Great job! Keep writing PLEEZ!!! :O) Report Review
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